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Comment from Michele Harber
Another fun and funny entry. I love the contrasts you show between you and Rachelle. ("I don't usually like pancakes, but with home-churned butter and a dollop of apple butter, I eat up. Rachelle is picking at her berries." "She might be assimilating but this southern girl is dying to get out of here.")
I'm a big fan of self-deprecating humor, and you use it well. ("My oldest daughter's first few words were, mama, da-da, brodder (brother) and shit. And, she said it with just the right inflection in her voice that everyone knew she had learned it from me.") In fact, that line about your daughter's first words made me laugh out loud, as did, "Hello corncobs."
I enjoy the gentle humor and, if there were a love story in this (maybe the Amish teens?), I could see it as a Hallmark movie.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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Another fun and funny entry. I love the contrasts you show between you and Rachelle. ("I don't usually like pancakes, but with home-churned butter and a dollop of apple butter, I eat up. Rachelle is picking at her berries." "She might be assimilating but this southern girl is dying to get out of here.")
I'm a big fan of self-deprecating humor, and you use it well. ("My oldest daughter's first few words were, mama, da-da, brodder (brother) and shit. And, she said it with just the right inflection in her voice that everyone knew she had learned it from me.") In fact, that line about your daughter's first words made me laugh out loud, as did, "Hello corncobs."
I enjoy the gentle humor and, if there were a love story in this (maybe the Amish teens?), I could see it as a Hallmark movie.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much. I'm definitely having fun with this. Gretchen
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It shows. And fun in writing definitely adds to fun in reading.
Comment from Teri7
Gretchen, This is another story told about yours and Rachelle's adventure. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from your words. Sometimes we have to end up going to plan B. Thanks for sharing. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Gretchen, This is another story told about yours and Rachelle's adventure. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from your words. Sometimes we have to end up going to plan B. Thanks for sharing. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 17-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Always have a plan B. Plan A rarely works out. Lol. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from lyenochka
I guess I never ate that quantity of blueberries. No corn cobs needed here. The comment about kids being serial killers take on a new tone after reading your latest chapter of Huck and Dewey. But I can imagine a very different take on kids with your line of work in the pharmacy compared to Rachelle's daily work with kids. Enjoyed this chapter and the "curtsy" comment was cute, too. Rachelle knows everything about performance!
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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I guess I never ate that quantity of blueberries. No corn cobs needed here. The comment about kids being serial killers take on a new tone after reading your latest chapter of Huck and Dewey. But I can imagine a very different take on kids with your line of work in the pharmacy compared to Rachelle's daily work with kids. Enjoyed this chapter and the "curtsy" comment was cute, too. Rachelle knows everything about performance!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much. This has been a fun story. Gretchen
Comment from Jim Wile
This was fabulously funny Gretchen. I love your sense of humor.
- From your sarcastic sense of propriety ("Should we curtsy?")
- your unique wisdom ("Every kid does that. Trust me. I've been around hundreds of kids. They all laugh at adults.")
- your hyperbole ("I look around, checking for bears. "Just know this. Little kids are vipers. They look all sweet and innocent, but most are serial killers at heart." )
- and your clever double-entendres ("Hurry up and make the call, Amish Allen." She might be assimilating but this southern girl is dying to get out of here.)
it is all just a riot to read. I also appreciate the great advice about blueberries. You can add cherries to that as well. What a great posting!
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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This was fabulously funny Gretchen. I love your sense of humor.
- From your sarcastic sense of propriety ("Should we curtsy?")
- your unique wisdom ("Every kid does that. Trust me. I've been around hundreds of kids. They all laugh at adults.")
- your hyperbole ("I look around, checking for bears. "Just know this. Little kids are vipers. They look all sweet and innocent, but most are serial killers at heart." )
- and your clever double-entendres ("Hurry up and make the call, Amish Allen." She might be assimilating but this southern girl is dying to get out of here.)
it is all just a riot to read. I also appreciate the great advice about blueberries. You can add cherries to that as well. What a great posting!
