CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Readywriter52
Your poem has used the required words. The picture goes with the poem well. The description of the wedding is beautful. I believe you captured the essence of the event.
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Your poem has used the required words. The picture goes with the poem well. The description of the wedding is beautful. I believe you captured the essence of the event.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2009
Comment from WRITER1
This is a beautiful poem, it should be put in a wedding card. It is for a very special person. You did a wonderful job on this poem and good luck on the contest.
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This is a beautiful poem, it should be put in a wedding card. It is for a very special person. You did a wonderful job on this poem and good luck on the contest.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2009
Comment from jshep
This poem brought back memories of my daughter and my son when they got married. It is quite a day for a parent, for sure. You captured the moment very well in your poem. Great flow and rhyme and descriptions. "It's their New Day'- great ending line. No nits. Excellent entry and good luck, Sue. JOyce
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This poem brought back memories of my daughter and my son when they got married. It is quite a day for a parent, for sure. You captured the moment very well in your poem. Great flow and rhyme and descriptions. "It's their New Day'- great ending line. No nits. Excellent entry and good luck, Sue. JOyce
Comment Written 05-Feb-2009
Comment from jack silver
this one was perfectly written. i have read another poem which is in the same contest. he said for his final comment that he didn't know why the word rake had been placed in for use when it didn't really fit.
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this one was perfectly written. i have read another poem which is in the same contest. he said for his final comment that he didn't know why the word rake had been placed in for use when it didn't really fit.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2009
Comment from justmade
Every word of this poem read beautiful I love it.
Is this bio? I hope it is. It is really beautiful as I said earlier and the happy ending feeling worked for me.
Much love,
Justmade.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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Every word of this poem read beautiful I love it.
Is this bio? I hope it is. It is really beautiful as I said earlier and the happy ending feeling worked for me.
Much love,
Justmade.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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Justmade, no, it's not a bio. But it does remind me of a couple of nice weddings I've attended. Thank you very much for your lovely compliments and review. With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from luna
I enjoyed reading about the wedding, and didn't even miss the word rake. This is a good contest entry and it was my pleasure to review it. I thought it had a very good flow and rhyme scheme. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Yours,
Luna *smile*
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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I enjoyed reading about the wedding, and didn't even miss the word rake. This is a good contest entry and it was my pleasure to review it. I thought it had a very good flow and rhyme scheme. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Yours,
Luna *smile*
Comment Written 25-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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Luna, believe it or not, in the beginning, I did include "rake"! HA! I had her wedding dress train "raking gracefully". What an oxymoron! Thank goodness I came to my senses. Thank you so much for your love compliments and review! Sue :-))
Comment from dportwood
You've done a really nice job of including the required words. They blend so well into the message of the poem that there is nothing forced or contrived. Very well done.
Loved the rhyme and meter. Perfect description of the wedding. Good job and good luck.
Duane
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You've done a really nice job of including the required words. They blend so well into the message of the poem that there is nothing forced or contrived. Very well done.
Loved the rhyme and meter. Perfect description of the wedding. Good job and good luck.
Duane
Comment Written 25-Jan-2009
Comment from Susan E. Pennycuff
Reading this poem just reminded me of something I read just recently... ( has nothing to do with poem jus a FYI..) It said that wedding planners were disuading couples from using rice at weddings because scientist had discovered that birds ate the rice and then when they drank water the rice swells in their stomach and it becomes too large for their stomach to hold and explodes the stomach, killing the smaller birds. Bubbles or rose petals are now the choice to blow/throw at weddings... interesting huh. ( is good to know since I am engaged... lol)
As for your poem - You did a great job of meeting the contest requirements and I was thinking when I read your author notes... how in the world did she look at that list and come up with this poem... very nice creativity you have inside of you!
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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Reading this poem just reminded me of something I read just recently... ( has nothing to do with poem jus a FYI..) It said that wedding planners were disuading couples from using rice at weddings because scientist had discovered that birds ate the rice and then when they drank water the rice swells in their stomach and it becomes too large for their stomach to hold and explodes the stomach, killing the smaller birds. Bubbles or rose petals are now the choice to blow/throw at weddings... interesting huh. ( is good to know since I am engaged... lol)
As for your poem - You did a great job of meeting the contest requirements and I was thinking when I read your author notes... how in the world did she look at that list and come up with this poem... very nice creativity you have inside of you!
Comment Written 25-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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When I read about the rice, I didn't know whether to laugh or cry! Just the way you put it: "explodes"! HA! Poor things. You know, it makes complete sense, though. Congratulations on your engagement! Hoping your wedding is just what you plan it to be! (bubbles or rose petals? Ha!). You know, I have thought about that list after I wrote this and for the life of me I cannot work out how a wedding came to mind! Ah....the fun of poetry. Thank you SO much for your very kind compliments and review. With regards, Sue
Comment from steevie
well done, Six
you captured a well know joy by the marriage of two people on their special of special days
all the best in the contest
steve
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well done, Six
you captured a well know joy by the marriage of two people on their special of special days
all the best in the contest
steve
Comment Written 25-Jan-2009
Comment from Nicnac
This is lovely!
A beautiful day.
'With This Ring' flows so gently and has great rhythm.
I really enjoyed reading this wedding poem.
You incorporated the words seamlessly.
Great writing.
~Nic
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This is lovely!
A beautiful day.
'With This Ring' flows so gently and has great rhythm.
I really enjoyed reading this wedding poem.
You incorporated the words seamlessly.
Great writing.
~Nic
Comment Written 25-Jan-2009