Act of Endurance
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Comment from beencounter
This poem appears to describe various aspects in a day of commerce. It doesn't contain a rhythm, but perhaps this is purposeful. A small matter. The phrase in the last stanza is very thought-provoking. To make this poem even better, consider punctuation and tense.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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This poem appears to describe various aspects in a day of commerce. It doesn't contain a rhythm, but perhaps this is purposeful. A small matter. The phrase in the last stanza is very thought-provoking. To make this poem even better, consider punctuation and tense.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Cool advice having pits in my writes, appreciating any constructive comment, thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed response.
Comment from Ima L. Ami
Wow! This is truly an intense poem. Was it written about the Twin Towers? That's what it made me think of. Excellent writing and full of truth. Thanks for sharing these deep and dark thoughts of corruption and greed. This bodes well as a reminder to us all.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Wow! This is truly an intense poem. Was it written about the Twin Towers? That's what it made me think of. Excellent writing and full of truth. Thanks for sharing these deep and dark thoughts of corruption and greed. This bodes well as a reminder to us all.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Yeah! I watched them fall from my window, given events opened Pandora's box, pleased aspects in this write were found appealing to your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and warm sentiments.
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Absolutely my pleasure!
Comment from Christine C Autry
Very impressive. I was interested till the end. Enjoyed reading your words. Lots of feeling in your work. Thank You for sharing. Keep up your talent.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
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Very impressive. I was interested till the end. Enjoyed reading your words. Lots of feeling in your work. Thank You for sharing. Keep up your talent.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
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Glad any aspect about my writes were found appealing, thanking you for your generous rate and warm sentiments.
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You are Welcome.
Comment from Marc Grimaldi
In every age, commerce takes place and greed finds its way in. It is a sad reality that must be endured throughout all of history, and speaks so keenly about the fallen nature of man. Keep up the good writing!
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2019
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In every age, commerce takes place and greed finds its way in. It is a sad reality that must be endured throughout all of history, and speaks so keenly about the fallen nature of man. Keep up the good writing!
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2019
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Glad aspects of this work were found appealing to your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching sentiments.
Comment from prettybluebirds
I found this interesting but rather hard to get the meaning of. I read it three times and am still not sure I understand it completely. Oh well, it is something different from the everyday stuff I usually read on here. The artwork is unique.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2019
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I found this interesting but rather hard to get the meaning of. I read it three times and am still not sure I understand it completely. Oh well, it is something different from the everyday stuff I usually read on here. The artwork is unique.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2019
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I'm attempting to correct my lower aspects in my writes, pits, finding a challenge in my efforts in its seached resolution. Glad aspects in this revision were enough to at least grasp your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed response.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi there,
A very interesting poem. I read it through a few times, and I came away with different thoughts each time - to me that is a sign of a great abstract piece.
I love the artwork you included with this title - it went well with the concept of 'biological speculations.'
Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2019
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Hi there,
A very interesting poem. I read it through a few times, and I came away with different thoughts each time - to me that is a sign of a great abstract piece.
I love the artwork you included with this title - it went well with the concept of 'biological speculations.'
Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2019
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I'm still punching on my writes, enhancing presented views for a more comprehensive read, trashing flaws that exists hopefully by my efforts. Thanking you for your generous rate and warm sentiments.
Comment from Sam Saylor
It isn't lost on me that with poetry its really a case of different strokes for different folks and I am reminded of this truth here. Twins by DPAC disturbs me and yet I am compelled to read on. The writing reads with a strangeness that makes me want to turn away yet at the same time compels me to finish so that I may understand that at which they are trying to say.
Do I in the end understand what they are trying to say? No not really. Something about greed? Could I understand more if I tried? I should suppose. Yet for me (the casual reader) I gleem little of the meaning but am affected strongly by the style.
Is it good? It depends on what the writer intends I suppose.
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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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It isn't lost on me that with poetry its really a case of different strokes for different folks and I am reminded of this truth here. Twins by DPAC disturbs me and yet I am compelled to read on. The writing reads with a strangeness that makes me want to turn away yet at the same time compels me to finish so that I may understand that at which they are trying to say.
Do I in the end understand what they are trying to say? No not really. Something about greed? Could I understand more if I tried? I should suppose. Yet for me (the casual reader) I gleem little of the meaning but am affected strongly by the style.
Is it good? It depends on what the writer intends I suppose.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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I feel your statement, finding in this efforts many cross response, needing revisions to close gaps. Bottom line I just love to write. Fun.
Comment from Teresa Alford
This is a very good poem. I like your writing style. The poems flows well and holds continuity. Congratulations on receiving the blue ribbon of recognition. Write On! ";-)
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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This is a very good poem. I like your writing style. The poems flows well and holds continuity. Congratulations on receiving the blue ribbon of recognition. Write On! ";-)
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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Not really feeling the rewards, receiving poor to exceptional on writes, stated to be incoherent with bad grammar throughout works. Thanking you for your interest and generous rate.
Comment from AdaJulie
Good job! Such a great write read. I really enjoy your writing. Its just fun to read. Very effective. Keep up the great work. Happy new year to you, write on!
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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Good job! Such a great write read. I really enjoy your writing. Its just fun to read. Very effective. Keep up the great work. Happy new year to you, write on!
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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Glad a few of my writes were appealing, serving revisions for flaws, pleasing dispute captivating to your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching sentiments.
Comment from Joan E.
As I read your free verse, first I thought about the Twin Towers, and then I reflected on social commentary with your references to "shoppers" and "man's greed". I hope your holiday is peaceful and the new year, healthful- Joan
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2018
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As I read your free verse, first I thought about the Twin Towers, and then I reflected on social commentary with your references to "shoppers" and "man's greed". I hope your holiday is peaceful and the new year, healthful- Joan
Comment Written 15-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2018
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I wish the same for you, taking myself a journey yesterday finding in the cities the festives cheers of the holidays. Thanking you for your generous rate and warm sentiments.