Sometimes Roses, Sometimes Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Morning Glory"A collection of sonnets
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Comment from Zue65
The poem is myeterious and thought provoking. I learned a lot from your author's notes, the flower itself is a metaphor as poem evokes the same mystery. The lines are lyrical, an excellent write indeed. God bless.
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The poem is myeterious and thought provoking. I learned a lot from your author's notes, the flower itself is a metaphor as poem evokes the same mystery. The lines are lyrical, an excellent write indeed. God bless.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2014
Comment from Dr. Nad
"Morning Glory" is a wonderful pastoral nature poem that brings together the Nature of spring the Nature of growth and the Nature of the divine:
"Ah yes, my morning glory you arise,
and blossom in your splendor with first light.
You crane to feel the warmth each petal spies,
and leave behind the myst'ries of the night. "
This is a nice way to memorialize a true story. Best of luck in the Contest. May God Bless You.
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"Morning Glory" is a wonderful pastoral nature poem that brings together the Nature of spring the Nature of growth and the Nature of the divine:
"Ah yes, my morning glory you arise,
and blossom in your splendor with first light.
You crane to feel the warmth each petal spies,
and leave behind the myst'ries of the night. "
This is a nice way to memorialize a true story. Best of luck in the Contest. May God Bless You.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2014
Comment from gypsycaravan
The comparison of the flower to a wicked woman comes to mind when I read your poem. The morning glory is beautiful at first glance, but can be wicked if not careful and hides the wickedness in the darkness. Beautifully phrased.
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The comparison of the flower to a wicked woman comes to mind when I read your poem. The morning glory is beautiful at first glance, but can be wicked if not careful and hides the wickedness in the darkness. Beautifully phrased.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2014
Comment from Walu Feral
Wow That is one heavy duty piece of poetry and I really enjoyed it. It's a very sultry piece of writing that is a great addition to the contest. Good luck with it and happy new year. Cheers Fez
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Wow That is one heavy duty piece of poetry and I really enjoyed it. It's a very sultry piece of writing that is a great addition to the contest. Good luck with it and happy new year. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 31-Dec-2014
Comment from tfawcus
A perfectly formed sonnet. The flower suits it most admirably in the way it provides its own turning point. And it makes a superb metaphor for the painted beauty of the day turning to the sins of the night - fatal in large doses, but mind-blowing in measured amounts!
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A perfectly formed sonnet. The flower suits it most admirably in the way it provides its own turning point. And it makes a superb metaphor for the painted beauty of the day turning to the sins of the night - fatal in large doses, but mind-blowing in measured amounts!
Comment Written 31-Dec-2014
Comment from flamingstar
Yikes, does that apply to the morning glory vine as well? They are so pretty. "I cannot tell your nightmare from my dream" is a good line. So, in your final couplet you're basically saying, "It's alright to look but don't touch"?
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Yikes, does that apply to the morning glory vine as well? They are so pretty. "I cannot tell your nightmare from my dream" is a good line. So, in your final couplet you're basically saying, "It's alright to look but don't touch"?
Comment Written 31-Dec-2014
Comment from Sanku
A very good entry for the sonnet .The poet brings out the sheer beauty of the flower and yet it hides within it a poison. Beware of the beauty that is deceptive.The ending couplet is very striking.
A very happy new Year to you and your near and dear ones.
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A very good entry for the sonnet .The poet brings out the sheer beauty of the flower and yet it hides within it a poison. Beware of the beauty that is deceptive.The ending couplet is very striking.
A very happy new Year to you and your near and dear ones.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2014
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi,
This is a really wonderful 'sixer' poem. I like the artwork and the hinting around with the double meaning--flower--woman.
The best of luck in the contest.
*Happy 2015!*
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
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Hi,
This is a really wonderful 'sixer' poem. I like the artwork and the hinting around with the double meaning--flower--woman.
The best of luck in the contest.
*Happy 2015!*
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 31-Dec-2014
Comment from kiwisteveh
You do a good job of depicting the two sides of the morning glory - the beauty and the danger. For a moment there in line 1 I thought you might be hinting at another meaning - the use of the term as slang for the male's early morning erection....
Small typo in the first line of the couplet - should've or should have - one or the other - not both.
Apart from that this is technically excellent - the iambic meter is spot on and the expression flawless. I liked stanza 2 in particular.
If I had one query, it would be about lines 11 & 12 Line 11 is a short, one-line sentence. Somehow it doesn't seem connected to the rest of the thought in this volta stanza.
Great job - should do well.
Steve
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You do a good job of depicting the two sides of the morning glory - the beauty and the danger. For a moment there in line 1 I thought you might be hinting at another meaning - the use of the term as slang for the male's early morning erection....
Small typo in the first line of the couplet - should've or should have - one or the other - not both.
Apart from that this is technically excellent - the iambic meter is spot on and the expression flawless. I liked stanza 2 in particular.
If I had one query, it would be about lines 11 & 12 Line 11 is a short, one-line sentence. Somehow it doesn't seem connected to the rest of the thought in this volta stanza.
Great job - should do well.
Steve
Comment Written 31-Dec-2014
Comment from Carole Rosa
To the author of "Morning Glory", Your poem is written very well and the presentation is beautiful. I didn't realize that morning glories were poisonous. I had them growing around my mailbox post. I could have killed the mailman!! Lovely work. Carole
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To the author of "Morning Glory", Your poem is written very well and the presentation is beautiful. I didn't realize that morning glories were poisonous. I had them growing around my mailbox post. I could have killed the mailman!! Lovely work. Carole
Comment Written 31-Dec-2014
