Miss You
Thinking of a loved one, long since passed.14 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am guessing this contest entry is about a lost love, either to death or separation. I am guessing separation from a few lines. I enjoyed reading. The flow of this poem is very good. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2024
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I am guessing this contest entry is about a lost love, either to death or separation. I am guessing separation from a few lines. I enjoyed reading. The flow of this poem is very good. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2024
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Thank you for the 5 star review. This poem is actually reflecting on my mom, she passed away almost 20 years ago, but I still think of her often.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting and very well written poem you have penned for the No Rules Poetry contest. You used great descriptive words and very interesting imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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This is a very interesting and very well written poem you have penned for the No Rules Poetry contest. You used great descriptive words and very interesting imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 17-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Teri7
Thank you for the wonderful review and 5 start rating of "Miss You". I'm glad you enjoyed it. It has been well received thus far.
Comment from royowen
Ah like you we haven't had two or one bills for three decades, we have one and two dollars, nor do we have one or two cent pieces, I've been to the stars four times, and had a wallet full of 1$ notes and 1cent coins, heh, great write, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Ah like you we haven't had two or one bills for three decades, we have one and two dollars, nor do we have one or two cent pieces, I've been to the stars four times, and had a wallet full of 1$ notes and 1cent coins, heh, great write, blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Roy
Thank you for the positive review and the 5 star rating. Funny how different cultures and countries perceive things. This was a great reminder for me that I have to think of how other countries interpret/understand some of our written words. Diversity is what makes us human. Continued success with your writing.
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Roy
Thank you for the positive review and the 5 star rating. Funny how different cultures and countries perceive things. This was a great reminder for me that I have to think of how other countries interpret/understand some of our written words. Diversity is what makes us human. Continued success with your writing.
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Well done
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
This is a lovely poem of remembrance. It's strange the little details that aid in our memory of one who left us behind. Seeing them in your poem starts to make a picture of your loved one. I'm glad you explained "twoonie." Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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This is a lovely poem of remembrance. It's strange the little details that aid in our memory of one who left us behind. Seeing them in your poem starts to make a picture of your loved one. I'm glad you explained "twoonie." Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Verna
Thank you for the high praise of Miss You and the 5 star rating. I enjoyed writing this as I reflected on my mother.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
This is a beautiful entry for the No Rules Poetry Contest. I just lost my mother a year ago so this brought up a lot of feelings. Your last line is so true and I am grateful that I did have well spent time with her and now I hold those memories close. good luck in the contest. Nice work.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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This is a beautiful entry for the No Rules Poetry Contest. I just lost my mother a year ago so this brought up a lot of feelings. Your last line is so true and I am grateful that I did have well spent time with her and now I hold those memories close. good luck in the contest. Nice work.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Marilyn
Sorry to hear of your loss, it's always tough. This poem was an ode to mine and it's been twenty years. I wish I was better at writing light-hearted fare as you are
Comment from Barry Penfold
Excellent entry to the contest. Brings back memories of my father and when he used to give some coins and sometimes notes to his grandchildren when they left after visiting. It is a habit that has flowed through to myself.
Loved the poem and the image. A lot of wisdom in the writing. All the best in the contest.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Excellent entry to the contest. Brings back memories of my father and when he used to give some coins and sometimes notes to his grandchildren when they left after visiting. It is a habit that has flowed through to myself.
Loved the poem and the image. A lot of wisdom in the writing. All the best in the contest.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Barry
Thank you so much for the high praise and 5 star rating of my poem. It's funny how some of the memories, although obscure remain. I'm not sure about "wisdom", but thank you.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
My mom died when I was ten years old, I still miss her too.
It's hard to go through a a lost like that, I can relate.
Well done
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wouds inflicted by reason" -- Novali
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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My mom died when I was ten years old, I still miss her too.
It's hard to go through a a lost like that, I can relate.
Well done
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wouds inflicted by reason" -- Novali
Comment Written 16-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Gypsy
Sorry to hear of your loss at such a young age. Thank you for the praise and 5 star rating of "Miss You". It's very much appreciated. I'll make a point of reading some of your stuff here at FanStory, I love your profile picture.
Comment from Shanbreen
You have done a good job at this 'no rules" poetry contest. You have some memorable lines in this poem:
"Wanting more is a feeling that may never relent."
"Should have shared more, should have made the time!" This line is a feeling for many people who lament what more could have been done (cold have should have). Unfortunately some carry it as a guilt.
Good memories will have to suffice but sometimes, in my opinion, "good" memories make me sad for the pleasant moments not being there anymore. Whatever it is, good memories are always welcome.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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You have done a good job at this 'no rules" poetry contest. You have some memorable lines in this poem:
"Wanting more is a feeling that may never relent."
"Should have shared more, should have made the time!" This line is a feeling for many people who lament what more could have been done (cold have should have). Unfortunately some carry it as a guilt.
Good memories will have to suffice but sometimes, in my opinion, "good" memories make me sad for the pleasant moments not being there anymore. Whatever it is, good memories are always welcome.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Shanbreen
Thank you for your wonderful comments and 5 star rating of my poem. You make a great point, good memories have a very melancholy feel when we reflect on loved ones that have passed. When I write poetry, which I fumble with, I try to leave the piece for some interpretation. Thanks again.
Comment from Gunner Lil
An excellent poem for entry into the contest.
It is an easy read and a nice even flow and pace.
It is full of love and some sorrow for not sharing more and giving more time.
Thank you and good luck.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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An excellent poem for entry into the contest.
It is an easy read and a nice even flow and pace.
It is full of love and some sorrow for not sharing more and giving more time.
Thank you and good luck.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Gunner Lil
Thank you for the high praise and 5 star rating of my poem. I don't delve into poetry often, for fear of looking like an idiot! It seems that this one was well received.
Comment from zanya
An interesting closing line here for the 'No rules poetry contest' encompassing some significant sentiments -yes memory is a wonderful archive - thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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An interesting closing line here for the 'No rules poetry contest' encompassing some significant sentiments -yes memory is a wonderful archive - thanks for sharing
Comment Written 16-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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Thank you Zanya for this review and the high star rating.
