The Animal Farm
a contest entry9 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
So the animals knew there was a problem--it just took the humans a long time to figure it out! Thank you for the political satire in a 5-7-5, and best of luck to us all. Special good wishes to you in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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So the animals knew there was a problem--it just took the humans a long time to figure it out! Thank you for the political satire in a 5-7-5, and best of luck to us all. Special good wishes to you in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Much obliged my friend, very kind of you, thank you very much.
Comment from Bill Schott
This political 5-7-5, The Animal Farm, has the correct format and sends the allegorical tale back into reality with the do-nothing Congress made up of elitist Republicans and a can't shoot-straight Democrat potted plant party.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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This political 5-7-5, The Animal Farm, has the correct format and sends the allegorical tale back into reality with the do-nothing Congress made up of elitist Republicans and a can't shoot-straight Democrat potted plant party.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Hello Bill, I thank you for your time and the insights, take care my friend.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written political 5-7-5 poem. The political world seems to be the most crazy and corrupt field of career path that anyone can ever choose.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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A very well-written political 5-7-5 poem. The political world seems to be the most crazy and corrupt field of career path that anyone can ever choose.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Hello Sandra, I am glad you like the write; I thank you for your time and the insights.
Comment from Sis Cat
Yes, when elephants are brain dead and donkeys bray, a despotic Napoleon reigns. This is a fine, satirical political 5-7-5 that speaks for our times.
In terms of structure, the middle line is a bit confusing because I initially thought you meant the braying donkeys were despotic. But upon second thought I realized you meant "despotic Napoleon reigns." Your poem might be clearer if you used one subject and verb per line, and reduce the number of adjectives. Paint pictures using concrete imagery.
Nonetheless, you wrote an apt Political 5-7-5 for our times.
Thank you for sharing. I wish you contest success with your fine entry.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Yes, when elephants are brain dead and donkeys bray, a despotic Napoleon reigns. This is a fine, satirical political 5-7-5 that speaks for our times.
In terms of structure, the middle line is a bit confusing because I initially thought you meant the braying donkeys were despotic. But upon second thought I realized you meant "despotic Napoleon reigns." Your poem might be clearer if you used one subject and verb per line, and reduce the number of adjectives. Paint pictures using concrete imagery.
Nonetheless, you wrote an apt Political 5-7-5 for our times.
Thank you for sharing. I wish you contest success with your fine entry.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Hello Andre, my friend, I appreciate your time and the constructive review; thank you very much.
Comment from Sherman541
Great title for the world of politics. I like what your statement of your 5/7/5 states. Very clever. Good Luck and Best Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Great title for the world of politics. I like what your statement of your 5/7/5 states. Very clever. Good Luck and Best Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Hello Sherman, I appreciate your visit and the kind review; thank you very much.
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You are very welcome :)
Comment from Debbie Pope
This is a great entry for the political commentary category. Very ingenious. You nailed those donkeys and elephants. The Napoleon reference is good as well. I love your drawing. Good job and good luck.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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This is a great entry for the political commentary category. Very ingenious. You nailed those donkeys and elephants. The Napoleon reference is good as well. I love your drawing. Good job and good luck.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Hello Debbie; I appreciate your visit and the thoughtful review; thank you very much.
Comment from Linda Kay
Oh, there is some deep satire and sadly deep truths in comparison to our current political climate. I enjoyed reading both your poem, and the discussion questions from Animal Farm. Very good way to present your poem.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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Oh, there is some deep satire and sadly deep truths in comparison to our current political climate. I enjoyed reading both your poem, and the discussion questions from Animal Farm. Very good way to present your poem.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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Hello Linda, very kind of you to visit; I appreciate your time and the thoughtful review; thank you very much.
Comment from F Scott Hafner
Questions assume I have read Animal Farm lately. I have not and assume most are the same. Seems limited to a very limited audience - maybe convey the lessons of animal farm? I suspect your view is quite sophisticated but it is not possible for others to see that.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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Questions assume I have read Animal Farm lately. I have not and assume most are the same. Seems limited to a very limited audience - maybe convey the lessons of animal farm? I suspect your view is quite sophisticated but it is not possible for others to see that.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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Hello Frank, I thank you for your constructive review.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Political 5-7-5 writing prompt.
Well said in so few well chosen words.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the Political 5-7-5 writing prompt.
Well said in so few well chosen words.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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Hello Sharon, I appreciate your visit and am glad that you like the write; thank you very much.