How Long Lingering?
You never know how long it will last60 total reviews
Comment from RICH01
Your poem is so sweet and so sad. Very well written with a very careful and well selected choice of words. The ending is dramatic and makes the poem what it is.
Rich01 1-7-2017
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Your poem is so sweet and so sad. Very well written with a very careful and well selected choice of words. The ending is dramatic and makes the poem what it is.
Rich01 1-7-2017
Comment Written 08-Jan-2017
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Thank you so very much for your kindness. Blessings
Comment from Poetic Friend
Apparently, the relationship did not last long from what I gather from this poem. In its brevity, you told a story, one that lasted five days.
Great use of word economy. You made each syllable count.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Apparently, the relationship did not last long from what I gather from this poem. In its brevity, you told a story, one that lasted five days.
Great use of word economy. You made each syllable count.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
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You are soooo correct. It didn't last long at all. Thank you for writing...blessings.
Comment from TAB_that's me
a romance poem with the romance in a different way - one where the flower was the ending, not the beginning.
Perfect syllable count. Good luck in the contest.
teresa
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a romance poem with the romance in a different way - one where the flower was the ending, not the beginning.
Perfect syllable count. Good luck in the contest.
teresa
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Good point, friend. Thank you for reading this.
Comment from Thesis
Hmmm, sounds like a quick romance or infatuation. I like the title, it speaks volumes when added with the body of the work. You defined the time and showed a resolution to the beautiful beginning.
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Hmmm, sounds like a quick romance or infatuation. I like the title, it speaks volumes when added with the body of the work. You defined the time and showed a resolution to the beautiful beginning.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Thanks so much for reading and writing this, I appreciated your comments.
Comment from MelB
A very romantic and alluring 5-7-5 poem. Good description and imagery. Spot on syllable count. I'm curious to know why he didn't stay.
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A very romantic and alluring 5-7-5 poem. Good description and imagery. Spot on syllable count. I'm curious to know why he didn't stay.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
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I think he didn't stay because he realized she deserved more than he could give... blessings
Comment from Drew Delaney
This is quite excellently written. It ends up being sad as he stays only the five days as the scent lingered. Such good imagery in this poem. Drew
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This is quite excellently written. It ends up being sad as he stays only the five days as the scent lingered. Such good imagery in this poem. Drew
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Drew. It is good to hear from you. Thank you for your nice words!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
A lovely 5/7/5 poem with a perfect syllabic count. Nice job with the subject and the presentation. I hope you do well in the contest. I wish you the best.
Gypsy
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A lovely 5/7/5 poem with a perfect syllabic count. Nice job with the subject and the presentation. I hope you do well in the contest. I wish you the best.
Gypsy
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Thanks so very much...I was lucky enough to place 3rd, so I appreciate all you said.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Wow, that's truly a short lived relationship! I've had a few that didn't last much longer, or at least figuratively. Too bad we can't always have the positive attitude you have about it. lol.
Have a great weekend,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Wow, that's truly a short lived relationship! I've had a few that didn't last much longer, or at least figuratively. Too bad we can't always have the positive attitude you have about it. lol.
Have a great weekend,
Rhonda
Comment Written 06-Jan-2017
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Thanks Rhonda...I had a good but COLD weekend...Thank you for writing!
Comment from nomi338
It has been said that some guests, like fish start to smell after a few days. The wise person never stays past the time when their presence starts to grate on their hosts. If you want to be well though of, missed and welcomed back, you must leave before you have to. The last thing in the world you want to have happen is to be asked to leave.
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It has been said that some guests, like fish start to smell after a few days. The wise person never stays past the time when their presence starts to grate on their hosts. If you want to be well though of, missed and welcomed back, you must leave before you have to. The last thing in the world you want to have happen is to be asked to leave.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2017
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I was giggling when I began reading because My Mom said that ALL the time( we had TONS of people at our house all the time).
Comment from misscookie
I love the artwork that you choose to go with your poem
It is a perfect match
The flowers colors are so lovely
You captured my attention from the start
That is one reason I don't care for anyone to give me flowers.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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I love the artwork that you choose to go with your poem
It is a perfect match
The flowers colors are so lovely
You captured my attention from the start
That is one reason I don't care for anyone to give me flowers.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
Comment Written 06-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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What nice words you sent, and I appreciate every one.
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You're very welcome, have a great day.
Cookie