Ascension
The path within16 total reviews
Comment from DonandVicki
I loved this free verse poem of yours. I does what all good poetry should do and that is engage the readers imagination. 50% of the poem is written by the poet, the reader fills in the rest.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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I loved this free verse poem of yours. I does what all good poetry should do and that is engage the readers imagination. 50% of the poem is written by the poet, the reader fills in the rest.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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Wow, thank you so much for the fine compliment. I feel appreciate it! And i'm really glad you liked it, too! Appreciate your time and your fine rating. And the great comments you've givenI really hope you and yours have a fabulous holiday and that you're enjoying your evening.Thanks again!
Comment from 3rd Sight.
There's so much energy in this piece: It really keeps you, wanting more. You have philosophy, evolution, and so much more - goin' on here, you can hardly keep up! It's a fun read, nice creativity and it really makes you think. Thanks! For sharing.. and good luck! In the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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There's so much energy in this piece: It really keeps you, wanting more. You have philosophy, evolution, and so much more - goin' on here, you can hardly keep up! It's a fun read, nice creativity and it really makes you think. Thanks! For sharing.. and good luck! In the contest.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Wow find compliments thank you very! Best of all, you like it, so that is awesome! And you're very insightful too, so it creates a wonderful review. Thank you so much for that.And I wish for you and yours have a wonderful holiday!
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Thanks! And happy holidays and Merry Christmas to you.
Comment from shad blunt
Curious... Did you write this with the picture in mind or upon coming out of meditation? Either way, absolutely love it. Makes me think twice, I find myself walking up the stairs, not knowing where I am going. Only to find peace within every step up that I take, I am becoming whole again. Love it!!
Happy Holidays to come and always love to shine upon the words to write. Shadrach
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Curious... Did you write this with the picture in mind or upon coming out of meditation? Either way, absolutely love it. Makes me think twice, I find myself walking up the stairs, not knowing where I am going. Only to find peace within every step up that I take, I am becoming whole again. Love it!!
Happy Holidays to come and always love to shine upon the words to write. Shadrach
Comment Written 11-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Hi Shadrach! I'm really glad you like this poem. I actually wrote this pollen for the artist who made the picture which I credited it at the bottom. It gave me inspiration when I saw it. So that's what came out, so it came back to me like there's a battle between religion and spirituality, going on and really there shouldn't be, because we're not that far apart from one another. So that head represented to me, the splitting of two sides finally coming together. Thank you so much for your kind review. I really appreciate it. I appreciate your kind words your time and your fine ratings law. Hope you have an awesome holiday. Thank you again!
Comment from jake cosmos aller
powerful and moving poem about living with bipolar disorder and emerging stronger at the end
liked these lines the best
Born of rock and hardness force the crack
Those of doctrine must follow or miss the growth
The valley of mind opens flowing grassy steps
A place to finally and completely...
Become...one.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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powerful and moving poem about living with bipolar disorder and emerging stronger at the end
liked these lines the best
Born of rock and hardness force the crack
Those of doctrine must follow or miss the growth
The valley of mind opens flowing grassy steps
A place to finally and completely...
Become...one.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Hi Jake! Thank you again so glad you liked it truly! You give an amazing review for which I'm very pleased to receive. I thank you for your questions. Jumping in and having a read and for your time most of all. I hope you have a marvelous holiday. And I hope that your days are awesome. Thank you again!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Nice entry for the Free Verse Poem contest.
Good commentary about life when times are hard. ..... like they are now in America. We don't know what is to come in the next four years. At least thats what I think.
It was a little hard to comprehend, I had to read it twice... maybe is just me.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Nice entry for the Free Verse Poem contest.
Good commentary about life when times are hard. ..... like they are now in America. We don't know what is to come in the next four years. At least thats what I think.
It was a little hard to comprehend, I had to read it twice... maybe is just me.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 11-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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That's a gorgeous line! Right now there's some infighting going on between religious people and spiritual people. And really? We're not that far apart, but that picture reminded me of the split between us. And so I wrote about that, and the coming together, finally, in the end, that's what needs to happen.So it was with that in mind that I wrote the poem. Those of doctrine will be left behind, which I meant that religion needs to evolve if it wishes to survive. Hold up in mind, open the poem and I tend to be a little more abstract than I should sometimes. I always appreciate your reviews. Cool things you have to say you're very insightful. I appreciate that, and I thank you for your review. You're waiting in your time.Have an awesome night gypsy!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Once again, your contest entry is excellent. I'm not a poet and struggle with poetic form, but I did enjoy, greatly reading this poem. Thank you for sharing this entry with us and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Once again, your contest entry is excellent. I'm not a poet and struggle with poetic form, but I did enjoy, greatly reading this poem. Thank you for sharing this entry with us and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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I'm super pleased you liked it! Thank you, Barbara, as always. I appreciate your words. You're insights and your time. Of course, you're fine rating too. I hope you have a wonderful holiday as well. Yeah, I hope you these and nights are grand thank you!
