Chance Encounter
An entry in the True Story Flash contest15 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Yes, God is always there when we need him. I enjoyed reading and good luck with the contest.
I clutched the bunch of keys hidden in my fist. I was ready to fight when the tram arrived and we were suddenly surrounded by people. (comma needed after 'arrived,'
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Yes, God is always there when we need him. I enjoyed reading and good luck with the contest.
I clutched the bunch of keys hidden in my fist. I was ready to fight when the tram arrived and we were suddenly surrounded by people. (comma needed after 'arrived,'
Comment Written 16-Jun-2024
Comment from BethShelby
This is good story. There are crape's out there and we have to be prepared to protect ourselves. I remember once going to a movie alone. It was dark and I felt my way to a seat. I was young and insecure. Suddenly a man came and sat beside me. I tried to pay no attention thinking he couldn't see either and he taken the seat without realizing I was there. When I heard him making weird noises, i glanced over and he was masturbating. I jumped up and ran to the door and sat by the back door where a usher was standing for the rest of the movie. He never touched me or spoke but I felt violated.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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This is good story. There are crape's out there and we have to be prepared to protect ourselves. I remember once going to a movie alone. It was dark and I felt my way to a seat. I was young and insecure. Suddenly a man came and sat beside me. I tried to pay no attention thinking he couldn't see either and he taken the seat without realizing I was there. When I heard him making weird noises, i glanced over and he was masturbating. I jumped up and ran to the door and sat by the back door where a usher was standing for the rest of the movie. He never touched me or spoke but I felt violated.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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Thanks, Beth. These people are disgusting and I hope they get their comeuppance.
Comment from royowen
Heh heh, this is an excellent entry in this true storyline. Declaring that creeps are decidedly cowardly, piece of stuff. Thank you for sharing this very post that must stand a cjance, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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Heh heh, this is an excellent entry in this true storyline. Declaring that creeps are decidedly cowardly, piece of stuff. Thank you for sharing this very post that must stand a cjance, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 14-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Roy! :)
Comment from Spitfire
You captured these harrowing moments in your short terse sentences. His actions and body language speak his intention. The alliteration in the last line makes the truth doubly effective.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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You captured these harrowing moments in your short terse sentences. His actions and body language speak his intention. The alliteration in the last line makes the truth doubly effective.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much!
Comment from jessizero
This sounds incredibly scary! I am glad "creeps are cowards." I admire you for having your keys and being ready to fight. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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This sounds incredibly scary! I am glad "creeps are cowards." I admire you for having your keys and being ready to fight. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much! :)
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Wow, how lucky the tram came along when it did, for him, the creep. Sounds like you were ready, navada. I got that tip about the keys from my granddaughter and always have my car key sticking out. Mind you now I think I 'd use my walking stick (hopefully I never need either)
Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Wow, how lucky the tram came along when it did, for him, the creep. Sounds like you were ready, navada. I got that tip about the keys from my granddaughter and always have my car key sticking out. Mind you now I think I 'd use my walking stick (hopefully I never need either)
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Thanks so much, Valda! :)
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
These little stories are tough, aren't they? I did one "Irony," and I fought that sucker down to 100 words. It pushed back every step of the way. But, when you finish, it feels good, doesn't it? I felt that sleaze sliding over to you. Well done. Karen
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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These little stories are tough, aren't they? I did one "Irony," and I fought that sucker down to 100 words. It pushed back every step of the way. But, when you finish, it feels good, doesn't it? I felt that sleaze sliding over to you. Well done. Karen
Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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Thanks, Karen. The discipline of meeting a word limit is probably good for me - stops me waffling! :)
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I like prompts. They stretch us.
Karen
Comment from Jim Wile
Oh, goodness. That would be extremely frightening. I'm glad it ended the way it did, and the coward ran off. Brilliant little flash story told so well and succinctly. Not a wasted word, as it cut right to the essence of this creepy event. Very well done.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2024
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Oh, goodness. That would be extremely frightening. I'm glad it ended the way it did, and the coward ran off. Brilliant little flash story told so well and succinctly. Not a wasted word, as it cut right to the essence of this creepy event. Very well done.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2024
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Thanks so much, Jim! Sometimes shortened syllables really force you to exercise some discipline and strip away the dead wood (as a writer, I always feel I produce so much dead wood!). :) This wasn't a unique encounter, sadly, but I've always managed to get away.
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Well, that's a relief. Sorry it is that way. Maybe you should wear a hideous-looking mask when waiting for trams. :)
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Ha! :) Not sure it would make any difference, sadly. Creeps don't seem to care about aesthetics.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Thank God indeed!
Nicely written. Good work.
Mace. Or some kind of pepper spray. It would be nice if they put paint into the pepper spray so they could be identified wherever they went.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2024
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Thank God indeed!
Nicely written. Good work.
Mace. Or some kind of pepper spray. It would be nice if they put paint into the pepper spray so they could be identified wherever they went.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2024
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Thanks, Wayne! :)
Comment from Mustang Patty
Oh, my goodness!
It sounds like you managed to scare away a scary situation. I'm glad this short, short story had a good ending.
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest,
~MP~
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2024
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Oh, my goodness!
It sounds like you managed to scare away a scary situation. I'm glad this short, short story had a good ending.
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest,
~MP~
Comment Written 11-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2024
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Thank you! Yes, this was a lucky situation. :)