The Call of Fate
Asking forgiveness for the things I've done.7 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A wonderful offering for the contest here, Jose -- a mixture of broken hearts and searching love with the faith that all will be healed... well done! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
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A wonderful offering for the contest here, Jose -- a mixture of broken hearts and searching love with the faith that all will be healed... well done! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 25-Oct-2024
Comment from patcelaw
this is quite well written and I enjoyed listening to a very much. I wish you the very best in the contest. May you have a wonderful day and may God bless you. Patricia.
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this is quite well written and I enjoyed listening to a very much. I wish you the very best in the contest. May you have a wonderful day and may God bless you. Patricia.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I like how the lives seemingly come alive, "a loving whisper in the wind."
You've used the wind and the leaves rustling to indicate His voice in the first stanza, but in the second you say "a voice in the wind speaks." That works, but what if you made His voice somehow part of the natural world, like you did in the first stanza? Just a thought.
In the third stanza, I would capitalize "you" since you are speaking of God; lower case on Fool's, as it's not a proper noun.
I love the rhyming and the passion of this poem, Jose. I hope that you do well in the contest. Keep writing!
xo
Pam
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I like how the lives seemingly come alive, "a loving whisper in the wind."
You've used the wind and the leaves rustling to indicate His voice in the first stanza, but in the second you say "a voice in the wind speaks." That works, but what if you made His voice somehow part of the natural world, like you did in the first stanza? Just a thought.
In the third stanza, I would capitalize "you" since you are speaking of God; lower case on Fool's, as it's not a proper noun.
I love the rhyming and the passion of this poem, Jose. I hope that you do well in the contest. Keep writing!
xo
Pam
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
Comment from lyenochka
Wonderful poem of faith. We know that God always welcomes all the prodigals and He always stays near even when we wander. Let's stay safe under His wings like in psalm 91. Best wishes in the contest!
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Wonderful poem of faith. We know that God always welcomes all the prodigals and He always stays near even when we wander. Let's stay safe under His wings like in psalm 91. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
Comment from Jennifer L Newcomb
This was such a pleasant read with a lot of heart. It will not profit to gain the whole world and lose your soul. I cry that my sin is forever before me as my heart ask for forgiveness is my covering. We all must remember that where your heart is there your treasure is also. Be Blessed and thank you for sharing.
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This was such a pleasant read with a lot of heart. It will not profit to gain the whole world and lose your soul. I cry that my sin is forever before me as my heart ask for forgiveness is my covering. We all must remember that where your heart is there your treasure is also. Be Blessed and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We all make mistakes in life and we hope to be forgiven so that we can move on and make the best of things. I enjoyed the positivity in these faithful words, love Dolly x
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We all make mistakes in life and we hope to be forgiven so that we can move on and make the best of things. I enjoyed the positivity in these faithful words, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
Comment from Chip Whitley
This poem explores spiritual awakening and choice, where the allure of worldly pleasures is weighed against the soul's yearning for redemption and divine connection. It captures the internal conflict and ultimate decision with a poignant clarity, making it a profoundly resonant piece for anyone contemplating life's greater purpose.
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This poem explores spiritual awakening and choice, where the allure of worldly pleasures is weighed against the soul's yearning for redemption and divine connection. It captures the internal conflict and ultimate decision with a poignant clarity, making it a profoundly resonant piece for anyone contemplating life's greater purpose.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024