Comment from Begin Again
Alas, a poet I am not, but I am intrigue when someone who is a poet can take their words and put them so the reader's thoughts are stirred and one wonders what sent the poet down that path. It's very interesting.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Alas, a poet I am not, but I am intrigue when someone who is a poet can take their words and put them so the reader's thoughts are stirred and one wonders what sent the poet down that path. It's very interesting.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 11-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Thank you Carol! Currently, there's a battle of words between spiritual people and religious people. When we're not really that far apart, we should be walking together. However, that picture reminded me of the rift between us and the coming together, finally in the end. Super, glad you like this. Thank you for your kind words. You're very insightful of code or not, but you are a fine writer so very much.Appreciate your thoughts.I hope you have an awesome holiday and an awesome night!
Comment from estory
There's a grit to the voice here, a determination to forge through adversity. And your images are these images of tunnels through rock, symbolizing our thoughts being channeled by preconceptions and societal doctrines. In the end, you seem to push through the rocky channels to this grassy valley, and a sublime understanding of life. I thought the philosophy interesting, and the voice seemed pretty tuned to your theme. The rigid construction of the stanzas also underscored and framed the theme pretty well, so good job of using form to frame the theme. estory
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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There's a grit to the voice here, a determination to forge through adversity. And your images are these images of tunnels through rock, symbolizing our thoughts being channeled by preconceptions and societal doctrines. In the end, you seem to push through the rocky channels to this grassy valley, and a sublime understanding of life. I thought the philosophy interesting, and the voice seemed pretty tuned to your theme. The rigid construction of the stanzas also underscored and framed the theme pretty well, so good job of using form to frame the theme. estory
Comment Written 11-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Thank you so much.That's fine compliment.I really appreciate that! I'm glad you found it interesting
Well, thank you for your time. Your fine rating and your thoughts Most of all and I wish you and yours an awesome holiday.Thanks again!
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is an excellent commentary on life during hard times. The first line uses the word 'granite,' and I wonder if that is what you wanted to use. I am not sure what you mean by the word granite. Did you mean to say granted?
I can relate to these well-chosen words of life becoming harder with each passing day. Thanks for sharing this provocative poem.
Jesse
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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This is an excellent commentary on life during hard times. The first line uses the word 'granite,' and I wonder if that is what you wanted to use. I am not sure what you mean by the word granite. Did you mean to say granted?
I can relate to these well-chosen words of life becoming harder with each passing day. Thanks for sharing this provocative poem.
Jesse
Comment Written 11-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Hi Jesse! Thanks so much for your awesome review on really appreciating that! Currently, there seems to be a uh, war of words going on between religious people and spirituality. Well, we should be walking hand in hand however, my poem is about that division and how we finally come together.In the end, the two heads merge. Thank you for reading. Thank you for commenting. I hope that you and yours have the most awesome holiday.Thanks again!
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I didn't comment on the war of words with religion and spirituality but thanks for sharing anyway.
The meaning of the poem was not clear to me yet I guess other readers understood it.
Enjoy the holiday season!
Jesse
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Oh no I never meant you said that I just wanted to give you some background. I based the poem on the war of words is what I mean to say. It's the theme behind the poem.So I wanted to let you know that that's what I was writing for. Again, I thank you so very much.Please enjoy your reading!
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Thank you for explaining the background of the poem. The theme, "The War on Words," would be a good title for another poem.
I would love to read it!
Jesse
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Dear Lea, I interpret your free verse as being about the breakthrough of creative thought, how it has to penetrate dogma and rigid belief to find its own footing on "flowing grassy steps." This is an analogy of life-when, faced with challenges and oppression-determination, commitment and a sense of self-belief will win through to achieve inner harmony. I hope I haven't gone too far astray. I love the imagery of rocky ascension to claim fortitude and peace. Well done and good luck! Debbie.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Dear Lea, I interpret your free verse as being about the breakthrough of creative thought, how it has to penetrate dogma and rigid belief to find its own footing on "flowing grassy steps." This is an analogy of life-when, faced with challenges and oppression-determination, commitment and a sense of self-belief will win through to achieve inner harmony. I hope I haven't gone too far astray. I love the imagery of rocky ascension to claim fortitude and peace. Well done and good luck! Debbie.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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No, actually, you're pretty much on the money where I saw that poem. It reminded me of an ongoing verbal debate going on and on between religious people and spiritual people. They seem to be apart when really they ship together. So my poem is about that hard granite doctrine idea of religion that They just won't deviate from. And where the spiritual people are saying, Hey, man, we're not illiterate anymore, so let's talk about this. And so they have what I call granite blinders on or refuse to accept an idea they're different than the wrong. We cannot evolve if we don't do these things.If we don't talk, we don't move forward. That's when I saw the 2 heads split in 2. That poem came out with that theme of the argument that I hear regularly as part of the poem. The granite blinders, the kraken creek of the rock. As always, my friend, you deliver a wonderful review.I'm always appreciating it and smile.When I see you there! I hope you have the most amazing holiday and those awesome evenings too oh yeah, and the day. Don't forget the day l o l.Thanks again have a great night!
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This is a great, illuminating write, Lea, and I would love to have seen it accompany your verse. It could actually stand as a post in its own right:)