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Poems of the things of the spirit

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Comment from ruminative scribbler
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This poem is very poignant and i can definitely relate to feeling bitter-sweet in all of the above scenarios when seeking joy, peace and strength within. I wish you well in the contest

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023
    Thank you for your encouragement. I'm glad you found it relatable.
Comment from Katie Mae Dead
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What a lovely haiku suite poet! I love your repeating line and suggest you change the title to "Feeling Bitter Sweet". It will help the reader remember your poem better and get you more votes.
Change all the capital letters and make them all lower case. Haiku doesn't use them except for proper nouns. I know it's a small thing but someone else might mention it. Your first two sentences should be a complete thought which it is. Just don't capitalize the beginning of each sentence.
Your choice of a teapeati line is stunning. "feeling bitter sweet"...just stunning. Great flow throughout one haiku to the next.
Awesome job and best wishes in the contest. You should do well
Katiemaedead

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023
    Thank you so much for your feedback. I made those corrections. I really appreciate this.
Comment from jim vecchio
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This wasn't the easiest poetic contest, but you aced it and should have a good chance of winning. I remember hating it when my father projected old pictures of me. Now I wish he were here and I could enjoy them. it is a bittersweet feeling.

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023
    Thank you so much for the encouragement. It was my first Haiku.
reply by jim vecchio on 12-Aug-2023
    You did a wonderful job!