My grandchild's like...
A butterfly.87 total reviews
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello royowen, The innocence of child is a breath-taking as their smile. I enjoyed reading your poem. I especially liked:
A handsome lad whose smile brings light,
graceful movements provoking sight-
(The joy within shines bright.)
As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Hello royowen, The innocence of child is a breath-taking as their smile. I enjoyed reading your poem. I especially liked:
A handsome lad whose smile brings light,
graceful movements provoking sight-
(The joy within shines bright.)
As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Thanks for this delightful review and comments, you make me feel proud, and the possible extra rhyme, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Jay Squires
And a handsome lad your grandson is, Roy (you can almost see the gears working in his brain as he looks at his mama. He's about to say something delightful.
I hope you have these lovely tributes printed out for your loved ones to read later.
In about five years he'd love to hear the beautiful images you have of him.
God bless you, Roy!
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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And a handsome lad your grandson is, Roy (you can almost see the gears working in his brain as he looks at his mama. He's about to say something delightful.
I hope you have these lovely tributes printed out for your loved ones to read later.
In about five years he'd love to hear the beautiful images you have of him.
God bless you, Roy!
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Thanks for this delightful review and comments Jay, you make me feel proud, blessings, Roy.
Comment from krys123
Roy;
+ Near a notable alliteration's: /"flitting vapor floating"/"zip and zap"/"never nap"/
+ Rhyming was done well in each level rhyming word was contingent to the meaning and concept of each line this is very important for makes the rhyming neither forced nor labored.
+ Rhythmic meter (mostly tetrameter separate the couplets are pentameter But with one line in second verse fourth line has nine syllables), cadence, timing and tempo all were very helpful in making the reading flow clear, fluid and very easy.
+ Picture is darting and very relative, and reflective, very appropriate and complementary to the poem as it shows the love that is a flitting example of a families togetherness.
+ Good luck in the contest and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Roy;
+ Near a notable alliteration's: /"flitting vapor floating"/"zip and zap"/"never nap"/
+ Rhyming was done well in each level rhyming word was contingent to the meaning and concept of each line this is very important for makes the rhyming neither forced nor labored.
+ Rhythmic meter (mostly tetrameter separate the couplets are pentameter But with one line in second verse fourth line has nine syllables), cadence, timing and tempo all were very helpful in making the reading flow clear, fluid and very easy.
+ Picture is darting and very relative, and reflective, very appropriate and complementary to the poem as it shows the love that is a flitting example of a families togetherness.
+ Good luck in the contest and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Thanks for this delightful, thoughtful review and comments, Alex, you make me feel proud, blessings, Roy.
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You are so welcome Roy.
Alex
Comment from JJ Rowe
This is one of my favorite so far! This poem has a great story and flow, but I also love the honest perspective of a grandfather. Beautiful! Six stars
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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This is one of my favorite so far! This poem has a great story and flow, but I also love the honest perspective of a grandfather. Beautiful! Six stars
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Thanks JJ for this most outstanding review, delightful comments, and lovely stars, blessings, Roy.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
What a darling poem about you grandson. Grandpa's love shines through in each well crafted line.
"His spirit pure as an Angel's sigh." Now that is poetry!
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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What a darling poem about you grandson. Grandpa's love shines through in each well crafted line.
"His spirit pure as an Angel's sigh." Now that is poetry!
Comment Written 20-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Thanks for this delightful review and comments, you make me feel proud, blessings, Roy.
Comment from RodG
This poem was definitely written by a grandpa who loves his grandson.
There are some lovely comparisons made, but my favorite is "dancing jewels in raindrops' flight."
The Speaker obviously is very much aware of the child's many moods.
Nicely drawn, Roy!
Best wishes in the contest.
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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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This poem was definitely written by a grandpa who loves his grandson.
There are some lovely comparisons made, but my favorite is "dancing jewels in raindrops' flight."
The Speaker obviously is very much aware of the child's many moods.
Nicely drawn, Roy!
Best wishes in the contest.
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Comment Written 20-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Thanks for this delightful review and comments Rod, you make me feel proud, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Gloria ....
Very good, Roy. He's going to get a charge out of this poem.
I like the image of the dragonflies zipping and zapping and snapping up mosquitoes. They should be given a medal for that.
Meerkats are so adorable aren't they?
The mixed meter and rhyme scheme works well in illustrating the originality and absolute delight of your grandson.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Very good, Roy. He's going to get a charge out of this poem.
I like the image of the dragonflies zipping and zapping and snapping up mosquitoes. They should be given a medal for that.
Meerkats are so adorable aren't they?
The mixed meter and rhyme scheme works well in illustrating the originality and absolute delight of your grandson.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
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Comment Written 20-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Thanks for this delightful review and comments Gloria, you make me feel proud, blessings, Roy.