Haiku Club Challenges, Book II
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "summer love on beach (haiku)"an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets
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Comment from Mark Schardine
The guess the famous scene in "From Here to Eternity" caused more problems than the studio cared to admit. Nonetheless, it remains one of the best films ever.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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The guess the famous scene in "From Here to Eternity" caused more problems than the studio cared to admit. Nonetheless, it remains one of the best films ever.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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Yes, Mark, that scene also caused problems for lovers who tried to emulate one of the best movies ever. Thank you for your review.
Comment from dragonpoet
A new and realistic take on this famous movie scene. The effects of this liaison when they get up to go, sand in the bathing suits.
Keep writing
Joan
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A new and realistic take on this famous movie scene. The effects of this liaison when they get up to go, sand in the bathing suits.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 09-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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Yes, Joan, we don't think of the sand in our bathing suits until we begin to scratch. Ouch! Thank you for your review.
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You're welcome.
Joan
Comment from robina1978
Great black and white photo of love on the beach. I enjoyed how you described this in so few words. Nice reference to the lovely Frank Sinatra song.
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Great black and white photo of love on the beach. I enjoyed how you described this in so few words. Nice reference to the lovely Frank Sinatra song.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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Oh, thank you, Robina, for your review. I kept saying to myself that I wanted to write a summer love haiku that got under the reader's skin, and then I thought of Sinatra's song, and, BINGO, itch itch itch scratch ouch.
Thanks again.
Comment from smileycloud
quite humorous
I like the Haiku especially as the last line does a final summing up almost like the Senryu
the strength in the nature rather than the emotion/feeling
but just as powerful
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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quite humorous
I like the Haiku especially as the last line does a final summing up almost like the Senryu
the strength in the nature rather than the emotion/feeling
but just as powerful
have a smiley day
Comment Written 09-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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Oh, thank you, smileycloud, for your review which made me smile. Yes, my poem is almost like the Senryu as the Haiku Club presents challenges on human things for this book rather than nature. Thanks again.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hahahaha...and just where might that sand be winding up, Andre?
Your kigo is quite obvious for this haiku, given the topic.
The syllable count comes in right at 17, well within the limits imposed by the haiku for.
The soundtrack was fitting, funny, and apropos for this particular haiku.
I enjoyed reading it immensely.
~Dean :)
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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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Hahahaha...and just where might that sand be winding up, Andre?
Your kigo is quite obvious for this haiku, given the topic.
The syllable count comes in right at 17, well within the limits imposed by the haiku for.
The soundtrack was fitting, funny, and apropos for this particular haiku.
I enjoyed reading it immensely.
~Dean :)
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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Oh, thank you, Dean, for your generous review and for teaching me six months ago how to insert music! I am glad my gritty poem made you laugh.
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My pleasure as always, Andre. :)
