When Blood Collides
Viewing comments for Chapter 57 "Whatever Happened to Mom's Sister? "A family's love is tested.
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Comment from w.j.debi
It is good that Dee and her mother made up before the end. It puts regrets behind them and let's them move forward. You have a great way of putting things in perspective. Lots of good things happening in this chapter.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2015
It is good that Dee and her mother made up before the end. It puts regrets behind them and let's them move forward. You have a great way of putting things in perspective. Lots of good things happening in this chapter.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2015
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Thanks for catching up, debi. I think you meant to say "Dee and her daughter made up." All water over the dam now. :-)
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Indeed I did. I should review late at night, but it is sometimes the only free time I have.
Comment from mermaids
Your Aunt Dee was quite the character. She sounds like a free spirit with some issues. It is fascinating she was into astrology and made a living at it, yet she seem to not take care of her own health.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
Your Aunt Dee was quite the character. She sounds like a free spirit with some issues. It is fascinating she was into astrology and made a living at it, yet she seem to not take care of her own health.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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An uptight free spirit, Elaine. She refused to discuss the past as in childhood memories with my mother. Interesting comment about her failure to use her talent to "predict" what might happen in her own life.
Comment from Donya Quijote
I guess everyone has their moments. I understand about not being able to reconcile. My parents and I never reconciled before they both passed. And then there is that sense I have always had of somehow never really being wanted. I guess that is the residual effect of always knowing I was adopted.
Found this potential nit:
The sentence is awkward. The doctor doesn't know what about beans?
Pooh, your doctor doesn't know from beans. If I'm a diabetic, why didn't my doctor see it?"
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
I guess everyone has their moments. I understand about not being able to reconcile. My parents and I never reconciled before they both passed. And then there is that sense I have always had of somehow never really being wanted. I guess that is the residual effect of always knowing I was adopted.
Found this potential nit:
The sentence is awkward. The doctor doesn't know what about beans?
Pooh, your doctor doesn't know from beans. If I'm a diabetic, why didn't my doctor see it?"
Comment Written 25-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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I'm sorry too. The afterlife will not be easy for your adopted parents since they went with this negative baggage still attached.
Nit: I deleted "about". :-)
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Whatever her nature, this Dee seems to have led a full life one way and another. Well written and the speech so natural, bringing Dee's character to light.
Wow! She worked for Jerry Lewis - I bet he was a hoot (or not?) And I remember David Janssen.
Ha ha - you'd only miss your dentist and doctor - I like that!!
It's sad how so many families when grown up grow apart - I guess I'm lucky in that I am still in touch with my sister and one remaining brother on regular visits, and
my four children and their partners are all close and we meet up for family get-togethers. Hectic but heart-warming.
why didn't my doctor see it?["] - here you've used inverted commas altho nowhere else in this part, so need deleting, Shari.
Why (do) you tire so easily?
a plane for Los Angeles, California, a place where she lived some thirty years ago thinking that was the place to find a rich man to support her forever.
a plane for Los Angeles, California--a place where she lived some thirty years ago--thinking that was the place to find a rich man to support her forever. (What a fantasy!!)
a result. I don't think she was all there.(")
Margaret
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
Whatever her nature, this Dee seems to have led a full life one way and another. Well written and the speech so natural, bringing Dee's character to light.
Wow! She worked for Jerry Lewis - I bet he was a hoot (or not?) And I remember David Janssen.
Ha ha - you'd only miss your dentist and doctor - I like that!!
It's sad how so many families when grown up grow apart - I guess I'm lucky in that I am still in touch with my sister and one remaining brother on regular visits, and
my four children and their partners are all close and we meet up for family get-togethers. Hectic but heart-warming.
why didn't my doctor see it?["] - here you've used inverted commas altho nowhere else in this part, so need deleting, Shari.
Why (do) you tire so easily?
a plane for Los Angeles, California, a place where she lived some thirty years ago thinking that was the place to find a rich man to support her forever.
a plane for Los Angeles, California--a place where she lived some thirty years ago--thinking that was the place to find a rich man to support her forever. (What a fantasy!!)
a result. I don't think she was all there.(")
Margaret
Comment Written 25-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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Thanks, Margaret. I'm flattered you took the time to read this. Sorry to be so tardy in my reply.
Corrections noted.
I don't think she saw much of Jerry, himself. Funny, that I didn't ask her, or if I did, I forgot the answer.
