Comment from
Dolly'sPoems
It is good to have a lover to keep us warm at night and I miss that in life, but I have had my fair share of love and I enjoyed your romantic poem, love Dolly x x x x
Comment Written 06-Feb-2025
Comment from
kiwisteveh
Don't look too cold, do they!?
Nice 5-7-5 with the dash of French adding a little zing to your words. I paused on the enjambement between lines 2 and 3 If you;re going to keep it you should at least let the sentence run by ditching the capital letter at the start of line 3
When you are writing/editing, do you ever tinker with line order? I'm thinking your first line would be a strong final line. You can't simply switch lines 1 and 3, but you could play around with that idea.
Good luck,
Steve
Comment Written 06-Feb-2025