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CSP: A Collection of Poems

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A collection of poetry

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Comment from debskatz
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Hey Sixteezkid,

You are really putting out some nice poetry! I really like this. It's very readable & I like the lesson you're giving with it.

Nice job!

smiles,

deb

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2008

reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
    Hello Deb, Thanks for your most gracious review and comments! So glad you liked it. After having done a 20 syllable tetractys yesterday, I was COMPELLED to do the 40 syllable one - Just loved the look of it! Ha! And thank you for your very encouraging words! Kind regards, Sue
Comment from rmdelta
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Sue,

Ok, These are poems I never understand. I never try to say if anything is wrong with them because I don't know if there is or not. I easily understand the message you wrote in this one and it is a powerful message. I didn't bother with syllable counts, and all I can do is take your money and say I enjoyed it.

Reggie

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2008

reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
    Hey Reggie, don't you be messin' with me, you here? I want to see you counting on those fingers...PRONTO! It's just like doing a good gym workout. If you can do squats or bench press, you can lift your fingers and count. AHHHH!!! The pain after a good workout! "Nuf said".
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
    Okay, just having some fun! I hear you on all that. I just wrote my first Haiku, my first 20 syllable tetractys yesterday and my first 40 today. Nobody could have EVER told me I'd do something like that.

    But, the rules are so simple, and it is a great feeling to emote so much in so few words. Now, I'm sold! I am glad, though, that you got the message and enjoyed it. Even without counting those blasted syllables.

    With warmest regards,
    Sue
Comment from smokyeye
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Excellent! This is clear and precise and the main idea stays present even though the shape changes. Excellent play on words

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2008

reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
    Smokeye, thank you so much for your very generous review. And your most kind comments! Much appreciated and with regards, Sue
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
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This is very well written you have expressed so strong feeling through your very good word choices and completed this form well regards Fuller

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2008

reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
    Fuller, thank you very much for reading my work and for your most kind comments! With regards, Sue
Comment from nicci_sawhney
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I'd like to give this style a try, I like it and it'd be a good challenge!

You get your point across really well, the theme is very apt for me at the moment.

Very good

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2008

reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
    Nicci, so glad you like my poem! Definitely go for it! It is such an expansion of one's work. I did a 20 syllable yesterday and thought, "Why not go for it". Because I truly love the confinements of this type and haiku to really make you consider every single word. Thanks for your most generous review and comments. Regards, Sue
Comment from dportwood
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Sixteezkid,

Nice job on this double tetractys poem. You have written a story with meaning in these 40 syllables. Very nicely done.

Duane

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2008

reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
    Duane, thank you so much for your very generous review. I tried the 20 syllable and loved the challenge so much, I just had to make this attempt! I really appreciate your very encouraging and kind words. Warmest regards, Sue
Comment from Domino
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Hi, Sue. This is extremely impressive and I sure can't offer any suggs for improvement. Perfect 'mirror' of connected thoughts. Brilliant metaphors to describe the hurt caused by words. Always best not to linger on them I find. Either respond straight away or treat with contempt. Easier said than done of course. I've sure put my foot in it a few times sinse being here the last year, but always apologise and hope it's not too late. Ray xx

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 Comment Written 25-Nov-2008

reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
    From one fellow addict to another, I'll get back atcha on my response. (HA!!!!)
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
    JUST JOKING!!! Ha! Ray, thanks so much for this awesome review! I really enjoyed working on this today. (It's never too late). But, it would be if you post your latest and greatest challenge! LOL!! Seriously....thanks for reading and am glad you liked it! With my warmest regards, Sue
reply by Domino on 25-Nov-2008
    You did a great job, Sue. xx