Act of Endurance
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Comment from Bill Schott
The shear number of images that this one poem evokes is astounding. I find the connective wording in need of revision, but the phrasing that makes up the majority of the piece is intriguing.
Heart blazed anger
Petrified horrors
man's thrones of torments
Mind illusion under chains
Great stuff!
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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The shear number of images that this one poem evokes is astounding. I find the connective wording in need of revision, but the phrasing that makes up the majority of the piece is intriguing.
Heart blazed anger
Petrified horrors
man's thrones of torments
Mind illusion under chains
Great stuff!
Comment Written 07-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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Pits are my concerns broken English revisions a constant, glad these flaws didn' t take away for you intents tried. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging statements.
Comment from P1
very enjoyable piece to read
your wording is perfect and precise
and your imagery is vivid and stirs
the imagination. pleasure to read
and review
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016
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very enjoyable piece to read
your wording is perfect and precise
and your imagery is vivid and stirs
the imagination. pleasure to read
and review
Comment Written 07-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016
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Pits are my norm broken English my flaws: revisions to smooth. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
Comment from DonandVicki
A very interesting and emotional poem that brings out a lot of emotion. You open the door to a lot of imagination and vivid images with your words.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016
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A very interesting and emotional poem that brings out a lot of emotion. You open the door to a lot of imagination and vivid images with your words.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016
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Glad this write found interest. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating comments.
Comment from thonnigford09
This was a tough read. I wasn't sure how to console or interpret the meaning at times. This poem reaches out to everyone. Everyone has been hurt in some way and I'm glad you shared this. To touch the soul. Anyway, Please accept my humble review and support.
Thanks thonnigford09
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2016
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This was a tough read. I wasn't sure how to console or interpret the meaning at times. This poem reaches out to everyone. Everyone has been hurt in some way and I'm glad you shared this. To touch the soul. Anyway, Please accept my humble review and support.
Thanks thonnigford09
Comment Written 02-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2016
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Dispute you found it exceptional in rate. Pits are my written concerns revisions. Thanking you for too generous rate but welcomed captivating considerations.
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Thanks!!!!!
Comment from jlsavell
tpac,
I was absolutely and totally drawn into this work. It appears as just a stream of consciousness where a tear is the result and or culmination of everything you have described. Your similes, your metaphors and allusions are the tools of creating life and imagery to a tear. well done.. jlsavell
reply by the author on 24-May-2016
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tpac,
I was absolutely and totally drawn into this work. It appears as just a stream of consciousness where a tear is the result and or culmination of everything you have described. Your similes, your metaphors and allusions are the tools of creating life and imagery to a tear. well done.. jlsavell
Comment Written 22-May-2016
reply by the author on 24-May-2016
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I tired to have fun with this write, express terms well: still have pits. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed views.
Comment from Dr. Nad
A Tear is very unique piece that describes the anatomy of a tear in ways that I have never heard or thought. It was very interesting how you shared many different ways the tear was formed. The genesis of tear formation was a prolonged adventure for your readers. Thanks for sharing. May God bless you!
reply by the author on 24-May-2016
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A Tear is very unique piece that describes the anatomy of a tear in ways that I have never heard or thought. It was very interesting how you shared many different ways the tear was formed. The genesis of tear formation was a prolonged adventure for your readers. Thanks for sharing. May God bless you!
Comment Written 22-May-2016
reply by the author on 24-May-2016
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Yeah, good old tear. It has its effects. Thanking you for generous rate and kind conveyances.
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You are most welcome.
Embrace the love from above!
Comment from foxangie123
Really great writing. You have unique insight and vision into the here and now. I think you have a most amazing pen. It is as if I recognize it from earlier than FanStory.
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Really great writing. You have unique insight and vision into the here and now. I think you have a most amazing pen. It is as if I recognize it from earlier than FanStory.
Comment Written 01-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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You might have most of these writes are revisions. Glad aspects in this work found some appeal. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging statements.
Comment from A.A.A.EXHILARATING RIDE
Hi again TPAC, I wish to gift a six for the highest aspirations of this - I think: in exploration of existence in the objectivity of scientific and God co-creative facts embodied as Earth's mighty Tree of Knowledge and Life. I feel it takes special courage of a gifted destiny to walk such a road in this life; and I am stirred to know, perhaps learn, and under-stand the fruits of that gift. So, six. No more to say at present. Except I will bookcase this, and hope to share your strengths of endurance a while. Thank you, blessings of Light and Love on your Way with Christ and each New dawning day, Maureen*&*
reply by the author on 18-May-2016
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Hi again TPAC, I wish to gift a six for the highest aspirations of this - I think: in exploration of existence in the objectivity of scientific and God co-creative facts embodied as Earth's mighty Tree of Knowledge and Life. I feel it takes special courage of a gifted destiny to walk such a road in this life; and I am stirred to know, perhaps learn, and under-stand the fruits of that gift. So, six. No more to say at present. Except I will bookcase this, and hope to share your strengths of endurance a while. Thank you, blessings of Light and Love on your Way with Christ and each New dawning day, Maureen*&*
Comment Written 01-May-2016
reply by the author on 18-May-2016
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Beautiful thoughts given, head already big, your views make it worst: hard to carry the load. Thanking you for your kind thoughts about this write: too, generous rate. Close with all charms given me to be reflected back to you: doubled.
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Beautiful thoughts, charms and expressions happily received and uplifted into spirit to lighten your load. Stay grounded but travel light, Maureen*&*
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent. A most well written poem You do a vivid description of being torn apart and helpless until the teardrops. Very good, the reader can feel the emotion.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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Excellent. A most well written poem You do a vivid description of being torn apart and helpless until the teardrops. Very good, the reader can feel the emotion.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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I had dreams of becoming a fiction writer in my teens, quickly converted to non- fiction. Thanking you for generous rate and warming comments.
Comment from jusylee72
So interesting being the Tear maker, the one who is hurt, whose eyes suddenly fill up with water and fall despite our desire for them to stop. They cleanse and heal, How did our body come up with that, how does it know to cry. I love writings that leave me questioning.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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So interesting being the Tear maker, the one who is hurt, whose eyes suddenly fill up with water and fall despite our desire for them to stop. They cleanse and heal, How did our body come up with that, how does it know to cry. I love writings that leave me questioning.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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My writes certainly give me my moments, due to years of research and study, I think these clips illustrates those thoughts outside stern aims. Thanking you for generous rate and touching statements.