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All Those Puzzling Pieces

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What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?

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Comment from Sasha
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I love the katie21 style and you have done a terrific job with this one. Sorry you had a brain short but it happens to the best of us. This would have been a great contender too.

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2013

reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
    ah well, I know you understand brain shorts dear, right? Thx so much - glad you enjoyed it - I like this style too - forces you to be mercifully BRIEF! :)sHARYN
Comment from MizKat
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Wow, this is great, Sharyn. I love your poem about the moon and God looking down. I'll have to try this style of poetry sometime. Kat

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2013

reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
    Bless you Kat! YES! You really must try this some time. I'd never done one before and it was great fun. Thank you so much for you LOVELY six!! yeah!!
    :) Sharyn
Comment from K.W.
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Lovely. Absolutely lovely in form, content, incidental and end rhyme, cadence, imagery. You name it. I feel very still and quiet:)
Xo
K

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2013

reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
    Blessings KW - thank you so much for this lovely six! So glad you enjoyed my "katie".
    :)Sharyn
reply by K.W. on 30-Apr-2013
    Indeed:)
Comment from DALLAS01
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I love the way your words trickle down the page. Kind of like star dust. The gold and black reference supported by the font and background color is an added bonus. Quite picturesque.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2013

reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
    thx so much my dear - these short pieces are rather lovely to do, aren't they?
    Blessings - as always!
    Sharyn
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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I love this one, Sharyn, I love the picture of that giant moon, I love the sultry feel of your words and the whole presentation is spot on lovely. (Nothing wrong with your brain! LOL) xsx Sandra

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2013

reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
    thx so much Sandra - these little short pieces are rather fun, hmm? Brain manages those, thank goodness - though doesn't remember to enter the contest! GRRR!
Comment from Cornelius2000
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Nice poem, nice presentation. I like the picture, the colors, the groupings, the type matching the moon, the black representing the night. Well done.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2013

reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
    just a little fluffy one Dave - I'm "resting" at the moment - or my brain is, anyway ... seeking inspiration for a prose piece. :)S
reply by Cornelius2000 on 30-Apr-2013
    You've inspired me to try a couple of contest poems, so I've just submitted my first nonet and acrostic. Found myself looking through the dictionary for words starting with "p". Interesting experience. Dave
Comment from words
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Such a lovely poem.

I am a moon lover, so how could I not like this one.

Love the idea of the moon being a peep-hole for God.

As I am a great fan of brevity, love the idea of a 21 word poem.

Hugs, d

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2013

reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
    your brevity often inspires me d! Bless you - glad you enjoyed this one! :)Sharyn
Comment from God's Writer
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A beautiful poem and sermon. I am leaving fanstory as soon as I get all my poems copied. I am tired of being a slave to fanstory. I do have a life. Thank you for this awesome poem.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2013

reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
    My pleasure, Eric. Good idea to copy all your work and take a break. I'm doing the same dear! :)S
Comment from vkmack
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This is just so softly sweet and lovely. It reeks of moonlight. The images are fresh and clean. You use your words so sparingly and beautifully. The arrangement in itself is so artistic. Great alliteration. I tried to find a favorite phrase or line, but it is, as usual, impossible. Just wonderful.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2013

reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
    oh thank you vk! I'm so glad this little one hit the mark and am delighted to receive your six!
    Blessings,
    Sharyn
Comment from Dustybones
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The poem itself is fine, I'll say. Now your presentation with the photo and a matching color scheme with the descending WHY makes it outstanding art.

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2013

reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
    thx so much Db! :)SSS