Comment from Adri7enne

Exceptional

Got a feeling the old lady is a bit of a witch and when she tells a fellow he should leave, he probably should listen. Well done, getting a warning in there in such a subtle way. I really like Bob's character. Probably because he reminds me so much of you. And he's named "Bob".That's not as subtle. Lol! Still enjoying it,Bob. Your characters are real, even if they're hardly human. Fun stuff.

 Comment Written 16-May-2021

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reply by the author on 16-May-2021

Thanks. Nice to see you back. Glad you liked it. And yeah, busted.

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Bob,

I had wondered, when you sad you were going to try to finish one, which one you meant. Nice! I had liked this quite a bit. And I also liked the intriguing ending. I'm caught like a fish now. Thanks!

 Comment Written 08-May-2021

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reply by the author on 09-May-2021

Oh dammit. That means I have to continue it now.

Thanks for your review. Hooking a reader is the best an author can hope for

reply by robyn corum on 09-May-2021

I do not believe you. I was hooked long ago you bum.

Comment from GE Parson

Excellent

Whew! hat is a long story but intresting. I found nothing correct in the way of spelling. As to suggesting a anything to improve your story, I don't know what it would be. You are a good story teller.

 Comment Written 07-May-2021

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reply by the author on 07-May-2021

Thank you. Glad you found it interesting

Comment from Erika Seshadri

Excellent

I enjoyed this piece of high-quality writing. You have great ability to create unique characters with independent depth and realistic dialogue.

"Ha, right. Dream on. No, I'm just a stroppy git who bets on the underdog. And takes money from any side who can afford a drink."

I look forward to reading more of your work. Feel free to come check out my portfolio. Have a great weekend!

 Comment Written 07-May-2021

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reply by the author on 07-May-2021

Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it