Comment Written 14-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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Did not know the curse of the cherry. Thank you for that. I'm glad you enjoyed this. And thank you for the detailed feedback and the six. Gretchen
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
You are hysterically funny.Hello corn cogs! I nearly peed. When my eldest child said his first curse word, it was at my inlaws house, No grass growing under my feet, I said "Walter Gene Kelley" as only women can do properly, you watch your language you pick up in the Fire House. The kid heard it from me. I took Wally outside and said that was a bad word you said. He said "fuck" and he said he when he stubbed his toe good. He was still limping. I said none of us should use bad words even me and your Dad. Okay, and especially in your grandparents house. When we go in bend your head down like I really fussed at you okay? They will expect it. Karen
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2024
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You are hysterically funny.Hello corn cogs! I nearly peed. When my eldest child said his first curse word, it was at my inlaws house, No grass growing under my feet, I said "Walter Gene Kelley" as only women can do properly, you watch your language you pick up in the Fire House. The kid heard it from me. I took Wally outside and said that was a bad word you said. He said "fuck" and he said he when he stubbed his toe good. He was still limping. I said none of us should use bad words even me and your Dad. Okay, and especially in your grandparents house. When we go in bend your head down like I really fussed at you okay? They will expect it. Karen
Comment Written 14-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2024
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Thank you. I'm having so much fun with this. Gretchen
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Love your stuff. Karen
Comment from Sanku
idid notknow about the effect of too much blueberries. The story of two modern women stranded inAmish country is getting more and more interesting...Hopethe phone call would be productive...
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2024
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idid notknow about the effect of too much blueberries. The story of two modern women stranded inAmish country is getting more and more interesting...Hopethe phone call would be productive...
Comment Written 13-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2024
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Too many in rapid succession cause bloating, stomach pain and intestinal distress. Happens to most people. Thank you for this wonderful review. Gretchen
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Gretchen,
as always, an entertaining post. I've really been enjoying this story with the two of you. I never realized blueberries caused intestinal distress. When we were on the farm, I used to eat a fair number. There were blueberry bushes everywhere. They weren't particularly sweet, I suppose because they didn't get much sunshine in Southeast. Bears loved them too, so one had to be careful when picking. You gals have done a great job with this story. Well done.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2024
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Hello Gretchen,
as always, an entertaining post. I've really been enjoying this story with the two of you. I never realized blueberries caused intestinal distress. When we were on the farm, I used to eat a fair number. There were blueberry bushes everywhere. They weren't particularly sweet, I suppose because they didn't get much sunshine in Southeast. Bears loved them too, so one had to be careful when picking. You gals have done a great job with this story. Well done.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 13-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Tom. I'm glad you are enjoying this. I'm having fun writing it. And, maybe you have a cast iron stomach. Thank you for the stellar rating. Gretchen
Comment from Samantha Wymer
I really enjoyed with the next chapter of this story. I hope you continue. Amish country is believe,I have been to a local farm full of Amish workers. They sure know how to garden with such huge vegetables. Excellent job.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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I really enjoyed with the next chapter of this story. I hope you continue. Amish country is believe,I have been to a local farm full of Amish workers. They sure know how to garden with such huge vegetables. Excellent job.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Thank you for this awesome review and the excellent rating. I've never been there except in my imagination. Lol. But I've heard it's beautiful. Gretchen
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Your welcome 😁
Comment from Wendy G
Lol. Another gteat chapter full of fun, very humorously portraying yourselves and your differences from the Amish. Yes, the kids will definitely be sniggering at the two of you!
Wendy
Edit: While Hannah tells the tale of the morning, not to mention the numerous humiliating moments for Rachelle and me. (Remove "while")
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Lol. Another gteat chapter full of fun, very humorously portraying yourselves and your differences from the Amish. Yes, the kids will definitely be sniggering at the two of you!
Wendy
Edit: While Hannah tells the tale of the morning, not to mention the numerous humiliating moments for Rachelle and me. (Remove "while")
Comment Written 12-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Wendy. I do love children. I know it sounds like I don't. But you never know what they are going to say or do. It's like going to Las Vegas, you never know if you're going to come out a winner or a loser. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A very amusing post Gretchen, I love your sarcasm and your discomfort is evident here in this environment where you think you are a spectacle. I hope you two escape soon as you may just end up joining them! Ha ha ha, a fine post, I was thoroughly entertained, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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A very amusing post Gretchen, I love your sarcasm and your discomfort is evident here in this environment where you think you are a spectacle. I hope you two escape soon as you may just end up joining them! Ha ha ha, a fine post, I was thoroughly entertained, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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I'm sure they would make sure I'm returned to the English world. Lol. They might keep Rachelle. Thank you for this. Gretchen
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Ha ha ha x x x