Solitary Confinement
Trapped in a white room.4 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Welcome to the site,
This is a good first post and fits the contest well. It describes the solitary confinement room and it effects on the psyche well.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Enjoy the rest of the day and week.
Joan
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Welcome to the site,
This is a good first post and fits the contest well. It describes the solitary confinement room and it effects on the psyche well.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Enjoy the rest of the day and week.
Joan
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is indeed a harsh punishment for humans as solitary confinement can often send people mad. We as humans enjoy the company of others and when it is taken away it can be lonely. A scary story and a fine entry for the contest, I welcome you to Fanstory, love Dolly x
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This is indeed a harsh punishment for humans as solitary confinement can often send people mad. We as humans enjoy the company of others and when it is taken away it can be lonely. A scary story and a fine entry for the contest, I welcome you to Fanstory, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
Comment from Patrick Bernardy
Hello!
You did a great job of describing this cell of "punishment." It certainly is a chamber of horrors, there is no doubt!
---"The smell of nothingness became everything at once, though it is only nothing." --This is an exquisite line! So ironic!
---"For it looks like pillows that are hard and soft at the same time." --This made me think of a padded cell whereby prisoners are put to keep them from beating their heads against the wall. If this was your intention, this sentence was very evocative of how those cells actually appear.
Well done! Good luck in the contest!
Patrick
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Hello!
You did a great job of describing this cell of "punishment." It certainly is a chamber of horrors, there is no doubt!
---"The smell of nothingness became everything at once, though it is only nothing." --This is an exquisite line! So ironic!
---"For it looks like pillows that are hard and soft at the same time." --This made me think of a padded cell whereby prisoners are put to keep them from beating their heads against the wall. If this was your intention, this sentence was very evocative of how those cells actually appear.
Well done! Good luck in the contest!
Patrick
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
Comment from Julie Helms
Welcome to Fanstory!
Your solitary confinement is a good choice of room for the Chamber of Horrors contest...what better place to question, and lose, one's sanity.
I have one suggestion:
The smell of nothingness *became* everything at once
(Keep this in the present tense like rest of your story...becomes)
Best of luck in the contest!
Julie
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Welcome to Fanstory!
Your solitary confinement is a good choice of room for the Chamber of Horrors contest...what better place to question, and lose, one's sanity.
I have one suggestion:
The smell of nothingness *became* everything at once
(Keep this in the present tense like rest of your story...becomes)
Best of luck in the contest!
Julie
:-)
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024