Comment from TPAC

Excellent

Wonderful lip on you. I loved the conclusion very powerful and poetic, enjoying the glistening island setting, in my opinion well spoken.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018

Hi TPAC , Thank you for ypur great review I like the lip comment, sometimes I have to button it though LOL .It was a lovely moment when I wrote these words ai do love Bali Cheers

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written free verse poem about a holiday in Bali. It seems to be a great place to enjoy when on holiday to swim carefree in the ocean and a peaceful time in paradise.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018

Hi Sandra, Thanks and yes I did have this moment in Bali As much as it is a busy place I find some spots peacful and relaxing Cheers

Comment from jenintorre

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your free verse poem. So very descriptive that I felt that I was there. Love the picture. I wish you lots of luck in the competition.

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018

Hi Jenitore Thanks you so much for reading and reviewing my freestyle poem for this contest. I wrote this while sitting on the beach under the palm trees and looking at the sea and hearing the doves and then went for a swim I love Bali Cheers Christine

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

Excellent free verse/prose/poem that gives the reader a clear picture and takes her to another place. You create vivid images that makes me feel like I am in the water and swimming with the dolphins.

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018

Hi Mermaids, Thank you for reading my poem I have had to rearrange the presentation hopefully will meet contest requirement The words are the same but just a different way to show them Cheers

Comment from charlene7190

Good

Very descriptive, it put me right there and I wanted also to just dive in. I think (and I'm certainly not an expert) that fronze should be fronds. You might want to check that. Other than that, I loved it.

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018

Hi Charlene Thanks for your review and spelling lesson yes it is fronds LOL I wondered and should have checked before posting Cheers

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

I think this is a good entry for the 'Free Verse' writing prompt.
Your lovely verse matches the beautiful picture perfectly.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018

Ho Sharon Thanks for ypur review I jave made some presentation changes to hopefully meet freestyle requirement and make it more structured LOL hope it is better now Words stil the same though I love Bali

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

The next time you go, take me with you. You make it sound like paradise. I live on the beach in Florida, but Bali sounds nicer. Unlike a lot of Floridians, I don't head for the north when I vacation.

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018

Hi Thomas, Yes going again in July so pack ypur bathers LOL I enjoy my Bali holidays and this was a reflection on day sitting on the beach before a swim Cheers

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

This is wonderful and I have been to Bali and it is a beautiful tropical lace with white sandy beaches. Your write takes me back to my wonderful holiday there, in the last paragraph you have 'my' twice, easily fixed, a delight to read, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018

Hi Dolly, Thanks for your review I have been 4 times and again this hear in July ( My froend and I have brought into a time share in Nusa Dua so we had our first holiday there in 2017 back again this July Ya Cheers

reply by Dolly'sPoems on 01-Feb-2018

Four times? You are the lucky one! Love Dolly x