Screams of the Shadows
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "The Countdown"In the dark, the screams never stop.
3 total reviews
Comment from Begin Again
You nailed the suspense, Marilyn! Every word, every movement sent a chill wondering what was actually happening. Sorry I am so far behind...this writing in a month and being on vacation isn't working as well as I expected. LOL Nothing ever does!
thanks for sharing. Keep up the good work.
smiles, Carol
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You nailed the suspense, Marilyn! Every word, every movement sent a chill wondering what was actually happening. Sorry I am so far behind...this writing in a month and being on vacation isn't working as well as I expected. LOL Nothing ever does!
thanks for sharing. Keep up the good work.
smiles, Carol
Comment Written 26-Nov-2024
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This chapter is so intense! You nailed the suspense with every detail. Especially that eerie figure tapping on her window. I felt like I was right there with Sarah! The pacing was fantastic! The headlights following her added an extra layer of dread and I couldn't help but wonder what's next. You've got such a great grip on keeping the reader hooked - this was thrilling from start to finish! Keep up the awesome work!
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This chapter is so intense! You nailed the suspense with every detail. Especially that eerie figure tapping on her window. I felt like I was right there with Sarah! The pacing was fantastic! The headlights following her added an extra layer of dread and I couldn't help but wonder what's next. You've got such a great grip on keeping the reader hooked - this was thrilling from start to finish! Keep up the awesome work!
Comment Written 25-Nov-2024
Comment from Julie Helms
The tension continues in the story. What a mystery--what the heck is going on? It's the kind of thing the reader will put themselves in her place to think about whether or not they'd do it.
I was a little confused by the timing. She says it's 30 minutes to the industrial district but according to the countdown, she arrives at the road in 4 minutes from leaving the diner.
You have a few computer gremlins in this chapter, too.
Nice job!
Julie
:-)
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The tension continues in the story. What a mystery--what the heck is going on? It's the kind of thing the reader will put themselves in her place to think about whether or not they'd do it.
I was a little confused by the timing. She says it's 30 minutes to the industrial district but according to the countdown, she arrives at the road in 4 minutes from leaving the diner.
You have a few computer gremlins in this chapter, too.
Nice job!
Julie
:-)
** This reviewer has pledged to rate in accordance with site guidelines.**
Comment Written 25-Nov-2024
