Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

I found your two line poem to be very interesting. As I am getting older, I find that I feel the cold more than I did when I was younger. I keep asking you and the family just turn up the heat yet they don't want to because he's in my room cause his other part of the house to be really warm as well. Patricia.

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023

Thanks Patricia

Comment from country ranch writer

Excellent

Some one turn up the heat for the poor old man he looks very perturbed and very unused to being cold.
He wants ti get warm
Wouldn't you at his age?
It's even hard to think
Or move when one is freezing.

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023

Thank you so much

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Lol. That man looks frozen with a frown! Thanks for the laugh. You met the challenge of the essence poem perfectly with the old-cold, feet-heat rhyme for this old codger. Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023

Thanks so much Helen.

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

Yes, I've always wondered why so many old people are so grouchy. But cold feet, and no heat are a good start. And when we think of all they've heard and felt so many times before, why wouldn't they be grouchy. :-) Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023

Thanks Ric my friend. I bet you didn?t read the rules of that competition that I had to adhere to.

reply by Ric Myworld on 16-Aug-2023

No, honestly, I never read the competition rules. But now I'm figuring that I should. :-)

reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023

These little short things that I write are always for a certain criteria. I find it challenging especially as I haven?t got the concentration or the motivation to write anything much longer.

reply by Ric Myworld on 17-Aug-2023

I enjoy everything you write, but I must admit, your longer pieces are the ones that have stuck with me. When I think back there have been a few that were like daggers to the heart. And yes, every time your name pops up in my inbox, I'm hoping you've penned another of those masterpieces that touch me so much. It's always a pleasure my dear!

reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023

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Comment from JSD

Excellent

I'm not sure I could write a poem in two lines, but you have done extremely well here. Twelve syllables and four rhymes tell a lovely story of your moaning character. Well done and good luck in the competition.

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023

Thank you so much

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This essence poem, Always Moaning, has the proper formatting and finds that time of life when all the things that never bothered us before, now bother us constantly.

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023

Thank you so much

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

Oh yes! I don't think I quite look that miserable yet but I feel his words! Your 2 line verse cleverly captures those emotions with also a touch of humour. Well done and good luck! Debbie

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023

Thanks Debbie

Comment from Mary Vigasin

Excellent

I used to ignore my older relatives moaning and complaining. Now I am that old person moaning and complaining!
Clever entry both in words and presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
I enjoyed reading.
Best wishes,
Mary

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023

Thanks Mary