2023 Gypsy's Tanka
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10 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this presentation with us. It's beautiful as we've come to expect with your poetry. I can't imagine you ever posting something just plain. You always dazzle us.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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Thank you for sharing this presentation with us. It's beautiful as we've come to expect with your poetry. I can't imagine you ever posting something just plain. You always dazzle us.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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Thank you, Barbara. I appreciate your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Fei Ma
I love this poem, very classic and poetic. The words line up in an increasing pattern, creating very pleasing visual effect. I suggest this beautiful poem is not to be called a busso, I am not sure though, as I have hard time to count 5/7/5/7/7/7.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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I love this poem, very classic and poetic. The words line up in an increasing pattern, creating very pleasing visual effect. I suggest this beautiful poem is not to be called a busso, I am not sure though, as I have hard time to count 5/7/5/7/7/7.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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Fei Ma
Thank you for catching that error. This is a Gogyohka 5 Lines Poem.
I appreciate your exceptional six stars review and helpful feedback. (*÷*) may you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
this was a cool busso
and i like the pyramid effect...
question- so the syllable counts aren't written in stone? (3-6-5-8-8)
as long as it's 38 syllables or less?
anyway, good flow of words and imagery
maybe have one of the lines in a light blue to match that cool blue flower in the bottom pic? lol just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing'
shelley :)
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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this was a cool busso
and i like the pyramid effect...
question- so the syllable counts aren't written in stone? (3-6-5-8-8)
as long as it's 38 syllables or less?
anyway, good flow of words and imagery
maybe have one of the lines in a light blue to match that cool blue flower in the bottom pic? lol just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing'
shelley :)
Comment Written 16-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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Gogyohka was a form developed by Enta Kusakabe in Japan and translates literally to "five-line poem." An off-shoot of the tanka form, the gogyohka has very simple rules: The poem is comprised of five lines with one phrase per line. That's it.
.I appreciate your excellent review and helpful feedback. (*÷*) may you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
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oh wait- was thinking of the busso LOL! oops! so many forms - gotta start making better notes LOL!
thank you gypsy 😅😁👍💙🖊️🦄
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You are right, I wrote rules of busso in my author notes by mistake but the poem is Gogyohka. A reviewer told me. I guess I had busso in my mind too.
Comment from kahpot
Excellent, though I am so happy that I did not have to travel that far to find my love, seduction is hard to avoid, though we must, very well written and presented****kahpot
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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Excellent, though I am so happy that I did not have to travel that far to find my love, seduction is hard to avoid, though we must, very well written and presented****kahpot
Comment Written 16-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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.I appreciate your excellent review and helpful feedback. (*÷*) may you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
Your poem shows an enthusiastic and loyal love that goes beyond this world. Hopefully, the one that is so loved with that much dedication, will reciprocate such a love!
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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Your poem shows an enthusiastic and loyal love that goes beyond this world. Hopefully, the one that is so loved with that much dedication, will reciprocate such a love!
Comment Written 16-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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Ihank you very much, big sister, it's interesting the way different people grieve. When my mother died I did lay in my mother's side of the bed and held on to her illow and clothes.
Love,
Marival
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Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is an excellent poem. I enjoyed reading it. I also love that song. Your beautiful presentation is very good, too. You use descriptive words and colorful imagery that draw in many readers I'm sure.
Best wishes!
Alexan
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
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This is an excellent poem. I enjoyed reading it. I also love that song. Your beautiful presentation is very good, too. You use descriptive words and colorful imagery that draw in many readers I'm sure.
Best wishes!
Alexan
Comment Written 15-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
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Thank you very much, Alexan. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from aryr
This was a beautiful Bussokusekika, Gypsy. The dual picture were of great value since they spoke a fantastic dual. Your words were wonderful because they addressed the fact that you spoke the truth of searching the universe. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
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This was a beautiful Bussokusekika, Gypsy. The dual picture were of great value since they spoke a fantastic dual. Your words were wonderful because they addressed the fact that you spoke the truth of searching the universe. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 15-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
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Thank you very much. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy hugs
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Most welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was a poem that made me think of lost love. Searching for that one soul who you connected with. It was as if two worlds were moving close in orbit but still far enough away to miss. Gretchen
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
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This was a poem that made me think of lost love. Searching for that one soul who you connected with. It was as if two worlds were moving close in orbit but still far enough away to miss. Gretchen
Comment Written 15-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
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A very insightful review, Gretchen. Some loves are not meant to happen. Tanka is about passion, lovers, or love lost. It's my favorite kind of poem. I've read Tanka written by Japanese women poets from 100 years ago that write about the same I write about. It's amazing to me. I guess women across time and cultures share a lot.
Thank you very much. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from JT traveller
I love both the song and your poem. Your words and presentation, as always, are exceptional.
It gives me great joy to read and enjoy your poetry. It takes me to an ephemeral place. Thank you. Jacqueline
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
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I love both the song and your poem. Your words and presentation, as always, are exceptional.
It gives me great joy to read and enjoy your poetry. It takes me to an ephemeral place. Thank you. Jacqueline
Comment Written 15-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
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Thank you very much for the wonderful review and kind words. Have a fabulous day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from royowen
Wouldn't it be wonderful soaring across the universe searching out a lover, some of my imaginative friends have thought that heavenly duties would do that, beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
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Wouldn't it be wonderful soaring across the universe searching out a lover, some of my imaginative friends have thought that heavenly duties would do that, beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 15-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
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Thank you very much for the wonderful review and kind words. Have a fabulous day.
Gypsy hugs
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Bless you.