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Comment from EMB
Well, I understand what you're saying, even though the way you're saying it is kind of confusing. If time was "snatched," how can we say that it was also "wasted"? I mean, which is it?
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2013
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Well, I understand what you're saying, even though the way you're saying it is kind of confusing. If time was "snatched," how can we say that it was also "wasted"? I mean, which is it?
Comment Written 09-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2013
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Thank you....In 'snatched', it was taken for granted with 'wasted' decision in youth, never to return...so in part it was both...Your feedback is much appreciated, have a great week, take care
Comment from ElPoetry001
Excellent.
Time is like a train, we know we are on it experiencing life.
Anytime the conductor may come forward and call your ticket number, and you will immediately leave the train.
This train is not small, it is the world, and you are free to travel physically and in your mind. Therefore, live a good life, and create memories, with friends and loved ones that can be stored, and revisited, until you hear the conductor call the number of a friend or relative; or your number.
Do not 'kill time, waste time, save time, it is only good for each day with no roll over; live, make your memories.
I am ashes poured into the Gulf of Mexico, and I do not sink into the waters, I perpetually rise on the wind and travel the world; I was ready when the Angel of Death called me; are you ready?
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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Excellent.
Time is like a train, we know we are on it experiencing life.
Anytime the conductor may come forward and call your ticket number, and you will immediately leave the train.
This train is not small, it is the world, and you are free to travel physically and in your mind. Therefore, live a good life, and create memories, with friends and loved ones that can be stored, and revisited, until you hear the conductor call the number of a friend or relative; or your number.
Do not 'kill time, waste time, save time, it is only good for each day with no roll over; live, make your memories.
I am ashes poured into the Gulf of Mexico, and I do not sink into the waters, I perpetually rise on the wind and travel the world; I was ready when the Angel of Death called me; are you ready?
Comment Written 03-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much for your words of thoughtfulness and kindness, I wrote that many years ago when I started to get back to writing. Yes there are times that have passed when I never have picked up a pen but something will happen or inspire me and I could write for weeks. Life goes on regardless...Thank you again :)
Comment from MoIronE13
Great image of the sentiment and the picture together. If only we could freeze time, or as Jim Croce said, "If I could save time in a bottle".
The things that we cling to in this life is how time is determined. It can be both a blessing and curse, depending on which side one stands on. So much of our Earthly lives are spend in "discovery" to the senses and the spirit. But in the end, it all seem a like long sleepy dream. My our Souls cherish the memories past, that will travel into the future incarnations.
Thanks for this wonderful time capsule.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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Great image of the sentiment and the picture together. If only we could freeze time, or as Jim Croce said, "If I could save time in a bottle".
The things that we cling to in this life is how time is determined. It can be both a blessing and curse, depending on which side one stands on. So much of our Earthly lives are spend in "discovery" to the senses and the spirit. But in the end, it all seem a like long sleepy dream. My our Souls cherish the memories past, that will travel into the future incarnations.
Thanks for this wonderful time capsule.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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Thank you for reading and for you kind words. Love Jim Croce, what a wonderful talent he was...
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Amen!
Comment from Zinnia48
Very well done essay on time--I'm not sure that I agree with all that you say, but you said it well! thanks for sharing. Caroline
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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Very well done essay on time--I'm not sure that I agree with all that you say, but you said it well! thanks for sharing. Caroline
Comment Written 02-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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Thank you Caroline...I don't expect all to agree with what I write that truly comes from my heart...I greatly appreciate your honesty and your kind words :) I believe we all write poetry from our souls and hearts...<3
Comment from krys123
An excellent essay that is very provocative and makes one think of how we pass our times while having friends and making sure we go back long time but in place and time to visit our old friends would give them a call. Really nicely written well penned an easy to read. One suggestion however to raise your members cents so others can read it more you have to raise it by promoting it. In that manner more people can read it in more reviews it would have. To get more members cents it can usually go to the read tab and from there you hit poems and those are mostly the most members cent homes that you could read and that would bring up your members cents in your bank shoulder say. Just a suggestion for future use.
AK
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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An excellent essay that is very provocative and makes one think of how we pass our times while having friends and making sure we go back long time but in place and time to visit our old friends would give them a call. Really nicely written well penned an easy to read. One suggestion however to raise your members cents so others can read it more you have to raise it by promoting it. In that manner more people can read it in more reviews it would have. To get more members cents it can usually go to the read tab and from there you hit poems and those are mostly the most members cent homes that you could read and that would bring up your members cents in your bank shoulder say. Just a suggestion for future use.
AK
Comment Written 02-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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Thank you krys 123, I truly appreciate your kind words and the advice...I'm trying to earn points but am a new member. I'm enjoying this site and all the feedback, it's awesome...:)
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You are so welcome and I know is I was once a newbie and I would search for other writers as I read the home page. Good luck in your endeavors and writing
Comment from Teagan Rose Horton
this is really something society can relate too
it is simple yet has so much meaning.
i enjoyed reading this,
i hope to read some more.
i hope you have a blessed day keep up the good work
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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this is really something society can relate too
it is simple yet has so much meaning.
i enjoyed reading this,
i hope to read some more.
i hope you have a blessed day keep up the good work
Comment Written 02-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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Thank you very much for reading, much appreciated :)
Comment from Val Crisson
Okay, as much as I like the writing of this piece the "..." are over the top. I feel this would be a far more effective piece, if you made just plain old sentences where you have all these ellipses. Also, end with a period not with the ~. Sometimes pieces can get too cute, for lack of a better word and it hurts the piece. If you make any changes let me know, good luck.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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Okay, as much as I like the writing of this piece the "..." are over the top. I feel this would be a far more effective piece, if you made just plain old sentences where you have all these ellipses. Also, end with a period not with the ~. Sometimes pieces can get too cute, for lack of a better word and it hurts the piece. If you make any changes let me know, good luck.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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Thank you