Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "Part two, Chapter 7"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from axelbeariter
it's something abused women need to think about as they attempt life on their own./As they attempt to live on their own, reads better.----Anna stared wide eyed at him./s/b wide-eyed----Anna watched Paul cross off gas./nice. That breaks up a monotonous list.----My SS check has been at $955 for two years, but at least I don't need diapers yet.----For a boring chapter you held my inertest throughout. Boring is reading an FS member who thinks he or she can write, and I have to inform them they're more suited for working on I-95. Great setup job--interesting too.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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it's something abused women need to think about as they attempt life on their own./As they attempt to live on their own, reads better.----Anna stared wide eyed at him./s/b wide-eyed----Anna watched Paul cross off gas./nice. That breaks up a monotonous list.----My SS check has been at $955 for two years, but at least I don't need diapers yet.----For a boring chapter you held my inertest throughout. Boring is reading an FS member who thinks he or she can write, and I have to inform them they're more suited for working on I-95. Great setup job--interesting too.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from TammyGail
Another very compelling chapter indeed - well written I did enjoy reading this - the number and information you put in your notes is always nice ... Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Another very compelling chapter indeed - well written I did enjoy reading this - the number and information you put in your notes is always nice ... Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 21-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from WilliamDeen
GREAT chapter! This does move your book along nicely. It was good dialogue; very believable. I like the characters and their interactions.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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GREAT chapter! This does move your book along nicely. It was good dialogue; very believable. I like the characters and their interactions.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Nanashirley
This is another good chapter. I didn't think it was boring. I liked the way you worked all of the extra examples in as part of the story. Good job.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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This is another good chapter. I didn't think it was boring. I liked the way you worked all of the extra examples in as part of the story. Good job.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from JW
In every book I have ever read, not every page or chapter was a page burner. That's reality. What does matter is, was it well writen? And this one is. Thanks for sharing it.JW
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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In every book I have ever read, not every page or chapter was a page burner. That's reality. What does matter is, was it well writen? And this one is. Thanks for sharing it.JW
Comment Written 21-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I received a three on my previous posts because it was boring, hense the warning.
Comment from lola29
I didn't find this chapter to be boring at all, but rather inspiring. It's wonderful that Betty and Paul are helping Anna and her son. Not too many would extend a helping hand in an abusive situation.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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I didn't find this chapter to be boring at all, but rather inspiring. It's wonderful that Betty and Paul are helping Anna and her son. Not too many would extend a helping hand in an abusive situation.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind reivew. I appreciate your support. I received a three on my previous post stating it was boring.
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I don't understand why reviewers have to be so callous.
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
shame on the misinformed reviewer who reviewed you writing was boring. Let my alter ego Missy the Mouth annihilate them on her Blog Show Garden Chat. I digress, I was riveted by this chapter. Your descriptive writing is excellent in this chapter. Anna was shocked when returning from her trip to find Paul playing with her son, Michael. I guess she was used to her soon to be creepy exes violent behavior. It's a shame Paul had to explain to Anna how to do her finances, but she'd been financially abused on top of physical abuse from the hand of a jerk who claimed to 'love' her. Yeah right. I agree the price of childcare is highway robbery, especially for a single woman. I love Betty and Paul for wanting to help Anna through her crisis. I feel if more of us helped women like Anna maybe they'd leave her abusive spouses or significant others. If they'd let this pistol packing broad protect them. LOL. Troy brought up a good question: "Won't his lawyer require Anna to disclose where his son is living?" Troy's comment caused Anna to go 'white with fear.' Marvelous place to leave the reader dangling. I look forward to reading more, my friend. This is a realistic story. Have a splendid evening.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Barbara,
shame on the misinformed reviewer who reviewed you writing was boring. Let my alter ego Missy the Mouth annihilate them on her Blog Show Garden Chat. I digress, I was riveted by this chapter. Your descriptive writing is excellent in this chapter. Anna was shocked when returning from her trip to find Paul playing with her son, Michael. I guess she was used to her soon to be creepy exes violent behavior. It's a shame Paul had to explain to Anna how to do her finances, but she'd been financially abused on top of physical abuse from the hand of a jerk who claimed to 'love' her. Yeah right. I agree the price of childcare is highway robbery, especially for a single woman. I love Betty and Paul for wanting to help Anna through her crisis. I feel if more of us helped women like Anna maybe they'd leave her abusive spouses or significant others. If they'd let this pistol packing broad protect them. LOL. Troy brought up a good question: "Won't his lawyer require Anna to disclose where his son is living?" Troy's comment caused Anna to go 'white with fear.' Marvelous place to leave the reader dangling. I look forward to reading more, my friend. This is a realistic story. Have a splendid evening.
