Living With Schizophrenia
A brother and brother battle schizophrenia32 total reviews
Comment from BOO ghost
Reading quatrain to quatrain. A stanza is a quatrain with four lines, right? Reading next stanza, hearing voices, no telling what them voices are saying, AA, BB rhyme couplet? I see the rhythm and rhymes. Kinda of warped way of thinking... Thinking they are saving a persons soul or whatever. Good read, indeed! BOO!
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
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Reading quatrain to quatrain. A stanza is a quatrain with four lines, right? Reading next stanza, hearing voices, no telling what them voices are saying, AA, BB rhyme couplet? I see the rhythm and rhymes. Kinda of warped way of thinking... Thinking they are saving a persons soul or whatever. Good read, indeed! BOO!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
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Yes aabb rhyming scheme and the four lines in is called a quatrain. You learn quickly
Thank for your warm review and excellent rating
Comment from Erika Whittle
I'm glad the real life story had a different ending. I like the rhythm of your poem. It flows nicely. As always, your story telling in poetic form is superb
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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I'm glad the real life story had a different ending. I like the rhythm of your poem. It flows nicely. As always, your story telling in poetic form is superb
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and a great review
Comment from Madeleine Mardis
Wow, Pamusart! I'm out of sixes but this deserves one! Jeez, this poem reaches new heights, through the stratosphere! Educational artistry! A masterful work of art! Maddy
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Wow, Pamusart! I'm out of sixes but this deserves one! Jeez, this poem reaches new heights, through the stratosphere! Educational artistry! A masterful work of art! Maddy
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and a great review
Thank you for all of those blushing work
Comment from Jacob1395
It must be absolutely horrible to live with schizophrenia. You describe it really well in your poem, and I could feel the emotion coming through in your writing. I'm glad that your brother is doing well on his medication. An excellent piece of writing.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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It must be absolutely horrible to live with schizophrenia. You describe it really well in your poem, and I could feel the emotion coming through in your writing. I'm glad that your brother is doing well on his medication. An excellent piece of writing.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful review
and excellent stars
Comment from Phame Louis
Your poem conveys a powerful narrative about mental illness, familial love, and the struggle to manage violent impulses. You effectively use rhyme and rhythm to create a sense of urgency and tension throughout the piece. Overall, Great work I enjoyed it and wouldn't change anything.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Your poem conveys a powerful narrative about mental illness, familial love, and the struggle to manage violent impulses. You effectively use rhyme and rhythm to create a sense of urgency and tension throughout the piece. Overall, Great work I enjoyed it and wouldn't change anything.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful review
and excellent stars
Comment from Ginda Simpson
You do the world a service with this poem that illustrates the heartache and loneliness of this disorder. Helping others understand their inner conflicts builds compassion.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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You do the world a service with this poem that illustrates the heartache and loneliness of this disorder. Helping others understand their inner conflicts builds compassion.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful review
and excellent stars
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Strong rhymes used throughout this poem.
Mental illness of any kind a tough situation to suffer from.
When one "hears voices" they often are violent thoughts that make no sense.
"tortured" is a good word to describe the experiences of those who suffer from mental illness.
Saved his sister by knitting you. Way schizos tend to think.
"talking heads" need to control the mentally ill.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Strong rhymes used throughout this poem.
Mental illness of any kind a tough situation to suffer from.
When one "hears voices" they often are violent thoughts that make no sense.
"tortured" is a good word to describe the experiences of those who suffer from mental illness.
Saved his sister by knitting you. Way schizos tend to think.
"talking heads" need to control the mentally ill.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful review
and excellent stars
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I am sorry your family goes through this. My youngest has manic depression and his mood swings can be angry and violent when he is not on medication. And some of the medicine he has been on quiets his mind to the point he is a zombie. When your brain is against you life is very hard. Good writing you have my best wishes. Karen
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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I am sorry your family goes through this. My youngest has manic depression and his mood swings can be angry and violent when he is not on medication. And some of the medicine he has been on quiets his mind to the point he is a zombie. When your brain is against you life is very hard. Good writing you have my best wishes. Karen
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful review
and excellent stars
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U R Welcome Karen
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I wondered if you meant 'A brother and brother battle schizophrenia' in the title description? Both your poetry and notes convey the full horror of this disorder for patient and carer. I worked with such patients but, of course, they were heavily medicated and spent most of the day sleeping. Only occasionally exploding in a fit of rage. I like the way you take on challenging subjects and then skilfully convey them in verse. Never easy but always interesting and with a strong social message. Thanks for sharing, Pam. Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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I wondered if you meant 'A brother and brother battle schizophrenia' in the title description? Both your poetry and notes convey the full horror of this disorder for patient and carer. I worked with such patients but, of course, they were heavily medicated and spent most of the day sleeping. Only occasionally exploding in a fit of rage. I like the way you take on challenging subjects and then skilfully convey them in verse. Never easy but always interesting and with a strong social message. Thanks for sharing, Pam. Take care Debbie
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful review
and excellent stars
I meant brother and sister. The brother kills the sister at the end.
Comment from Steve Foreman
This is such an emotional and sad poem, that I forget about if I am rating the rhyming sequence or syllable consistency, and just listen to the voice. It is so clear and powerful. How terrible that this is affecting your family.
But, back the poem... well done!
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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This is such an emotional and sad poem, that I forget about if I am rating the rhyming sequence or syllable consistency, and just listen to the voice. It is so clear and powerful. How terrible that this is affecting your family.
But, back the poem... well done!
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful review
and excellent stars