Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

this was good, but maybe not use "yellow" twice in such a short poem?

another suggestion maybe try a dark brown background and a yellow or orange font?

just a few thoughts for you to kick around

thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)




UPDATE - much better using two different colours
good luck! :)

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023

I have made the corrections. Is it better now for five stars rating? Thanks!

reply by shelley kaye on 15-Apr-2023

updated :)

reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023

Thank you!

Comment from AP Apgar

Excellent

I like your haiku poem- excellent picture presentation- very beautiful going into infinity- glad to see you writing haiku- will teach you discipline- economy of words- haiku suggestions- no capitalization- at the end off the second line- (-) dash=pause before your satori = enlightening statement in you last line- "a beautiful day" in this case- good job AP

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023

Thank you!

Comment from Cherish Adams

Excellent

This is a beautifully depicted autumn day. Imagery is fantastic. I have seen this day. Thank you for this beautiful reminder. Good luck in the contest. Cherish :)

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023

Thank you!