All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "She Turns the Page"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Phyllis Stewart
As Time - she laughs, and simply turns the page.
Yes, and the older you get, the more heartless it seems. Life is good when you are young .. rather, healthy. But as we get near death most of us are sick and weakening... and dying. Should be an 'off' switch so we wouldn't have to linger this way. If I had a choice, I think I would opt out on life. I'm looking death in the face, and it's beyond depressing... but just about everyone must face it. Maybe that is why 'the good die young'.. and suddenly, without having to suffer the agony of waiting.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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As Time - she laughs, and simply turns the page.
Yes, and the older you get, the more heartless it seems. Life is good when you are young .. rather, healthy. But as we get near death most of us are sick and weakening... and dying. Should be an 'off' switch so we wouldn't have to linger this way. If I had a choice, I think I would opt out on life. I'm looking death in the face, and it's beyond depressing... but just about everyone must face it. Maybe that is why 'the good die young'.. and suddenly, without having to suffer the agony of waiting.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Agreed, absolutely, Phyllis. I just lost my friend last week. I rage sometimes - we have no choice, do we? I guess that's where this piece came from, my dear friend.
:)Sharyn
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So sorry to hear about your friend. My mom came to live with us after she'd lost her last friend. Fortunately she had her family. But there are some who are childless, never married, and all alone. I can't begin to imagine how that would be.
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nor I Phyllis - I think that's why so many old people out there look so sad. We host 10 ag farm students these days, mostly young people, AND we have a 16 year old son - I'm 60 - but no time to think about getting old yet ... I DON'T HAVE TIME!! :))
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Sharyn, good for you. Being around young people DOES help to keep us young, I know. I enjoy the high school kids who come for tutoring. When I was 60, I was still in good health, even hiked the Rocky Mts. About five years ago, I noticed I had trouble breathing after working in the garden, and I thought I had asthma for a while. Doc gave me an inhaler but didn't bother with tests. Only two years ago, after it go much worse, did I see a pulmonologist to learn I had COPD, a death sentence, incurable, but slow-moving, at least. Now, nearly 68, I can't even walk my dogs without an oxygen tank. Such a HUGE change in just a few years. Pray that you will keep your health. Once that goes, life essentially ends. Take care of yourself and get full physicials!
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I know Phyllis - I think you said only a lung transplant would help and that the cost was unthinkable. Honestly? I don't know how I could even BEGIN to live with that. I take my good health so much for granted that even tiny things drive me crazy. I do not look forward to the time when I know that won't be the case.
Comment from Righteous Riter
The rhyme scheme is effective as the rhyming is good. This piece flows well as the harmony is where it needs to be. The passion of the writer is felt as my attention is captured in the beginning and held to the end. Good job.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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The rhyme scheme is effective as the rhyming is good. This piece flows well as the harmony is where it needs to be. The passion of the writer is felt as my attention is captured in the beginning and held to the end. Good job.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Thx so much RR! :)S
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
Beautiful picture and beautiful poem. Time is one of the strangest things around, It just keeps going no matter how good or how bad something may be. good piece. God loves you and I do too.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Beautiful picture and beautiful poem. Time is one of the strangest things around, It just keeps going no matter how good or how bad something may be. good piece. God loves you and I do too.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Bless you Evelyn - hope it keeps going round dear! :)Sharyn
Comment from terry drake
The cycle of life is very well displayed in this poem for our enjoyment. You did a marvelous job with your rhyme scheme and the rhythm of this verse.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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The cycle of life is very well displayed in this poem for our enjoyment. You did a marvelous job with your rhyme scheme and the rhythm of this verse.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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thx so much terry! :)S
Comment from Curly Girly
I think that this was exceptionally well written. It read easily and flowed off the tongue effortlessly. The story-message woven into it was true too. CG
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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I think that this was exceptionally well written. It read easily and flowed off the tongue effortlessly. The story-message woven into it was true too. CG
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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bless you too CG! :)s
Comment from gazzagodbod
what a fabulous picture and you did it great service with this wonderful piece well written my friend thank you xxgazzagodbodxxx
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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what a fabulous picture and you did it great service with this wonderful piece well written my friend thank you xxgazzagodbodxxx
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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THX GAZZA - I found it quite by accident, do you believe ... and jumped on it! :)S
Comment from 3boysrule
I loved this poem! It really rings so true. I think your word choice is fabulous and really creates the tone from beginning to end. I like how the end is .... laughing. I want to be like this!
Dee
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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I loved this poem! It really rings so true. I think your word choice is fabulous and really creates the tone from beginning to end. I like how the end is .... laughing. I want to be like this!
Dee
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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thx so much Dee! :)S
Comment from nancy_e_davis
My I am glad I don't have to pick a sonnet out of all these entries. There are some really fine sonnets being entered in this contest. Very well done and adhering to all the rules. This closing couplet is my favorite.
From birth to death, it seems but naught an age
As Time - she laughs, and simply turns the page.
Yes indeed. Nancy
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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My I am glad I don't have to pick a sonnet out of all these entries. There are some really fine sonnets being entered in this contest. Very well done and adhering to all the rules. This closing couplet is my favorite.
From birth to death, it seems but naught an age
As Time - she laughs, and simply turns the page.
Yes indeed. Nancy
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Bless you, Nancy! :(Sharyn
Comment from me_tudor
Wow, you really nailed life to the wall with this one. It does seem that our Mistress Time just laughs as we try in vail to hold back Time. A wonderful poem.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Wow, you really nailed life to the wall with this one. It does seem that our Mistress Time just laughs as we try in vail to hold back Time. A wonderful poem.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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thx so much mt - yep - it sort of sucks, doesn't it? :)S
Comment from Just2Write
Beautiful Sonnet, Sharyn. From conception to conclusion, we are the puppets of time. We all die, and it is so true that we see it so much more plainly when we watch our parents and those of their generation grow frail - and we know that soon, too soon, the next generation will be watching us.
You last two lines really hold such impact:
From birth to death, it seems but naught an age
As Time - she laughs, and simply turns the page.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Beautiful Sonnet, Sharyn. From conception to conclusion, we are the puppets of time. We all die, and it is so true that we see it so much more plainly when we watch our parents and those of their generation grow frail - and we know that soon, too soon, the next generation will be watching us.
You last two lines really hold such impact:
From birth to death, it seems but naught an age
As Time - she laughs, and simply turns the page.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Bless you my dear - totally appreciated. :)S