O Autumn
Ode - 5-7-58 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao Sugarray,
the picture you found is just mesmerizing... I can't understand those that don't like Autumn and just see it as a "dead " season.
Those vibrant hues are just like a torch ablaze...your beautiful poem deserved to win. The poem that won is okay (it's childish )
it clearly lacks the poetic artistry your poem possesses.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
Ciao Sugarray,
the picture you found is just mesmerizing... I can't understand those that don't like Autumn and just see it as a "dead " season.
Those vibrant hues are just like a torch ablaze...your beautiful poem deserved to win. The poem that won is okay (it's childish )
it clearly lacks the poetic artistry your poem possesses.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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Hello Franca... thank you for your lovely comments. They really encouraged me!! I love to write poetry and just posted a new one about 'my muse' it isn't in the contest, but the prompt did inspire me. Hugs, sweet friend.
Melissa
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is beautiful, vibrant with colours and skilful verse. Love all the imagery too in such an economical verse form. Well done. My favourite of the contest. Best wishes Debbie
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
This is beautiful, vibrant with colours and skilful verse. Love all the imagery too in such an economical verse form. Well done. My favourite of the contest. Best wishes Debbie
Comment Written 18-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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thank you very much Debbie!!
Melissa
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Your poem is well written. Fall is a beautiful time of the year, but I am ready to see the trees open their buds and warmth produce flowers blossoming. My blue bells are covered with snow this morning.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
Your poem is well written. Fall is a beautiful time of the year, but I am ready to see the trees open their buds and warmth produce flowers blossoming. My blue bells are covered with snow this morning.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
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Oh, Rosemary, my Virginia Blue Eyes are peeping at me with their blue, blue eyes. Wish I could see your 'frosted' blue bells !!
Comment from kiwisteveh
I've seen several excellent entries for this contest and this is one of them - should be competitive in the booth.
The burning metaphor extends throughout the poem and the 'apostrophe' signalled by 'O' as the first word points to this as a true ode.
Good luck.
Steve
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
I've seen several excellent entries for this contest and this is one of them - should be competitive in the booth.
The burning metaphor extends throughout the poem and the 'apostrophe' signalled by 'O' as the first word points to this as a true ode.
Good luck.
Steve
Comment Written 15-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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Thanks so much, Steve... enjoy your tastes of autumn down there!! :)
Comment from LisaMay
This is terrific! I think it might win as it fits the ode request and describes autumn so well. I especially like your use of brazen (bold; brassy) and verdant with the imagery of the red flames licking out after ignition by the torch.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
This is terrific! I think it might win as it fits the ode request and describes autumn so well. I especially like your use of brazen (bold; brassy) and verdant with the imagery of the red flames licking out after ignition by the torch.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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Hey Lisa... I like your review better than I like my ode. Lol. Enjoy your tastes of autumn down there in NZ!! Thanks so much.
Comment from shelley kaye
Oh Autumn, ignite
your brazen torch to lush trees -
red leaves all aflame
great autumn haiku
one suggestion i have is to maybe try a red/orange background and a gold font? just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
Oh Autumn, ignite
your brazen torch to lush trees -
red leaves all aflame
great autumn haiku
one suggestion i have is to maybe try a red/orange background and a gold font? just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
Comment Written 15-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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Thanks so much! :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Autumnal colours are vibrant and bold and you created a rich colourful scheme here full of abundant texture in the trees, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x x
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
Autumnal colours are vibrant and bold and you created a rich colourful scheme here full of abundant texture in the trees, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x x
Comment Written 15-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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Thanks so much, Dolly!
Comment from royowen
I like this, most poetic, one would probably find this narrative in longer versions of poetry, but you've dealy affirmatively with the glory that is autumn, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
I like this, most poetic, one would probably find this narrative in longer versions of poetry, but you've dealy affirmatively with the glory that is autumn, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 15-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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Thanks so much. I was surprised to see an ode with a 5-7-5 requirement, but gave it a try :)
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Yep well done