Melissa.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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I received a three on my previous post stating it was boring. I decided I would warn people up front. I appreciate your support.
Comment from stanishmichelle
Now this is a very interesting chapter to read. Not boring at all. I can see why Anna is concerned about the rent expenses, etc, but Troy's family is supportive, and helped her to see her way through. The break down of expenses is creative in the setting, voices concerns we go through ourselves, so I know it's more difficult for single moms to make ends meet. Let's hope Anna's husband gets the message, and think twice about going near her.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Now this is a very interesting chapter to read. Not boring at all. I can see why Anna is concerned about the rent expenses, etc, but Troy's family is supportive, and helped her to see her way through. The break down of expenses is creative in the setting, voices concerns we go through ourselves, so I know it's more difficult for single moms to make ends meet. Let's hope Anna's husband gets the message, and think twice about going near her.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Thank you. I have a reviewer who thinks my posts are boring becaue there's no action. Once he suggested I make Anna demonic. I was shocked. Anyway, maybe if I admit it up front it's boring, he won't read and give me a three.
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I am shocked too, just thinking of a demonic Anna. The story has plenty of action, seen through the very descriptive words, showing the violence Anna suffered at the hands of Bobby. The more I read, the more enlightened I become about domestic violence.
Comment from Janie King
I didn't find this boring at all. It's a practical chapter but those are necessary to someone that may be abused and nedds practical guidance. It's well-written, reads smoothly and has a good warm family atmosphere, which this character needs very much. Good job. God bless.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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I didn't find this boring at all. It's a practical chapter but those are necessary to someone that may be abused and nedds practical guidance. It's well-written, reads smoothly and has a good warm family atmosphere, which this character needs very much. Good job. God bless.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I received a three on my last posgt because it was boring, hence the notice.
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some people just don't have class and have no knowledge that this book isn't just for entertainment, it's also to be a tool to help those of us who know little about this kind of thing become knowledge so we might help someone else and then it can be a means of instruction and hope for those that are trapped in this situation..very narrow minded people..sorry they did that. I see you're following Tom's pieces..I'm very glad. I loved his skit between the two flags, When I read it I could see your little first graders putting it on it some school play..Our kids her hardly know what the pledge is. This is great, you just have to consider the source when the reviews are off key. I do so respect you. God bless.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
I was not sure how you could say this chapter was boring.
I loved it. Oh sure its filler of the characters and the plot but overall it still flowed well.
The deeper I go into the story the more I like it.
Well done again.
Maureen
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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I was not sure how you could say this chapter was boring.
I loved it. Oh sure its filler of the characters and the plot but overall it still flowed well.
The deeper I go into the story the more I like it.
Well done again.
Maureen
Comment Written 21-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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I received a three on my last chapter because it was boring. Hence, I thought I would warn people before they read it. This reviewer wants only action. He's gotten me more than once. I appreciate your kind review.
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Why is he reading it then? Idiot, I have had a guy rank one of my poem a 1 star.....it made all time best...and kept getting 5 and 6 stars...then his 1...
Some reviewers are as sour as lemons, me personally just like to make lemonade.
Pay no mind...this is a wonderful write, and great flow. I want the novel in my hand though, cause I know I wouldn't be able to put it down. Keep chugging along....
Hugs
Maureen