Secretive
An affair best kept in the shadows.5 total reviews
Comment from Aiona
This acrostic poem describes all the features of an elicit tryst in each line and does so by still using the acrostic structure. Very nicely done! There is a little bit of end rhyme in some lines, and some alliteration in Lines 1, 2, and 5.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023
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This acrostic poem describes all the features of an elicit tryst in each line and does so by still using the acrostic structure. Very nicely done! There is a little bit of end rhyme in some lines, and some alliteration in Lines 1, 2, and 5.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023
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Thanks for the read and feedback.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Well done! It kind of takes the "romance" out of illicit love, but not in a "preachy" way, but rather, with a this-is-the-reality-Does-it-really-seem-APPEALING? vibe, which I think is great.
I haven't read all the entries, but so far this is the one that's getting my vote.
Good luck in the polls. xo
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023
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Well done! It kind of takes the "romance" out of illicit love, but not in a "preachy" way, but rather, with a this-is-the-reality-Does-it-really-seem-APPEALING? vibe, which I think is great.
I haven't read all the entries, but so far this is the one that's getting my vote.
Good luck in the polls. xo
Comment Written 21-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023
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Thank you for the read and review and for giving me encouragement.
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My pleasure!
Comment from angel123
I enjoyed reading your Acrostic poem. It flows well with an interesting message of keeping secret affairs secret. Your artwork choice is interesting, and it enhances your message. Good luck in the contest. Best wishes!
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023
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I enjoyed reading your Acrostic poem. It flows well with an interesting message of keeping secret affairs secret. Your artwork choice is interesting, and it enhances your message. Good luck in the contest. Best wishes!
Comment Written 21-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023
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Thank you for taking the time to read and for providing encouraging feedback.
Comment from Eleri
This poem has the correct form for an acrostic and generally reads well. I don't quite get the bit about walls melting away but the rest is well crafted. Good luck with it
Eleri
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
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This poem has the correct form for an acrostic and generally reads well. I don't quite get the bit about walls melting away but the rest is well crafted. Good luck with it
Eleri
Comment Written 17-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
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Thanks for the read and the review. The could melt if the secret is discovered.
Comment from Navada
You've captured many elements of an affair from the perspective of someone involved in the deception. I can imagine there is a delight in the surreptitious nature of it, but I struggle to get past the impact an affair has on those who are betrayed in the process.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
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You've captured many elements of an affair from the perspective of someone involved in the deception. I can imagine there is a delight in the surreptitious nature of it, but I struggle to get past the impact an affair has on those who are betrayed in the process.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
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You are right. It never ends well. Thanks for the read and feedback.