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Little Billy

Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Letting Go."
memiors from my life experiences.

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Comment from Readywriter52
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It's an interesting but confusing story. She seems to remember a lot for a three-year-old. I don't think three-year-olds really remember that much. They simply put together what they hear from the adults and mistaken it for remembering.

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 13-Oct-2010
    thanks for the review and I do remember, I remember because I ket looking back.
Comment from Lastamen
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I very interesting and intriguing yarn of the revelation of truth (perhaps best left unearthed). Well developed characters and compelling dialogue. Well done.

Till the last amen

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 11-Oct-2010
    thank you lastamen
Comment from Nanashirley
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This a good story with a lot of pain and hurt. I wondered why everyone kept the truth but I guess it is felt it will save the child. I am not sure. Good luck.

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 11-Oct-2010
    my father wanted me to look at him as my dad and not an uncle is what I think.
Comment from Belinda
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Interesting story with a complicated plot, Author. Meaning you have a very imaginative mind. By the way, thanks for entering this contest.

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 09-Oct-2010
    thank you for hosting it. I hope its a good entry, Thank you gor the review.
Comment from richard7
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"See I didn't lie,"
I saw this coming and love how you slipped it in and carried further which became even more complicated and revealing!
Well written in all ways is all i can really say.
The memories of childhood imprinted onto our minds.
Around this age the mind really begins to assimilate the conscious level better too.
I am taking it is a true story, with regard to that i have to ask do you see Aunt Lori now?
Curious to know am I prying let me know too!
thanks.

richard

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 07-Oct-2010
    thanks for the review and the comments. I do see my Aunt at some family occassions but rarely as she lives 2000 miles away.
reply by richard7 on 07-Oct-2010
    okay thanks for that!
Comment from Dom G Robles
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This is a nice story. I liked it from beginning to end. I was curious at the beginning what the reasons are for the refusal of not wanting to visit the aunt's and uncle's home. Then I found out the real reason and the picture she was portraying. It is a nice piece work. And I think this deserves a 6 but I now had fully exhausted my allocation. Dom

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 07-Oct-2010
    thank you for taking the time to read it.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2010
    thank you for taking the time to read it.
reply by Dom G Robles on 07-Oct-2010
    You are welcome. Dom
Comment from TexAnn
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Well this was a very interesting read! I don't like the part about blaming "yourself", kids are always the ones to pay.
"(You see, my real father was killed by " this part was pretty long to put in () wonder if it could be incorporated?
Really good read, TexAnn

 Comment Written 06-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 06-Oct-2010
    thank you
Comment from mmmichelle34
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That was a very nice peace of work to sit and read you have a way of writing that keeps the reader interested. hope to see more of your work on here

 Comment Written 06-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 06-Oct-2010
    thank you
Comment from Pen&Ink
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An interesting tale, and true to boot! This type of story can become very confusing to the reader, but your presentation flows logically and holds the reader's attention. Whether your conclusion is accurate or not, I can see the reasoning behind it.

Well done.

Ray

 Comment Written 06-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 06-Oct-2010
    thank you
Comment from countess gram
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A very interesting story that held my attention until the end. The work flowed well and was easy to read with good dialogue and characters. A very emotional ride for you. Nice job!

 Comment Written 06-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 06-Oct-2010
    thank you