Jealousy Is for the Birds
Watch what you say around others.14 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Jealousy is for the Birds, presented with ten rhyming couplets, finds that sparrows are sometimes full of themselves and think less of others. A plop of bird wash might serve as a proper pushback.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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This poem, Jealousy is for the Birds, presented with ten rhyming couplets, finds that sparrows are sometimes full of themselves and think less of others. A plop of bird wash might serve as a proper pushback.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Thanks, Bill. You made me smile right back. I always appreciate your reviews.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. The rhyming scheme and near rhymes worked beautifully along with the message of this poem. I enjoyed both. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. The rhyming scheme and near rhymes worked beautifully along with the message of this poem. I enjoyed both. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Barbara for a great review. I appreciate your thoughts.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I like the sparrow and goldfinch poem.
Excellent entry for the Rhyming Poem contest. The rhyme doesn't sound forced.
I love the presentation too.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wouds inflicted by reason" -- Novali
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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I like the sparrow and goldfinch poem.
Excellent entry for the Rhyming Poem contest. The rhyme doesn't sound forced.
I love the presentation too.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wouds inflicted by reason" -- Novali
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Gypsy, for your encouraging review. I appreciate it.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
a nice poem about birds gossiping about other birds. I like the words chosen
A goldfinch, never pausing in his flight,
Then dropped upon her head a wisp of whit
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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a nice poem about birds gossiping about other birds. I like the words chosen
A goldfinch, never pausing in his flight,
Then dropped upon her head a wisp of whit
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Thank you for liking my punch line. I read your profile, and you've certainly lived so far a very interesting life.
Comment from gangreen
I enjoyed this-very comical with an excellent punch line.It reads well and has a good rhyming scheme.This would be a good performance poem.Thanks for cheering me up.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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I enjoyed this-very comical with an excellent punch line.It reads well and has a good rhyming scheme.This would be a good performance poem.Thanks for cheering me up.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Thanks a bunch for your review. I'm happy to have cheered you up!
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Thank you again.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Firstly, who wouldn't love that little bird in the visual, so vividly portrayed despite her brown/grey dress code? This is a sweet and very meaningful little verse conveying the fact that we all have something to offer in God's eyes and to yearn after something we don't have is a pointless waste of time. I enjoyed this little personified poetic script with its message of optimism and gratification. Thanks for sharing, Verna. Debbie
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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Firstly, who wouldn't love that little bird in the visual, so vividly portrayed despite her brown/grey dress code? This is a sweet and very meaningful little verse conveying the fact that we all have something to offer in God's eyes and to yearn after something we don't have is a pointless waste of time. I enjoyed this little personified poetic script with its message of optimism and gratification. Thanks for sharing, Verna. Debbie
Comment Written 11-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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What a lovely review. Thank you, my friend.
Comment from lyenochka
And we cannot see the full spectrum of colors that birds see in ultraviolet hues so maybe a dull brown and gray looks spectacular to them. God made them invisible to us to keep them safe.
A great lesson against jealousy from the birds' eye view!
Then dropped upon her head a whisp of white. (wisp?) Maybe this is an alternate spelling?
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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And we cannot see the full spectrum of colors that birds see in ultraviolet hues so maybe a dull brown and gray looks spectacular to them. God made them invisible to us to keep them safe.
A great lesson against jealousy from the birds' eye view!
Then dropped upon her head a whisp of white. (wisp?) Maybe this is an alternate spelling?
Comment Written 11-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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Thanks for your excellent review. I had "wisp" and on the synonym list for "blob," it came up "whisp," but I changed it, thanks to you.
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I checked and it is a variant of wisp. I hadn't seen it before. It's also an aggregate noun - a whisp of snipe. Of course, I then had to look up what a snipe looks like. 😂
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Verna,
I love the way you symbolize jealousy in this poem for all ages. Jealousy ruins so many lives.
Your sweet poem teaches us a great lesson.
Best wishes and blessings.
Cindy
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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Verna,
I love the way you symbolize jealousy in this poem for all ages. Jealousy ruins so many lives.
Your sweet poem teaches us a great lesson.
Best wishes and blessings.
Cindy
Comment Written 11-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much, my friend, for an excellent review!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It always amazed me how, in nature, the male is pretty in order to attract the female, it is almost like the females choose their partners. Yet in the human world it is the females who try and attract the male. I enjoyed your beautiful poem about these birds Verna, a pleasing read, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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It always amazed me how, in nature, the male is pretty in order to attract the female, it is almost like the females choose their partners. Yet in the human world it is the females who try and attract the male. I enjoyed your beautiful poem about these birds Verna, a pleasing read, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 11-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much, Dolly. Hugs
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Comment from Sally Law
Verna dear, this is just beautiful rhyming poetry. I love the theme, jealousy of the feathered dress. Male birds tend to be colorful; females brown or not as showy. The males do the mating call so we'll say, dressed for success.
Sending you my best today as always, and my best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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Verna dear, this is just beautiful rhyming poetry. I love the theme, jealousy of the feathered dress. Male birds tend to be colorful; females brown or not as showy. The males do the mating call so we'll say, dressed for success.
Sending you my best today as always, and my best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal XOs
Comment Written 11-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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Thanks dear. I love your interesting review.
