Sandra's Lover
Viewing comments for Chapter 70 "It all fits"A macabre crime thriller. Grotesque and detailed.
2 total reviews
Comment from Yolanda King
It throws you right into the middle of things and it strings you along at a fast pace. I like it.
"They all went into the task force room that the task force had been using" I personally find the 2nd part of the sentence redundant. If it's the task force room, who else would be using it?
" Hayes â€" it fits" I've seen this kind of spelling a few times. Just a typo?
"he wasn't ready to follow Terrys lead just yet." this should read Terry`s
"Headed straight for them was Mark and Cindra with Alistair leading the team." I'd say were instead of was.
Overall an enjoyable chapter
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2025
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It throws you right into the middle of things and it strings you along at a fast pace. I like it.
"They all went into the task force room that the task force had been using" I personally find the 2nd part of the sentence redundant. If it's the task force room, who else would be using it?
" Hayes â€" it fits" I've seen this kind of spelling a few times. Just a typo?
"he wasn't ready to follow Terrys lead just yet." this should read Terry`s
"Headed straight for them was Mark and Cindra with Alistair leading the team." I'd say were instead of was.
Overall an enjoyable chapter
Comment Written 13-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2025
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Oh thank you I will make these changes!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Wow your story is packed with tension! I love how Terry's determination drives this. The pacing keeps things moving fast. I felt like I was right there with them in the task force room. The moment when Anderson's print is revealed gave me chills! Hayes internal struggle was written so well too. Great ending! Can't wait to see what happens next!
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2025
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Wow your story is packed with tension! I love how Terry's determination drives this. The pacing keeps things moving fast. I felt like I was right there with them in the task force room. The moment when Anderson's print is revealed gave me chills! Hayes internal struggle was written so well too. Great ending! Can't wait to see what happens next!
Comment Written 12-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2025
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Thanks Michael more to come!
