The Sonnet Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Ashes of Lost Hope"a poetic collage of my sonnets
109 total reviews
Comment from Perp Ihebom
A very passionate poem that reveals the agonies of a heart that is wounded by unrequited love. I like the imageries employed in bringing this sad tale to light. The rhymes are very well done. I really like the poem. Bravo.
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A very passionate poem that reveals the agonies of a heart that is wounded by unrequited love. I like the imageries employed in bringing this sad tale to light. The rhymes are very well done. I really like the poem. Bravo.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
Comment from Fleedleflump
This is an expertly written piece, and I particularly enjoyed reading the medieval-toned third stanza. Eyes blinded by your sun indeed! Good luck in the contest.
Fleedleflump
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This is an expertly written piece, and I particularly enjoyed reading the medieval-toned third stanza. Eyes blinded by your sun indeed! Good luck in the contest.
Fleedleflump
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
Comment from PatriciaLiteHickman
excellent presentation; well written Spenserian Sonnet; no corrections; strong contest entry; best wishes in the voting booth!
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excellent presentation; well written Spenserian Sonnet; no corrections; strong contest entry; best wishes in the voting booth!
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
Comment from Aussie
Thank you for sharing Ashes of Lost Hope; the illustration really complimented your very eloquent poem of unrequited love. I really enjoyed your poem because I love formal writing; well done.
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Thank you for sharing Ashes of Lost Hope; the illustration really complimented your very eloquent poem of unrequited love. I really enjoyed your poem because I love formal writing; well done.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
Comment from becky7777
lovely poem of the wanting and not understanding why it wont be returned. I have never tried this form but your words flow so smoothly making it seem easy. best wishes in the contest.
Becky
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lovely poem of the wanting and not understanding why it wont be returned. I have never tried this form but your words flow so smoothly making it seem easy. best wishes in the contest.
Becky
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
Comment from johnleethehooker
Awesome. Loved the reference to blind love, (Eyes blinded by your sun). It seams to hint at an acceptance of the victims own naivete and vulnerability. An excellent description of the mortal wound that is unrequited love.
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Awesome. Loved the reference to blind love, (Eyes blinded by your sun). It seams to hint at an acceptance of the victims own naivete and vulnerability. An excellent description of the mortal wound that is unrequited love.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
Comment from SunlitWhisper
Nice very nice sonnet. Since I know very little about the iambic pentameter I can't say very much so I'll leave it to those who do. Good luck in the contest.
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Nice very nice sonnet. Since I know very little about the iambic pentameter I can't say very much so I'll leave it to those who do. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
Comment from D. Longo
Typically ambivalent regarding sonnets, the artistry in this work sways me to re-evaluate. Beautiful, Yeltel, and not verse alone: artwork, font, and backdrop create a timeless presentation.
Excellent!
D.
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Typically ambivalent regarding sonnets, the artistry in this work sways me to re-evaluate. Beautiful, Yeltel, and not verse alone: artwork, font, and backdrop create a timeless presentation.
Excellent!
D.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
Comment from cmay44
Dear One
What a super poem in every way! Excellent rhyme and meter and your artwork and color scheme really set it off. Great job on this very pleasant read.
Well done
God bless
love from
Carolyn
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Dear One
What a super poem in every way! Excellent rhyme and meter and your artwork and color scheme really set it off. Great job on this very pleasant read.
Well done
God bless
love from
Carolyn
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
Comment from tator tot
I enjoyed your poem. Learning about the format, in the author notes, was nice. You've use vivid words that help the reader feel the pain of unrequited love. Thank you.
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I enjoyed your poem. Learning about the format, in the author notes, was nice. You've use vivid words that help the reader feel the pain of unrequited love. Thank you.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
