Death By Murder
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Death By Murder - Chap 6"A jewel heist, rival gangs and a cold case.
18 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Oh! So, Bennie is a cousin? I guess I missed that before. I have to say there are few "saints' in this world that wouldn't (for at least a moment) at least entertain the idea of helping themselves to a few gems which no one would miss... And if Bennie has had a tough life, all the more reason to feel it'd be "cool." Your plots are always so interesting, Carol. That description of the jewel heist gone wrong, wrong, wrong was very well written!
Karenina
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Oh! So, Bennie is a cousin? I guess I missed that before. I have to say there are few "saints' in this world that wouldn't (for at least a moment) at least entertain the idea of helping themselves to a few gems which no one would miss... And if Bennie has had a tough life, all the more reason to feel it'd be "cool." Your plots are always so interesting, Carol. That description of the jewel heist gone wrong, wrong, wrong was very well written!
Karenina
Comment Written 28-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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The cousin part is referred by him calling him Cuz.... but later chapters will clarify. Both men have had tough lives, but different upbring which will form their thoughts on thngs.
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I must learn patience. I was this way as a five-year-old. I AM a five-year-old!
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Patience isn't high on my list of virtues either. LOL
Comment from Carol Clark2
Wow, what a good chapter! The web is getting tangled, and it sounds like Bennie is not a good influence on his cousin. One suggestion for the last sentence: they raised their glass(es), imagining a better life (no quotation mark needed, as they're not speaking here. Good dialogue throughout.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2022
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Wow, what a good chapter! The web is getting tangled, and it sounds like Bennie is not a good influence on his cousin. One suggestion for the last sentence: they raised their glass(es), imagining a better life (no quotation mark needed, as they're not speaking here. Good dialogue throughout.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2022
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Good morning, Carol
Thanks for reading and reviewing and for enjoying. I am so happy to be back writing. As for Bennie, he grew up on the rough side and he is always wondering how to get out of the place he is, but family will always remain first.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. It kept my interest from beginning to end. The hook at the end is great. I do not see any room for improvement. The picture goes well with the story.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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This is another excellent chapter. It kept my interest from beginning to end. The hook at the end is great. I do not see any room for improvement. The picture goes well with the story.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much for reading and enjoying. My apologies for being so far behind. Life seems to get in the way at times. I do appreciate your thoughts and kindness.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Shirley McLain
I thought I had already reviewed this chapter, but the empty space at the bottom says otherwise. Another great chapter that I enjoyed reading. I'm eagerly waiting for the next installment. Shirley
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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I thought I had already reviewed this chapter, but the empty space at the bottom says otherwise. Another great chapter that I enjoyed reading. I'm eagerly waiting for the next installment. Shirley
Comment Written 31-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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So sorry for the delay in telling you how much I appreciate your thoughts, enjoyment and the stars. You lift me exactly when I need it.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Judy Lawless
It seems I missed this chapter, Carol, and reviewed the next one first. lol This is another great chapter. Lance and Bernie have gotten themselves into a dangerous scene. Had I read this in order, I'd be hoping they would do the right thing. Too bad too much alcohol messed up Bernie's thinking and put Lance to sleep. Well done.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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It seems I missed this chapter, Carol, and reviewed the next one first. lol This is another great chapter. Lance and Bernie have gotten themselves into a dangerous scene. Had I read this in order, I'd be hoping they would do the right thing. Too bad too much alcohol messed up Bernie's thinking and put Lance to sleep. Well done.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Lance's past will prevent him from stealing the diamonds, but his loyalty to Bennie will tempt him. Bennie was raised by his dad and lived on the streets. Survival trumps all else. And the secret unravels so quickly.
Yes, alcohol messes people up.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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You?re very welcome, Carol.
Comment from LJbutterfly
I am so impressed by your writing style...the way you bring your characters to life with realistic thoughts, feelings, and dialogue. Readers can identify with Lance's honesty and fear, while understanding Bennie desire to make a dangerous situation profitable. I also appreciate that there is more than one story to wrap my brain around. Well done.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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I am so impressed by your writing style...the way you bring your characters to life with realistic thoughts, feelings, and dialogue. Readers can identify with Lance's honesty and fear, while understanding Bennie desire to make a dangerous situation profitable. I also appreciate that there is more than one story to wrap my brain around. Well done.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Oh you are so kind with your words and stars. I am humbled and blessed that you are enjoying the story, Lorraine. I too like to have other stories entwined with the main one.
Lance's past will prevent him from stealing the diamonds, but his loyalty to Bennie will tempt him. Bennie was raised by his dad and lived on the streets. Survival trumps all else. And the secret unravels so quickly.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
An ethical dilemma of significant proportions has emerged along with the question of how they will get the jewels to the person. The teller will be a significant problem! Well written - kept me on the edge of my seat!
Wendy
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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An ethical dilemma of significant proportions has emerged along with the question of how they will get the jewels to the person. The teller will be a significant problem! Well written - kept me on the edge of my seat!
Wendy
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much for reading and enjoying. My apologies for being so far behind. Life seems to get in the way at times. I do appreciate your thoughts and kindness.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
The story continues to be really engaging and quite understandable. Bennie does have a point even if morally wrong. Seems like they should find that grandson but that teller could cause them a lot of trouble already.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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The story continues to be really engaging and quite understandable. Bennie does have a point even if morally wrong. Seems like they should find that grandson but that teller could cause them a lot of trouble already.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much for reading and enjoying. My apologies for being so far behind. Life seems to get in the way at times. I do appreciate your thoughts and kindness.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
I guess it is human nature kicking in to think you deserve something more for risking you life if this story gets out. It sounds like the lawyer has plans to try to do the right thing and not be a thief but I'm not so sure about his cousin., This is antoher good chapter. I'm looking forward to reading more if I ever get caught up.
Betj
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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I guess it is human nature kicking in to think you deserve something more for risking you life if this story gets out. It sounds like the lawyer has plans to try to do the right thing and not be a thief but I'm not so sure about his cousin., This is antoher good chapter. I'm looking forward to reading more if I ever get caught up.
Betj
Comment Written 29-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much for reading and enjoying. My apologies for being so far behind. Life seems to get in the way at times. I do appreciate your thoughts and kindness.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Heather Knight
Hi,
Although this is the first chapter I've read, I've found it very interesting.
You've created two distinctive characters with very different voices.
Thanks for sharing. I've enjoyed it very much.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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Hi,
Although this is the first chapter I've read, I've found it very interesting.
You've created two distinctive characters with very different voices.
Thanks for sharing. I've enjoyed it very much.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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First and foremost, I want to thank you for continuing to read and enjoy the story. You put a smile on my face. I appreciate your time and your thoughtfulness.
Sorry for the delay but we have just had our 7th death in our family and close friends this year and it's taking a serious toll on all of us. Thank you for understanding.
Apologize for the standard post.... Hugs, Carol
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I'm so sorry to hear that, Carol. There are no words for situations like this.
Take care of yourself.x
