A Birthday Surprise
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Comment from Lovinia
Hi Sandra
A cute and unique little tale which I think children would enjoy. A poem that makes a child think. Also a great message ..... what a great idea that Santa should have his own surprise, when he brings so many surprises to child and adult alike. :)) Excellent rhythm and rhyme. I love the presentation. You bring all the fun of Christmas, and add a great sense of mystery .... I didn't expect the jump to Santa's birthday, despite the obvious 'hint' with your image'. DUH!! My only excuse, I haven't had my morning coffee yet....... though I think I used that excuse yesterday when I left my car keys on the check-out counter (buying milk to add to the coffee I hadn't yet had). If you know what I mean??? Hahahahah! I enjoyed your poem. Not a winner in the contest ... yet still a winner. Well done. Hugs - Lovi xoxoxoxo
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
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Hi Sandra
A cute and unique little tale which I think children would enjoy. A poem that makes a child think. Also a great message ..... what a great idea that Santa should have his own surprise, when he brings so many surprises to child and adult alike. :)) Excellent rhythm and rhyme. I love the presentation. You bring all the fun of Christmas, and add a great sense of mystery .... I didn't expect the jump to Santa's birthday, despite the obvious 'hint' with your image'. DUH!! My only excuse, I haven't had my morning coffee yet....... though I think I used that excuse yesterday when I left my car keys on the check-out counter (buying milk to add to the coffee I hadn't yet had). If you know what I mean??? Hahahahah! I enjoyed your poem. Not a winner in the contest ... yet still a winner. Well done. Hugs - Lovi xoxoxoxo
Comment Written 05-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
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LOL, Lovinia, I know exactly what you mean, my eyelids won't lift until I can smell the lovely aroma of my coffee. Thank you for your lovely review. I am so pleased you liked it. :) xsx
Comment from angelface2
Well-written poem. Rhythm was good and rhyming too. too cute for words. I think the last line should say They gave him a present... Makes more sense. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
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Well-written poem. Rhythm was good and rhyming too. too cute for words. I think the last line should say They gave him a present... Makes more sense. Miss Sally
Comment Written 26-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
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Thank you, Miss Sally. I don't know how I missed that, it was on my draft but I lost it when I put it on here. Thank you for pointing it out, that was kind of you. :)
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Hey that can happen. I've done it myself! Teehee Miss Sally
Comment from RYME4U
This is very well done.I like how it builds up to the ending surprise. The rhyme and rhythm and well chosen words are all written very well. You have done a good job!
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
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This is very well done.I like how it builds up to the ending surprise. The rhyme and rhythm and well chosen words are all written very well. You have done a good job!
Comment Written 26-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much for your lovely review! :)
Comment from Sueellen11
What a wonderful children's poem, a poem that should be in a children's book, this s a great entry into write a children's poem, excellent great imagery, great rhyming and flow, good luck, blessings sueellen
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
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What a wonderful children's poem, a poem that should be in a children's book, this s a great entry into write a children's poem, excellent great imagery, great rhyming and flow, good luck, blessings sueellen
Comment Written 26-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
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Thank you so very much! :)
Comment from SteveY
A great little very creative and imaginative poem. A wonderful verse that is destined to become a new nursery rhyme or story to be told at birthdays or christmas.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
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A great little very creative and imaginative poem. A wonderful verse that is destined to become a new nursery rhyme or story to be told at birthdays or christmas.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
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Thank you so very much, what a lovely thing to say! :)
Comment from lorijean
a nice little poem about the children remembering Santa's birthday, such a lovely topic, well written and a pleasure to read....
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
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a nice little poem about the children remembering Santa's birthday, such a lovely topic, well written and a pleasure to read....
Comment Written 26-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much, Lorijean! :)