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Little Billy

Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "The Endless Night."
memiors from my life experiences.

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Comment from Nicnac
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Chi Chi Chi Le Le Le!

Isn't it amazing that all 33 men and their rescuers survived?

Your poem is moving and touches on the emotions that many of them experienced while being buried so far from life, light and their loved ones.

A great tribute.
Well done.
Nice presentation. Great flow.
A poignant tribute to many brave men.

No suggestions.
Nic

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 16-Oct-2010
    thanks nic
Comment from Aletheia
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This is a lovely dedication to those men. It has good flow and rhyme. I hope it has a happy ending too.

Well done! B :)

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2010


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    thank you for the kind review
Comment from pickthorn
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The eyes of the world were on Chile and praying that the miners would all get out safely. Your poem expresses the feeling that we all had and is said very well. Thank you for sharing your poem with us. Very well done.

pickthorn

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2010


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    thank you
Comment from dportwood
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keimosobie,

Happily the rescue effort turned out to be a complete success. Thanks for posting this reflective poem and praise God for the lives saved. Well written.

Duane

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2010


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    thanks fopr the review
Comment from words
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I appreciate your ode to the trapped miners.

I especially liked your ending:I hope this story has a happy ending
in case it dosen't my love I'm sending
if I ever escape this plight
I promise to do what I know is right

And the wonder is, they were saved ... a great real life ending to your verse.

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2010


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    thank you
Comment from RKagan
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I was so concerned about those men. I am so glad that it turned out well. This is a great poem it expresses the sentiment many felt while the world waited to see if the rescue effort would be sucessful.

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2010


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    thank you for the review
Comment from winspiration
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This made me nearly cry what a beautiful poem it had a flow that kept you going to the end I hope it was a happy ending I don't know if a loved one has been through this you made it sound so real well done

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2010


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    thank you for the review
Comment from mountainwriter49
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What an apt title to give to this well written
poem about the mining disaster and its successful
conclusion. We are all inspired by the events that
took place.

I found these two lines my favorite:
two weeks ago my wife gave birth
the endless night gave way to mirth

The end rhymes are solid and strong, thus adding to
the quality of the read. Good luck with the contest!
-ray

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2010


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    thank you for the kind review
Comment from jinxiegal
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Great poem, your insight into the miners' thoughts is really touching and pleasant to read. Good word choices, satisfying ending...thank you for sharing!

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
    thank you for taking the time to review it.
Comment from Renee' J Thomas
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this is very well written, very timely and very well thought out. it is a very good contest entry. That was one crazy time those miners spent for sure!
renee'

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
    thank you for your kind review.