Chronicles of the Wandering Man
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Interlude: A Prayer and a Sermon"An extended story in poem form
15 total reviews
Comment from shy1250
The best yet!! "And stay out of my way"--I get that one, big time. The mad judge's sermon is familiar--the cry of all who seek power through other's faith/weakness. God must cry when He sees what we do with His beneficience. Oh, once again your vocabulary defeats me: "ramollescence" (forgive any spelling errors please). help? later and God bless, shy
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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The best yet!! "And stay out of my way"--I get that one, big time. The mad judge's sermon is familiar--the cry of all who seek power through other's faith/weakness. God must cry when He sees what we do with His beneficience. Oh, once again your vocabulary defeats me: "ramollescence" (forgive any spelling errors please). help? later and God bless, shy
Comment Written 08-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Ramollescence - a softening or mollifying. That one's very obscure, admittedly, but one of my faves. It goes in the box with Securdate, Smutch, and Spatulamancy :-). I deliberated a lot before posting this chapter; I had no wish to offend anyone, and wanted to make it clear that the judge is a zealot rather than a true leader, but also make his sermon 'believable', in other words, not too insane!
Mike
Comment from Diny
I enjoyed this alot - you are very talented to write so well and discribe the faith and beliefs of two very different views- You make the reader identify with both charachters well- will be interesting how you wrap this all up!- Write on-Di
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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I enjoyed this alot - you are very talented to write so well and discribe the faith and beliefs of two very different views- You make the reader identify with both charachters well- will be interesting how you wrap this all up!- Write on-Di
Comment Written 17-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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It was important to me that I got across how each of them is utterly behind their cause. In a land made entirely of grey, there's no right or wrong, just the side with more firepower... Or maybe that's just me being cynical ;-)
Mike
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, a great picture you chose to put with it, i can't tell who is good and who is evil. very dark and compelling, great job on this
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, a great picture you chose to put with it, i can't tell who is good and who is evil. very dark and compelling, great job on this
Comment Written 17-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Thank you, SWJ :-). It's been my intention all along to blur the lines between the good and bad, right and wrong, evil and divine of the characters in this piece. The world of the Wandering Man is definitely home to many shades of grey :-)
Mike
Comment from MyYiaYia
SO, am I right in thinking this is somewhat akin to heaven's angels and hell's demons, now sworn to kill one another. He because of his wife's death and they because he is a threat. I admit it sometimes gets deeper than I am capable of going. Doesn't mean I don't like it, just have to look up a lot of words to get the meaning. Love it! Debbie :0)
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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SO, am I right in thinking this is somewhat akin to heaven's angels and hell's demons, now sworn to kill one another. He because of his wife's death and they because he is a threat. I admit it sometimes gets deeper than I am capable of going. Doesn't mean I don't like it, just have to look up a lot of words to get the meaning. Love it! Debbie :0)
Comment Written 17-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Hey, Debbie, it's all about reading, enjoying, and thinking. I love that you say it's deep. Not because it makes me feel superior, but because it means you are really thinking about the possible meanings, and that's all I can every ask for with one of my works. I'm starting to sound pretentious now, so I'll just say thank you very much for the review :-)
Mike
Comment from Triumphant
WOW!!!
This was the most entertaining, grab my attention poetry I have read in a long time. The language was rich, full of well articulated emotion, it brings the reader along for the ride as a passenger sharing the thoughts and feelings on a personal level. I loved the proverbial both sides of the coin. Wouldn't change a thing!
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2010
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WOW!!!
This was the most entertaining, grab my attention poetry I have read in a long time. The language was rich, full of well articulated emotion, it brings the reader along for the ride as a passenger sharing the thoughts and feelings on a personal level. I loved the proverbial both sides of the coin. Wouldn't change a thing!
Comment Written 16-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2010
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I always get a little thrill when I see a six rating come in, because it means someone not only got exactly how my poem was meant to read, but responded to it personally in the way I always hope they will. I'm so glad you enjoyed it! The next chapter is on the way, though you've obviously jumped into the series near the end. Thanks again for the fantastically encouraging review :-)
Mike
Comment from Hitcher
I thought this was going to be the next chapter of Serial Dressing before I clicked on the message, Not to be I see! Can't make your mind up mate?
It is another fine chapter Mike, worthy of the outstanding little dark poetic story you have blown everyone away with friend, you have your own unique style mate, your love of words always shines through, the visuals are always stunning and your direction...Original! Yea mate, I loved it!
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2010
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I thought this was going to be the next chapter of Serial Dressing before I clicked on the message, Not to be I see! Can't make your mind up mate?
It is another fine chapter Mike, worthy of the outstanding little dark poetic story you have blown everyone away with friend, you have your own unique style mate, your love of words always shines through, the visuals are always stunning and your direction...Original! Yea mate, I loved it!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2010
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Ah Hitch, you know I love to plough my own furrow, mate. The Wandering Man is near completion so I thought I should turn my attention to one of the stories I left hanging and start thinking about it. The epic poem is taking priority, though. Great to hear from you mate; glad you're still enjoying it!
Mike
Comment from patmedium
I have thoroughly enjoyed this journey of a damned man, Mike. Looking forward to the next part.
I have also had my mind stretched by the new words, thank you. Pat. xx
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2010
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I have thoroughly enjoyed this journey of a damned man, Mike. Looking forward to the next part.
I have also had my mind stretched by the new words, thank you. Pat. xx
Comment Written 14-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2010
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Pat, it's been fantastic having you along. At least two more chapters to go, I think. It would sit wuite neatly at ten chapters :-)
Mike
Comment from Judian James
"the ramollescence this world needs
to rise from horror's seethe;
the freedom I must gift to it,
the air it craves to breathe. fabulous use of words!!
I loved the entire chapter but I think I would rework the "voice, vice" verse. You could use "word" instead of "voice" and find a good rhymer for that. OR, you could
use "hold" instead of "vice" and do the reverse. Just a thought. Otherwise, brilliant as always.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2010
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"the ramollescence this world needs
to rise from horror's seethe;
the freedom I must gift to it,
the air it craves to breathe. fabulous use of words!!
I loved the entire chapter but I think I would rework the "voice, vice" verse. You could use "word" instead of "voice" and find a good rhymer for that. OR, you could
use "hold" instead of "vice" and do the reverse. Just a thought. Otherwise, brilliant as always.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2010
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Thank you :-). I'll have a look at those lines; I guess voice/vice is stretching the slant a little too far! I had a bit of a headache putting this one together :-)
Mike
Comment from anabelle
Profound and powerful. The words themselves seep deep into our souls to pull out all kinds of emotions: love, frustration, hate, confusion, and finally hope that things will turn out if we chose it to.
Beautiful.
Regards, anabelle
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2010
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Profound and powerful. The words themselves seep deep into our souls to pull out all kinds of emotions: love, frustration, hate, confusion, and finally hope that things will turn out if we chose it to.
Beautiful.
Regards, anabelle
Comment Written 13-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2010
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Thank you, Anabelle. This was a challenging chapter to write. I'm so glad it came through strongly.
Mike
Comment from fishcantswim
"armistace" should be "armistice", I think.
Form is good and it flows well.
Well written, and the chapter develops at a good pace.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2010
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"armistace" should be "armistice", I think.
Form is good and it flows well.
Well written, and the chapter develops at a good pace.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2010
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Thank you :-). I appreciate your taking the time to read and comment.
Mike