The Strand
Four line poem about the sea20 total reviews
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Such a lilting poem and a beautiful scene. One can imagine so much with this presentation. The sun, the sand, and the sea are prominent in the reader's mind on this gorgeous site.
Ralf
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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Such a lilting poem and a beautiful scene. One can imagine so much with this presentation. The sun, the sand, and the sea are prominent in the reader's mind on this gorgeous site.
Ralf
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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Hello Raff... thanks so much! I am delighted you liked it... I so wish I was on a beach. Hugs!
Melissa
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Me too!
Comment from poetwatch
I was just about to look up the word strand, Melissa. :) New word to use and hopefully not abuse. I wish I was on the beach, but it's too cold. :) Still, I would build a fire and cuddle up to my love. If she would go. This is a good offering for the 4 Line Rhyming Poem contest.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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I was just about to look up the word strand, Melissa. :) New word to use and hopefully not abuse. I wish I was on the beach, but it's too cold. :) Still, I would build a fire and cuddle up to my love. If she would go. This is a good offering for the 4 Line Rhyming Poem contest.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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Hello Jose... thanks so much! I am delighted you liked it... I so wish I was on a beach. Hugs!
Melissa
Comment from Ulla
Hi Melissa, I loved your four line poem written for the contest. It's lovely and I especially like the two last lines; what imagery! It funny, in English 'strand' is shoreline. In Danish 'strand' means beach. If you think about it that is what a beach is, a shore line. Good luck. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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Hi Melissa, I loved your four line poem written for the contest. It's lovely and I especially like the two last lines; what imagery! It funny, in English 'strand' is shoreline. In Danish 'strand' means beach. If you think about it that is what a beach is, a shore line. Good luck. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 10-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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Hello Ulla... thanks so much! I am delighted you liked it... I so wish I was on a beach. Hugs!
Melissa
Comment from patcelaw
A well worded four line poem for the contest, I wish you the best in the contest. May your week be blessed with goodness, peacefulness and joyfulness.
Patricia
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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A well worded four line poem for the contest, I wish you the best in the contest. May your week be blessed with goodness, peacefulness and joyfulness.
Patricia
Comment Written 10-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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Thank you Patricia. I accept your blessing for goodness and peace. May the Lord saturate you with his presence and love. Happy Sunday! :)
Melissa
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written four-line poem describing the pleasant time we have at the beach on the sand mixed with some water making the sand damp to enjoy and have a good time.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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A very well-written four-line poem describing the pleasant time we have at the beach on the sand mixed with some water making the sand damp to enjoy and have a good time.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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I appreciate your kind words, Sandra. Thank you.
Melissa
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is a nice poem, because you avoided the sing-songy quality that a poem of the type required by the contest could have. The words are well chosen and the picture is a fitting complement.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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This is a nice poem, because you avoided the sing-songy quality that a poem of the type required by the contest could have. The words are well chosen and the picture is a fitting complement.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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Hello Susan. I am so glad you enjoyed The Strand. I would love to be sitting at a warm beach somewhere right now. It is cold here in central Virginia. Thank you.
Melissa
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a beautifully written four line poem about the sea . My heels are dug into the sand ,between foam and dampened land. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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This is a beautifully written four line poem about the sea . My heels are dug into the sand ,between foam and dampened land. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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Hi Joanne. I really wish I were on a warm beach right now. Would love some R and R after the holidays. Thanks so much.
Melissa
Comment from June Sargent
It's been a while since I was able to feel the sand between my toes. There's something special about feeling that warm sun. Hearing the waves lap the shore. Smelling the salty air...I hate isolation!
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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It's been a while since I was able to feel the sand between my toes. There's something special about feeling that warm sun. Hearing the waves lap the shore. Smelling the salty air...I hate isolation!
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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Hi June. Thanks so much. I really would love to be on a warm beach and reclining on the edge of the waves... I also hate the isolation. At least we have FS where we can reach out to each other. Have a lovely Sunday.
Melissa
Comment from judiverse
This sounds so relaxing! I like your monorhyme. Your details of the foam and the breeze add atmosphere. Great imagery of the breezes teasing the strand. Neat use of internal rhyme, too. Best of luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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This sounds so relaxing! I like your monorhyme. Your details of the foam and the breeze add atmosphere. Great imagery of the breezes teasing the strand. Neat use of internal rhyme, too. Best of luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Thank you Judi. So appreciated, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from kmoss
What a refreshing piece as I'm sitting here freezing and dreaming of a beach day. I have a few suggestions: I would change "the strand" to "a strand." There is A LOT of space between the picture and the words. I would shorten the space. Good luck in the contest! I think this is my favorite so far.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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What a refreshing piece as I'm sitting here freezing and dreaming of a beach day. I have a few suggestions: I would change "the strand" to "a strand." There is A LOT of space between the picture and the words. I would shorten the space. Good luck in the contest! I think this is my favorite so far.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Thank you so very much, kmoss. I appreciate the suggestions and will retake a look at it. :)
Melissa