Cellophane Child
a fairy story ... without fairies ... (2321 words)66 total reviews
Comment from Tina McKala
hmmm, this was interesting.
great metaphor story of a journey from purple to yellow, the journey from fright to action. Your writing style was very engaging here.
Was if finally time for her to shape her own life? // was IT...
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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hmmm, this was interesting.
great metaphor story of a journey from purple to yellow, the journey from fright to action. Your writing style was very engaging here.
Was if finally time for her to shape her own life? // was IT...
Comment Written 20-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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thx so much Tina - and thx for the catch! There's always SOMETHING I miss, dammit!
:)Sharyn
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, visionary, you did an excellent job writing this story about the woman who used the power of colors to change her destiny and that of her daughter. great imagination. I would put a language warning on it. that's the only suggestion I have
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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this is very well written, visionary, you did an excellent job writing this story about the woman who used the power of colors to change her destiny and that of her daughter. great imagination. I would put a language warning on it. that's the only suggestion I have
Comment Written 20-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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There is a language warning up there sweets - I put it at a number 1 dear - :)Sharyn
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okay, I just don't see it on my end.
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I don't know how they mark it sweets - I definitely checked '1' for degree of nasties - I've only ever seen warnings on stuff that's REALLY over the top, sorry dear! :)S
Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer does a good job of grabbing the reader emotionally and taking the reader where the reader needs to go. This story is filled with emotion, a lot of sadness and grief. I like the transition between the events but what got me was the message in the ending about the color yellow. Great job and keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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The writer does a good job of grabbing the reader emotionally and taking the reader where the reader needs to go. This story is filled with emotion, a lot of sadness and grief. I like the transition between the events but what got me was the message in the ending about the color yellow. Great job and keep up the good work.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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thx RR! :)S
Comment from Gypsy Starchild
I wish that I had a six for you because you totally deserve a seven! I loved it... It sucked me in quick and kept my attention held tight! I would not change a single thing.... I am off to go tell my friends to read it too. :)
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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I wish that I had a six for you because you totally deserve a seven! I loved it... It sucked me in quick and kept my attention held tight! I would not change a single thing.... I am off to go tell my friends to read it too. :)
Comment Written 20-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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aah, now YOU "get" my story Gypsy! thank you SO much!
Blessings
Sharyn :)
Comment from Darkhorse555
i liked the part were the sky turned purple with a million shooting stars i enjoyed reading this it was an interesting piece
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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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i liked the part were the sky turned purple with a million shooting stars i enjoyed reading this it was an interesting piece
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Comment Written 20-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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thx Dh! :)Sharyn
Comment from Curly Girly
A story of a woman and her daughter. The woman uses magical powers to find an end to the men she does not like. She gets away with it too, on both counts. Such charming colours...
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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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A story of a woman and her daughter. The woman uses magical powers to find an end to the men she does not like. She gets away with it too, on both counts. Such charming colours...
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Comment Written 20-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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thx Nicole! :)Sharyn