Tantalizing Eyes
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Comment from Donald O. Cassidy
It's genuine foreshadowing of a budding romance between steven and Leya. His ruminating to himself in denial of this only increases the certainty.
You deal in good drama and dialogue to set this up.
Why Peggy is so stern and , frankly, hateful to Leya seems unjustified.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2009
It's genuine foreshadowing of a budding romance between steven and Leya. His ruminating to himself in denial of this only increases the certainty.
You deal in good drama and dialogue to set this up.
Why Peggy is so stern and , frankly, hateful to Leya seems unjustified.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2009
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Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from Heidixoxo
Awesome story Barbara!! This is a very well written chapter and I enjoyed reading it from start to finish. Job well done and good luck to you............xoxo
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2009
Awesome story Barbara!! This is a very well written chapter and I enjoyed reading it from start to finish. Job well done and good luck to you............xoxo
Comment Written 09-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2009
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Mengleoh67
Okay so NaNoWriMo totally blew me off my reviews and now I have to go back and read all the chapters that I've missed because I really love this story.
This is an excellent chapter; action packed, lots of fabulous character interaction and dialogue. The storyline remains strong and smooth and moves along at just the right pace.
Please tell me that Steven is going to slug Peggy in her stupid lying jealous trouble making face really soon.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2009
Okay so NaNoWriMo totally blew me off my reviews and now I have to go back and read all the chapters that I've missed because I really love this story.
This is an excellent chapter; action packed, lots of fabulous character interaction and dialogue. The storyline remains strong and smooth and moves along at just the right pace.
Please tell me that Steven is going to slug Peggy in her stupid lying jealous trouble making face really soon.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2009
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Thank you for your review and kind words.
Comment from rockcandy
Great story (or chapter rather)! It really made we want to dig deeper into Steven and Leya's story! I will definitely go back and start from the beginning! :)
Blessed be,
Jamy
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2009
Great story (or chapter rather)! It really made we want to dig deeper into Steven and Leya's story! I will definitely go back and start from the beginning! :)
Blessed be,
Jamy
Comment Written 08-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2009
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Thank you for your review and kind words.
Comment from peach
Fascinating. I enjoyed the description, the action, and the character development. I found the plot interesting as well. Nice job!
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2009
Fascinating. I enjoyed the description, the action, and the character development. I found the plot interesting as well. Nice job!
Comment Written 08-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2009
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from eliz100
This is well-written as always. It was a good read from beginning to end. It seems like the vise is tightening on Steven's feelings.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2009
This is well-written as always. It was a good read from beginning to end. It seems like the vise is tightening on Steven's feelings.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2009
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Thank you for your review and continued support.
Comment from nora arjuna
So leya is still quite a mystery. Steven isn't sure whether he can trust her, thanks to peggy, of course. Well-written overall. No crits here. Looking forward to the next one.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2009
So leya is still quite a mystery. Steven isn't sure whether he can trust her, thanks to peggy, of course. Well-written overall. No crits here. Looking forward to the next one.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2009
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Thank you for your review and continued support.
Comment from Queenise
Barbara,you have done a great job on this chapter,friend. It is still filled with mystery and intrigue that grabs your attention. Seems true to life. Would recommend to others. Looking forward to the next chapter. Peace. Queenise
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2009
Barbara,you have done a great job on this chapter,friend. It is still filled with mystery and intrigue that grabs your attention. Seems true to life. Would recommend to others. Looking forward to the next chapter. Peace. Queenise
Comment Written 07-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2009
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Thank you for your review and kind words. I appreciate your continued support.
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My pleasure,friend. Queenise
Comment from Nicnac
Oh, I'd like to get my hands on that Peggy-wench! Ugh. Her 'I'm mightier than ye' attitude just grates on my nerves. Steven better grow a stronger backbone and stand up to that jealous witch, or I'll go back to Jac. ;) lol
I love how Steven thought 'Please don't have a cell phone.' :)
Great chapter, Barbara. I have no suggestions. :)
Nic
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2009
Oh, I'd like to get my hands on that Peggy-wench! Ugh. Her 'I'm mightier than ye' attitude just grates on my nerves. Steven better grow a stronger backbone and stand up to that jealous witch, or I'll go back to Jac. ;) lol
I love how Steven thought 'Please don't have a cell phone.' :)
Great chapter, Barbara. I have no suggestions. :)
Nic
Comment Written 07-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2009
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Thank you. I appreciate your review. Be patient, I think you enjoy the next few post, the next one is again building up, but what it's building to, you might like.
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Sounds yummy! lol
Comment from Judith Ann
I am getting real tired of Peggy's interfering ways. (LOL) I guess this is because I like Leya so much. I wonder how long before Stephen wakes up and gets a grip on his emotions. Wow, the sign of a good story for me is when I get involved in their lives and behaviors. Good work again. -Judy
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2009
I am getting real tired of Peggy's interfering ways. (LOL) I guess this is because I like Leya so much. I wonder how long before Stephen wakes up and gets a grip on his emotions. Wow, the sign of a good story for me is when I get involved in their lives and behaviors. Good work again. -Judy
Comment Written 07-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2009
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate your continued support, and so does Leya.