All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "She Turns the Page"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Glasstruth
A very powerful sonnet. Time is beautifully expressed as "Each timeless minute with an hour's endowed
through days and weeks and years our lives are spun." As minutes are completed with each sixty seconds is how we know it, but to time there's no such thing. The last line is an awesome ending:
"As Time - she laughs, and simply turns the page." Superb! Les
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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A very powerful sonnet. Time is beautifully expressed as "Each timeless minute with an hour's endowed
through days and weeks and years our lives are spun." As minutes are completed with each sixty seconds is how we know it, but to time there's no such thing. The last line is an awesome ending:
"As Time - she laughs, and simply turns the page." Superb! Les
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Bless you, Les - love high praise coming from someone like you! :)S
Comment from mauial
Great poem about life and and ending that I think is very profoundly stated. It seems to me as the older you get those pages seem to flip very quickly and before you know it we will be no more :(
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Great poem about life and and ending that I think is very profoundly stated. It seems to me as the older you get those pages seem to flip very quickly and before you know it we will be no more :(
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Thx Al - yes - they ARE flipping by rather quickly at the moment I noticed, dammit! :)S
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, visionary, you did an excellent job writing this beautiful sonnet about the pages that are turned too quickly, love the picture. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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this is very well written, visionary, you did an excellent job writing this beautiful sonnet about the pages that are turned too quickly, love the picture. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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bless you sweets! Thank you so much! :)S
Comment from beccabootie123
well written positive message the picture is outstanding and the color palate utilized adds tons! to this piece. it gives the verse a feel if you will. formatted well as this authors pieces usually are.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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well written positive message the picture is outstanding and the color palate utilized adds tons! to this piece. it gives the verse a feel if you will. formatted well as this authors pieces usually are.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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thx so much becca! :)S
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is very brilliant, my friend. I admire your talent greatly. The words are very well chosen and the meaning of the poem is well conveyed. The image of time as a she turning the page regardless of our protest is very captivating. kudos
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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This is very brilliant, my friend. I admire your talent greatly. The words are very well chosen and the meaning of the poem is well conveyed. The image of time as a she turning the page regardless of our protest is very captivating. kudos
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Bless you for your magic six on this one Perp - so much appreciated! :)Sharyn
Comment from teafor2
visionary1234--It's been said that the very second we are
born we start dying. Your challenging sonnet seem to echo
that thought, but more poetic. Your imagery takes reader(s)
through the sequence from the beginning to end, with the
bittersweets in between the two opposing forces. "But..."
of line nine initiates the pivot/turn/revelation that time
stand still for noone, not even the most important people
in our lives. Moreover, your last couplet is the perfect
coda for this discerning write. Good luck in the contest.
teafor2
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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visionary1234--It's been said that the very second we are
born we start dying. Your challenging sonnet seem to echo
that thought, but more poetic. Your imagery takes reader(s)
through the sequence from the beginning to end, with the
bittersweets in between the two opposing forces. "But..."
of line nine initiates the pivot/turn/revelation that time
stand still for noone, not even the most important people
in our lives. Moreover, your last couplet is the perfect
coda for this discerning write. Good luck in the contest.
teafor2
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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What a wonderful, in depth review my dear - thank you so much! :)Sharyn
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
C'est la vie is right Sharyn .... where does the time go?
I love your last line ... "As time, she simply laughs and turns the page". Time marches on and we get old before we know it.
Strong abab rhyming with lovely flow to the poem. Strong verbs (woo, birth, pull). Strong adjectives (windy, whirling, rose-filled).
The gorgeous artwork is the perfect complement to your poem.
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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C'est la vie is right Sharyn .... where does the time go?
I love your last line ... "As time, she simply laughs and turns the page". Time marches on and we get old before we know it.
Strong abab rhyming with lovely flow to the poem. Strong verbs (woo, birth, pull). Strong adjectives (windy, whirling, rose-filled).
The gorgeous artwork is the perfect complement to your poem.
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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bless you Connie - so glad you enjoyed this one! :)S
Comment from GWinterwin
Beautiful poem about how time just keep turning the pages. Your words flow well and tell an all to true fact of life. Great writing with much meaning.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Beautiful poem about how time just keep turning the pages. Your words flow well and tell an all to true fact of life. Great writing with much meaning.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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thx so much GW! :)S
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is lovely, Sharyn, and also too true! I don't know how I suddenly arrived at this silly age! Time goes by far too fast when we are older, yet drags when we are children. This is such a well written, and very beautiful sonnet contest entry, I just loved it! Good luck in the contest! xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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That is lovely, Sharyn, and also too true! I don't know how I suddenly arrived at this silly age! Time goes by far too fast when we are older, yet drags when we are children. This is such a well written, and very beautiful sonnet contest entry, I just loved it! Good luck in the contest! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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oh good! I'm so glad you enjoyed this one Sandra! :)S
Comment from wordsareus
This is a wonderful entry for the Sonnet poetry contest. Your talent as a writer shines through. I wish you the best of luck and congratulations on winning the Lento writing prompt.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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This is a wonderful entry for the Sonnet poetry contest. Your talent as a writer shines through. I wish you the best of luck and congratulations on winning the Lento writing prompt.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Bless you and thank you heaps my dear!!! :)S