CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from debskatz
Hey,
This is very good! Not bad at all for your first try at this type of poetry.
From what I know of autism, you captured it very well. And the painting that you did is perfect for it.
Thank you for sharing all of this with us.
smiles,
deb
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Hey,
This is very good! Not bad at all for your first try at this type of poetry.
From what I know of autism, you captured it very well. And the painting that you did is perfect for it.
Thank you for sharing all of this with us.
smiles,
deb
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from Oatmeal
Sixteezkid,
I am so sorry for the hardships that you are having to endure. Try to stay patient.
I was born with 2 or more mental illnesses so I know about being in a different world. It was a long road home. I had to learn how to bathe myself again and feed myself again. Trillions of side effects and psyche wards. Tears the flow forever.
There is a promise my friend. The promise is that there is a rainbow after every storm. There will be one for you too.
The theme was well defined. The style was very good. The descriptive words were well chosen.
Call me if you need to talk. I will send you my number and the refs that will let you know that I am safe.
There was no SPAG.
Love you,
Oatmeal
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Sixteezkid,
I am so sorry for the hardships that you are having to endure. Try to stay patient.
I was born with 2 or more mental illnesses so I know about being in a different world. It was a long road home. I had to learn how to bathe myself again and feed myself again. Trillions of side effects and psyche wards. Tears the flow forever.
There is a promise my friend. The promise is that there is a rainbow after every storm. There will be one for you too.
The theme was well defined. The style was very good. The descriptive words were well chosen.
Call me if you need to talk. I will send you my number and the refs that will let you know that I am safe.
There was no SPAG.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from Freeflyer
Words
Talent
Poetry
Unusual
I must say I am intrigued with this poem.
Can't say I have ever heard of TETRACTYS. I am definitely going to have a serious go at one. Thanks for the idea. I also feel sorry for the person whom this write is dedicated too. Life can be cruel.
Freeflyer
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
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Words
Talent
Poetry
Unusual
I must say I am intrigued with this poem.
Can't say I have ever heard of TETRACTYS. I am definitely going to have a serious go at one. Thanks for the idea. I also feel sorry for the person whom this write is dedicated too. Life can be cruel.
Freeflyer
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
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Freeflyer, GO FOR IT! I did this 20 syllable tetractys and loved doing it so much, I did a 40 syllable one today. I just love the very strict confinements you have to stay within. Really makes you think about every single word and syllable. If you'd like (not soliciting here), but since you want to have a try, read my new 20 syllable one I just posted. It's called "In Shatters". Wow, challenging and such a delight! Thank you for your most generous review and comments. Warmest regards, Sue
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correction: my new 40 syllable poem
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I worked at a daycare and when they first opened we have a little boy with this and no one can even imagine how hard it is to care for a child with this. No one day is ever the same.
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I worked at a daycare and when they first opened we have a little boy with this and no one can even imagine how hard it is to care for a child with this. No one day is ever the same.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from fayesh
I thought the artwork was wonderful and the poem fit it well. The title was a good choice also. Thank you for the dedication. I am honored, but it really should be "For your wonderful daughter."
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
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I thought the artwork was wonderful and the poem fit it well. The title was a good choice also. Thank you for the dedication. I am honored, but it really should be "For your wonderful daughter."
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
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I already dedicated my painting to her. I want to thank you SO MUCH for introducing me to this wonderful art form. I just did a 40 syllable one today because I was so driven to push that envelope. So glad you liked it and thank you for your most generous review! Warmest regards, Sue
Comment from CHIDOZIE
The best way to appreciate this work, I'm sure, Is to look at it as a whole. It is through that way that one can then begin to see the beauty of the unity of thought suggested by the poet in the commentary. It is a complex art form. Thanks.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
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The best way to appreciate this work, I'm sure, Is to look at it as a whole. It is through that way that one can then begin to see the beauty of the unity of thought suggested by the poet in the commentary. It is a complex art form. Thanks.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
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Indeed, it is complex. And I really have enjoyed working within this "zero leeway" format! HA! Keeps you very focused on your feelings, and the words just come out. Thank you so very much for your most generous review and comments. With regards, Sue
Comment from Hurricane Dean
Yeah, I am not sure we can ever comprehend such a complex world of a person with autism. But heck, I have a hard time comprehending what going on in my own world. Let alone the people closest to me. LOL! Interest poem. Sincerely, Dean
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Yeah, I am not sure we can ever comprehend such a complex world of a person with autism. But heck, I have a hard time comprehending what going on in my own world. Let alone the people closest to me. LOL! Interest poem. Sincerely, Dean
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from cheyennewy
I do like the tetractys poems but have never written one. I am impressed that you paint as well as write poetry. The poem is heart rendering and the painting is wonderful and goes well with your chosen words. Autism is a very complex disorder but in just a few words you wrote volumes about it. I wish both you and daughter well...well done....blessings....chey
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I do like the tetractys poems but have never written one. I am impressed that you paint as well as write poetry. The poem is heart rendering and the painting is wonderful and goes well with your chosen words. Autism is a very complex disorder but in just a few words you wrote volumes about it. I wish both you and daughter well...well done....blessings....chey
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from mmichelle97219
I think the last line could be stronger and more personal if it is stated from the point of view of the child. that is my only nit. as is the last line falls a bit flat.
Michelle
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I think the last line could be stronger and more personal if it is stated from the point of view of the child. that is my only nit. as is the last line falls a bit flat.
Michelle
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from Gert sherwood
Good evening Sixteezkid ,
I like your thoughts expressed in tetractys form
Every word tells us of what you daughter feels and sees and with you last line how we feel of her different world.
God bless you.
Gert
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Good evening Sixteezkid ,
I like your thoughts expressed in tetractys form
Every word tells us of what you daughter feels and sees and with you last line how we feel of her different world.
God bless you.
Gert
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008