CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 114 "Gaza"A collection of poetry
16 total reviews
Comment from womanwriter
Wonderful! So much truth to be told, and in so few words!
Very well done, and with such feeling!
Keep up the great work.
Sincerely,
womanwriter
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Wonderful! So much truth to be told, and in so few words!
Very well done, and with such feeling!
Keep up the great work.
Sincerely,
womanwriter
Comment Written 04-Jan-2009
Comment from sherrygreywolf
Reporting on the sad state of affairs in the Middle East, it is hard to say that I enjoyed the poem. But it is well written, it follows the guidelines and the word conjure clear images of the tragic situation.
You've written a good contest entry - sherry
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Reporting on the sad state of affairs in the Middle East, it is hard to say that I enjoyed the poem. But it is well written, it follows the guidelines and the word conjure clear images of the tragic situation.
You've written a good contest entry - sherry
Comment Written 04-Jan-2009
Comment from Windsun
Very strong message in this piece, one that will touch many. I like the choice of words for the beginning and end to each stanza. Best of luck in the contest. ~W
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Very strong message in this piece, one that will touch many. I like the choice of words for the beginning and end to each stanza. Best of luck in the contest. ~W
Comment Written 04-Jan-2009
Comment from JoAnna Lee
Very well done. Form followed (and I liked that you chose to rhyme - difficult with five lines). Good Luck!
Thanks for sharing,
Donna
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Very well done. Form followed (and I liked that you chose to rhyme - difficult with five lines). Good Luck!
Thanks for sharing,
Donna
Comment Written 04-Jan-2009
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is well done bringing to us the facts about this terrible war that is terrorizing so many people all correct in this form good luck regards Fuller
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2009
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This is well done bringing to us the facts about this terrible war that is terrorizing so many people all correct in this form good luck regards Fuller
Comment Written 04-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2009
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Fuller, thank you for your review and compliments. Yes, just watching the news again. Sad state of affairs over there tonight. With regards, Sue
Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
Good job in writing this and keeping within guidelines. It is a wonderful poem and my pleasure to read. I found no errors. Good luck in the contest.
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Good job in writing this and keeping within guidelines. It is a wonderful poem and my pleasure to read. I found no errors. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2009
Comment from Minglement
This is an excellent entry for the contest. I love the use of phrases like 'cease fire without cease' and 'Holy land's no Heaven'. Powerfully stated. Great presentation. Good luck.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2009
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This is an excellent entry for the contest. I love the use of phrases like 'cease fire without cease' and 'Holy land's no Heaven'. Powerfully stated. Great presentation. Good luck.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2009
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Thank you so much for this very generous review and for highlighting the lines you liked. Always love hearing what resonates with the reader! With regards, Sue
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You're welcome. I think we all like to know, specifically, what it was that 'spoke' to our readers. Take care, Marcia
Comment from Hitcher
I don't think I told you Sue, I met my wife in Israel 16 years ago, we lived there for a year and a half. You did a great job, I loved cease fire with out the cease[excellent] we left when they started to blow up public transport. Good luck!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2009
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I don't think I told you Sue, I met my wife in Israel 16 years ago, we lived there for a year and a half. You did a great job, I loved cease fire with out the cease[excellent] we left when they started to blow up public transport. Good luck!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2009
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I'm sick of this s**t! Ever since I was 12 years old and the 6 day war broke out, the Middle East was MUCH more in the forefront of my mind than the cold war with USSR. And here it is....still a hotbed of hate - even after I've watched Peace Accord after Peace Accord. Okay, I'm getting off my soapbox now. Thanks much for your review, Hitch. Glad you two got the hell out of there. NZ is definitely a 'heaven'. Yours, Sue
Comment from amada
War versus Peace, Hell versus Heaven. Powerful words that provoke many sentiments, happy and sad. You express very truthful sentiments. Nice feelings.
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War versus Peace, Hell versus Heaven. Powerful words that provoke many sentiments, happy and sad. You express very truthful sentiments. Nice feelings.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2009
Comment from dportwood
I think you have accurately described the situation in that part of the world - No shock is this ongoing fight.
Just to bring it to your attention, according to the contest rules your last word, 'Heaven', while it is the opposite of 'Hell' (the first word in the stanza), it should be a word that has only one syllable. I didn't deduct stars - let them figure it out in the voting booth.
Anyway, nice poem and good luck.
Duane
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2009
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I think you have accurately described the situation in that part of the world - No shock is this ongoing fight.
Just to bring it to your attention, according to the contest rules your last word, 'Heaven', while it is the opposite of 'Hell' (the first word in the stanza), it should be a word that has only one syllable. I didn't deduct stars - let them figure it out in the voting booth.
Anyway, nice poem and good luck.
Duane
Comment Written 03-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2009
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NO!! It's my entire poem! Thanks for the heads-up. I may revisit. Dang! And thank you for your very kind review and comments. With regards, Sue
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Whew! Remembered the synonym for hell is hades! Yes. It works. Now I feel this deserves your 5 stars. Big Smiles, Sue
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'Hades' works very nicely. I'll be looking for you in the voting booth. Good job.
Duane