Comment from cheyennewy

Excellent

Hi Barbara,

This chapter is not boring at all and I enjoyed it. Anna is so lucky to have found such a wonderful family that is willing to help her. I hope Bobby never finds out where she is living but I fear that he might and if so no telling what he might do. Well done....blessings, chey

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2011

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011

Bobby will return. I appreciate you kind review and words.

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

I didn't find it at all boring... it painted a picture true to life of an abused woman (I know from experience) and the fear she feels for both herself and her child. It flowed so naturally.

husband helps play for that."
..............pay for that

Yes, my dear(,) you can."

First(,) call me, Betty

or in his case(,) a large sink

gated community(,) so there's some security(,) plus he won't know where she is.

legally,(but) physically."

Margaret

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2011

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011

I hate comma, but I remember the rule when in doubt leave them out, so I left them out. I have placed them all in. Thank you for your kind review. I bet I have reviewer who tell me to take some of them out. It always happens.

Comment from Chris Tee

Excellent

Barbara this is an excellent chapter and you are writing the intrigue brilliantly here my girl.
This kept me captivated throughout the read and I enjoyed every moment of this piece.
Well done with this rather splendid and enticing chapter we have here old sport.

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2011

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011

Thank you for the kind review and your continued support.

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, barbara, i enjoyed reading this chapter about figuring out a budget and deciding to get her apartment, this is the second time i'm trying to submit this review, shouldn't it be not only legally but physically? it sounds better to me with the but in there.

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2011

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011

I orginally had the but, there, but wanted a dramitic effect. I will put the but back. Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

You explain well
all the things a woman must consider when setting out on her own, and it must seem daunting to a wife whose husband has always taken care of the finances. When I was growing up I remember the situation a couple of my neighbors were in when they became widowed. They knew nothing about the household finances and one didn't even know how to drive!
He glanced at Anna, who had turned white - add comma Brooke

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2011

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011

I will add the comma. I received and three on my last post because it was boring. Thank you for the kind review.

reply by adewpearl on 21-Jul-2011

I don't think people realize that novels have bridge chapters - not every single chapter can be a dramatic confrontation - that's not how life flows.

reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011

I can't imagine a young mother going out on her own without this being part of it.

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

This is what you call a set up chapter. No book can survive on action alone. You have done a very good job of making your fiction realistice.

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 Comment Written 21-Jul-2011

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011

Thank you for your kind review and support.

reply by c_lucas on 21-Jul-2011

You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie

Comment from peggles

Excellent

This is as compelling as the previous chapters of your story
Extremely well written and expressively told
I am engrossed with this and am looking forward to the next chapter

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 Comment Written 21-Jul-2011

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011

Thank you for your kind review.