CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 53 "Clever Cleavage"A collection of poetry
37 total reviews
Comment from FredCollingwood
I've always said that if you can't fix something with a hammer or duct tape, screw it. It's broke! When I ws reviewing your great poem, this caught my eye and of course, I had to read it. It's great!
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I've always said that if you can't fix something with a hammer or duct tape, screw it. It's broke! When I ws reviewing your great poem, this caught my eye and of course, I had to read it. It's great!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
Comment from Minglement
Oh, what a fun entry for the duct tape story contest! Clever take on this ubiquitous stuff! Loved your wording all the way through and pulled it all together at the end. Great job. Good luck.
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Oh, what a fun entry for the duct tape story contest! Clever take on this ubiquitous stuff! Loved your wording all the way through and pulled it all together at the end. Great job. Good luck.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2009
Comment from dportwood
I like the reference to a construction job site. I've used duct tape for many things around the rance, but never attached it to bare portions of my body. Cute story and good luck.
Duane
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I like the reference to a construction job site. I've used duct tape for many things around the rance, but never attached it to bare portions of my body. Cute story and good luck.
Duane
Comment Written 15-Feb-2009
Comment from tkmartin
A lovely, lighthearted and funny story. Well thoughtout and put together. Great job. I really enjoyed it.
cheers
TK
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A lovely, lighthearted and funny story. Well thoughtout and put together. Great job. I really enjoyed it.
cheers
TK
Comment Written 13-Feb-2009
Comment from Sasha
Very clever! Well written, nice descriptions and great concept. I especially like the way you built up to the moment of disaster...only then did I remember it was an entry for the Duct Tape contest. Fun read. Really, well done!
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Very clever! Well written, nice descriptions and great concept. I especially like the way you built up to the moment of disaster...only then did I remember it was an entry for the Duct Tape contest. Fun read. Really, well done!
Comment Written 13-Feb-2009
Comment from Slush Pile
Hi there! Your story is wonderfully engaging and humorous. What a unique use of duct tape. You will have to follow up this one with another story about how you plan to get that sticky stuff off!
In reviewing the story, I made adjustments in the wording of the final paragraphs. You may find that it flows smoother. At any rate, great story!
Hope to read more of your work in the future. :-) SP
... the result? My breasts were heaved up HIGH, just like the French women of the days of yore. I quickly slipped back into my gorgeous new gown.
Perfection! A beautiful new me: glorious cleavage and no bra! Most importantly, no concerns of falling silicone. I left the house giggling, knowing that nothing short of a bomb blast would move that duct tape and ruin my eagerly anticipated evening!
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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Hi there! Your story is wonderfully engaging and humorous. What a unique use of duct tape. You will have to follow up this one with another story about how you plan to get that sticky stuff off!
In reviewing the story, I made adjustments in the wording of the final paragraphs. You may find that it flows smoother. At any rate, great story!
Hope to read more of your work in the future. :-) SP
... the result? My breasts were heaved up HIGH, just like the French women of the days of yore. I quickly slipped back into my gorgeous new gown.
Perfection! A beautiful new me: glorious cleavage and no bra! Most importantly, no concerns of falling silicone. I left the house giggling, knowing that nothing short of a bomb blast would move that duct tape and ruin my eagerly anticipated evening!
Comment Written 13-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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Slush Pile, I REALLY appreciate your comments and suggestions. However, I feel that the last two paragraphs I wrote (intonations and wry humor) matched well with all the previous parts. The last sentence I wrote was the most important, because of the contrast between the satin gown being worn with industrial duct tape. Perhaps I can find a way to meld the two together. Will study it further. I really do appreciate your help. As this is my first short and I know I have a long way to go!!! :-)) With regards, Sue
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is brilliantly done. It is actually what one could call a common-place story, but you brought your natural creativity to bear on it, and transformed it into an enjoyable read. kudos
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This is brilliantly done. It is actually what one could call a common-place story, but you brought your natural creativity to bear on it, and transformed it into an enjoyable read. kudos
Comment Written 13-Feb-2009
Comment from Gramma Kathy
This is hilarious! What an imaginative use for duct tape!
I'd looked at this contest, but I couldn't come up with any brilliant ideas. You have. I just wonder: is this story fact or fiction?
Either way, you've got my vote. Well done!
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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This is hilarious! What an imaginative use for duct tape!
I'd looked at this contest, but I couldn't come up with any brilliant ideas. You have. I just wonder: is this story fact or fiction?
Either way, you've got my vote. Well done!
Comment Written 13-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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It's a true story. That's why I couldn't resist joining the contest because when I saw the words "duct tape", then I just had to tell the silly story. Ha! Thanks so much for your very kind review. Always appreciated, Sue
Comment from Karen B.
Well written, flows well start to finish and fun to read! Wasn't it painful to remove afterward? Great story for the contest. Good luck! Karen
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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Well written, flows well start to finish and fun to read! Wasn't it painful to remove afterward? Great story for the contest. Good luck! Karen
Comment Written 13-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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No, it wasn't painful. If was real bad, I probably would have written about it. HA! Thanks so much for your very kind compliments and review. Sue
Comment from sherrygreywolf
This is a great little story. I've seen skaters do similar things to get a costume to fit just right. Duct tape and eyelash adhesive - never leave home without them.
Didn't see anything that needed to be changed.
good work - sherry
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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This is a great little story. I've seen skaters do similar things to get a costume to fit just right. Duct tape and eyelash adhesive - never leave home without them.
Didn't see anything that needed to be changed.
good work - sherry
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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Ha! Duct tape and eyelash adhesive! I never leave home without my nail glue, either. LOL!! Thanks for your very kind review. With regards, Sue