Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Exceptional

Wow!!!! Bravo!!!! The presentation is breathtaking and scary. The haiku composition is very well done. Good job sweetie pie, you make me proud.

Very creepy.... I love it. Heh heh heh....

Gypsy

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2017

---

reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017

Thanks so much for reading, MariVal, darlin'.
I appreciate you weighing in on this with your thoughts and insights, and the six stars as well.
Take care, sweetie!

reply by Gypsy Blue Rose on 30-Jun-2017

Xoxoxoxo
Gypsy

Comment from krys123

Exceptional

Cheers, Dean;
-the profundity of this poem or haiku beers the truth of child abuse, though one may think it physical when most of it can be mental. Words can hurt a child more than a whip and can last forever with the scars from a whip can heal, physically but the mental endurance can last forever.
-A wonderful haiku and a great picture to boot helped coordinate the structure and theme of this poem.
-Thanks for sharing, Dean, and take care and have a good one.
Alex

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2017

---

reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017

Thanks so much for reading my haiku, Alex.
I appreciate you weighing in on this with your thoughts and insights, and the six stars as well.

reply by krys123 on 03-Jul-2017

You are very welcome, Dean, and take care and have a good one as I really enjoyed this one. Very inventive.
Alex

Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

I always cringe when I overhear parents scold their children in public. Not to educate, but to humiliate. This is what we mean by 'root cause'. Humiliate a child, grow a humiliated/humiliating adult.

Strong ending alliteration. Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2017

---

reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017

Thanks for reading and reviewing, Lee.
I wholeheartedly agree that the apple doesn't fall far from the tree, to use a tried but true cliché.
Much appreciated, sir.
~Dean

Comment from Rasmine

Exceptional

True, I think of the damage my aunt did to me. I see it in others, too.

I hope you are doing well.

I really like your haiku, oh no, I may change that to a six. Yes, okay, take a six! :P

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2017

---

reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017

Hey, Rasmine, I'm doing okay, thanks for asking.
Thanks so much for reading my haiku, and I apologize for the delayed reply.
I appreciate you weighing in on this with your thoughts and insights, and the six stars as well.

reply by Rasmine on 01-Jul-2017

Happy Fourth of July, Dean!

reply by the author on 02-Jul-2017

Same to you, Rasmine. :)

Comment from smbau

Excellent

Revised review:
The change made all the difference. The poet describes the power of the tongue, uses powerful horrific imagery to drive the point home. The background and font is readable and add value to the content and meaning of the poem.
________________________
The picture graphically demonstrates with great depth the title of the poem. I gave four because the background and font colors made hard for me to read the poem. The poets notes helped to explain the context of the poem. If readable, I would probably say this is a five star. My 2 cents.


This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2017

---

reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017

Thanks for voicing your concerns about the font color, smbau. I made a change, just for you, as no one else but you has seemed to have had any trouble reading it.
I would appreciate you revisiting and adjusting your rating accordingly. Hopefully, and above all else, you can read it now without any trouble.
Thanks again,

Comment from donforclearn

Excellent

This poem is well written. It gives images of how words can cut. However, from harsh words and once tempers have cooled, lessons can be learned. Thus, harsh words are a two edge sword. Good Luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing your work.

This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2017

---

reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017

Thanks very much for reading, Don.
I appreciate your feedback, as always.
Take care, my friend.
~Dean

Comment from Mustang Patty

Exceptional

Yes, words can truly leave scars. They aren't the kind that can be seen or catalogued. No, instead, they are left on the heart. They leave the child broken and damaged.

Well penned and presented. Full of meaning and sadness,

~patty~

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2017

---

reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017

Thanks so much for reading, Patty.
I hurt one of my children once very badly when saying something very cruel while angry.
I vowed to never do so again.
Much obliged for the understanding and six stars.
~Dean