I envy large families. My half-sister Anne had four sons, three of whom gave her seven grandchildren. They all live in California, so again, we don't keep in touch.
Comment from judiverse
This is interesting. The story about Dee is fascinating. Too bad she didn't care to do anything for the family. Apparently her housekeeping and astrology degree gave her entrée into some of the stars' homes. She seemed to hook up with men who were interested in money as she was. I remember David Janssen for his TV work. Loved your line about the only people you'd miss when you moved were your doctor and dentist. judi
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
This is interesting. The story about Dee is fascinating. Too bad she didn't care to do anything for the family. Apparently her housekeeping and astrology degree gave her entrée into some of the stars' homes. She seemed to hook up with men who were interested in money as she was. I remember David Janssen for his TV work. Loved your line about the only people you'd miss when you moved were your doctor and dentist. judi
Comment Written 25-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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Thanks, judi. Dee made a fair living out of reading astrology charts for a hundred dollars back then. Yes, when I move from here, again I will miss my doctor and especially my dentist even though she is expensive!
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You're welcome. I've been with the same GP for over 20 years now. Amazing how he's aged so much. I believe I'll keep him anyway. judi
Comment from Curly Girly
It is such a sad state of affairs when families fall apart. Often, it is the old matriarch, for better or for worse, who keeps them together. Families are so important. They teach us about living within a diverse society while still in the relative safety of our homes.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2015
It is such a sad state of affairs when families fall apart. Often, it is the old matriarch, for better or for worse, who keeps them together. Families are so important. They teach us about living within a diverse society while still in the relative safety of our homes.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2015
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That's a good way to look at it, Nichole. When growing up, I had a lot more contact with my relatives. Gradually, we all went in different directions.
Comment from boxergirl
i liked the recap about Dee. Great dialogue to engage the readers, especially when she moved in with Anne...seemed so typical of Dee's character. 8-)
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
i liked the recap about Dee. Great dialogue to engage the readers, especially when she moved in with Anne...seemed so typical of Dee's character. 8-)
Comment Written 23-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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Thanks, BG. She was somethin' else, that woman.
Comment from Glasstruth
Even though I'm not familiar with most of the chapters from before, this held its own. I could easily get into this and understand it. The characters all have a definite personality. Auntie Dee held the spotlight. The dialogue was quite natural as the story progressed along beautifully. Superb. Les
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
Even though I'm not familiar with most of the chapters from before, this held its own. I could easily get into this and understand it. The characters all have a definite personality. Auntie Dee held the spotlight. The dialogue was quite natural as the story progressed along beautifully. Superb. Les
Comment Written 23-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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Thanks, Les. I think most of the chapters could stand alone. I like to focus on one person in each post. :-)
Comment from Selina Stambi
Shari,
You do have such characters on your family tree, my dear! :)
Aunt Dee is a larger-than-life caricature.
The title is fabulous. When Blood Collides ... Adds high drama to entice a newbie reviewer.
Well done!
Sonali
However, she was paranoid about ... not sure paranoid is the right word here. Obsessive ... perhaps?
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
Shari,
You do have such characters on your family tree, my dear! :)
Aunt Dee is a larger-than-life caricature.
The title is fabulous. When Blood Collides ... Adds high drama to entice a newbie reviewer.
Well done!
Sonali
However, she was paranoid about ... not sure paranoid is the right word here. Obsessive ... perhaps?
Comment Written 22-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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You're right. Obsessive is a better word choice. Thanks for the suggestion and positive review. :-)
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My pleasure, Shari.
Comment from MissMerri
Your writing is excellent. I'm enjoying this story very much and hope the next chapter will be coming soon. I very much liked how you include bits of conversation between family members, even when it has to be imagined. You know the people well, so the reader feels you would know just how they might talk to each other. This story is very interesting and I'm glad I found it to read this sunny morning. (I'm on vacation.)
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
Your writing is excellent. I'm enjoying this story very much and hope the next chapter will be coming soon. I very much liked how you include bits of conversation between family members, even when it has to be imagined. You know the people well, so the reader feels you would know just how they might talk to each other. This story is very interesting and I'm glad I found it to read this sunny morning. (I'm on vacation.)
Comment Written 22-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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I learned early from FS reviews the importance of dialogue in a narrative piece. Yes, the conversations are creative. Who can remember exactly what someone said yesterday let alone years ago. Thanks for popping in. Will start on the next chapter as soon as I get caught up!