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Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Smile And Be Positive"
Live the best you can.

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Comment from Teri7
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This is a very interesting and much needed poem for life these days. Wish everyone would read this. We all need to be kind, share joy and light in this dark world some days. Thank you for writing. love and blessings, teri

 Comment Written 04-May-2023

reply by the author on 04-May-2023
    Thanks!
Comment from Paul McFarland
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You almost did it. Every line has the same meter except one. Can you tell me which line that is, and can you fix it? I think there is hope for you after all.

 Comment Written 03-May-2023

reply by the author on 03-May-2023
    I don't know, thanks!
reply by Paul McFarland on 03-May-2023
    "Through each trial" is the line I am looking at. You may be seeing "trial" as a two syllable word. Even so, that line does not read like the others. Do you agree?
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
    Yes, and it is two syllables.
reply by Paul McFarland on 03-May-2023
    Are you going to change that line?
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
    No I don't know how to change it, and you should give me six stars, since that line was the only line with wrong meter!
reply by Paul McFarland on 03-May-2023
    "Trial" is one of many words that can be treated as one syllable or two. Let's change that line to "Through every trial". What do you think?
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
    Would you give me six stars if I changed that line?
reply by Paul McFarland on 03-May-2023
    I will give you six stars when you give me a poem with perfect meter. Do you see that the poem reads more smoothly with the change I made?
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
    Yes, if I change it, the poem will be perfect meter.
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
    I changed the poem..
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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A positive write full of light and encouragement here as we sometimes fall and have to pick ourselves up and carryon, an uplifting post, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 02-May-2023

reply by the author on 02-May-2023
    Thanks!
Comment from Lady MJ
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Loving yourself is very important or you won't be able to help yourself and extend to others the help they need. I enjoyed the rhyming and meter in this poem. It's not how you fall but how you get up from the fall.

 Comment Written 02-May-2023

reply by the author on 02-May-2023
    Thanks!