All Those Puzzling Pieces
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Comment from Chris Tee
A night out in Paris alone becomes a tender love affair in no time and the passion is played out so beautifully. Great piece of poetic art here. Well done indeed!
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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A night out in Paris alone becomes a tender love affair in no time and the passion is played out so beautifully. Great piece of poetic art here. Well done indeed!
Comment Written 04-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Thank you Chris - this was a fun one to write!
Comment from Meta~Mark
Alone,in Paris is simply a gem and a creative and colorful masterpiece with originality and a style all it's,own the,words,and format flow perfectly and love this.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Alone,in Paris is simply a gem and a creative and colorful masterpiece with originality and a style all it's,own the,words,and format flow perfectly and love this.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Thx MM!
Comment from Silverlock
Ooh la la tres bon!
Well that's about the limit of my french!! LOL
Sensuous and evocative verse with great imagery - very nice.
Good luck in the contest ;)
Barb
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Ooh la la tres bon!
Well that's about the limit of my french!! LOL
Sensuous and evocative verse with great imagery - very nice.
Good luck in the contest ;)
Barb
Comment Written 04-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Mais merci ma cherie ... and now you've reached my limit too!
Comment from alexisleech
Bravo! Being a lover of the French, or should I say, a French lover, your beautifully erotic poem expressed the excitement and intimacy of a first meeting so well. My eyes raced down the page! Good luck in the competition, you deserve to do well. Alexis x
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Bravo! Being a lover of the French, or should I say, a French lover, your beautifully erotic poem expressed the excitement and intimacy of a first meeting so well. My eyes raced down the page! Good luck in the competition, you deserve to do well. Alexis x
Comment Written 04-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Merci Alexis! mon plaisir!
Comment from juliedickson55
Quite steamy!
Nice form and visuals in this love poem.
This could easily way-lay into erotica poetry without much coaxing.
'I feel your heat
and draw away
you feel it too
I know you do"
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Quite steamy!
Nice form and visuals in this love poem.
This could easily way-lay into erotica poetry without much coaxing.
'I feel your heat
and draw away
you feel it too
I know you do"
Comment Written 04-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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steamy is what it's meant to be Julie, so it's all good! :)
Comment from jjstar
Oh my....oo la la, baby....what a seductive piece in the most romantic setting in the world! A perfect story in a poem. It was sizzling hot and perfectly worded! Passionate love poem just doesn't cut it for this piece. Wonderful!
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Oh my....oo la la, baby....what a seductive piece in the most romantic setting in the world! A perfect story in a poem. It was sizzling hot and perfectly worded! Passionate love poem just doesn't cut it for this piece. Wonderful!
Comment Written 04-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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hey thanks jj! tried to follow the prompt and had a criminal amount of fun doing it! :)
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I'll bet you did..I'll say it again...ooo la la!
Comment from sunnilicious
Well the Number 1 condom brand is in France. So if it happens just be safe about it. It's not my personality, but I like hearing wild stories. Sensually romantic poem about a private moment. Well thought out. Descriptive with vivid imagery. Nicely done. Great job!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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Well the Number 1 condom brand is in France. So if it happens just be safe about it. It's not my personality, but I like hearing wild stories. Sensually romantic poem about a private moment. Well thought out. Descriptive with vivid imagery. Nicely done. Great job!
Comment Written 03-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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thx sunni - you do know this is fiction, right? sizzling, in black & white ???
Comment from Hitcher
I loved the direction to were going, the cascading lines was a nice touch, the visuals were slowly starting to steam and I was getting ready for the next seductive move and it stopped... Why? I would have taken it all the way friend, but that's me, I always take it all the way :) that said you pulled me in instantly and held my attention throughout and I loved what I read so well done and good luck!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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I loved the direction to were going, the cascading lines was a nice touch, the visuals were slowly starting to steam and I was getting ready for the next seductive move and it stopped... Why? I would have taken it all the way friend, but that's me, I always take it all the way :) that said you pulled me in instantly and held my attention throughout and I loved what I read so well done and good luck!
Comment Written 03-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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aaah, but the prompt tells you otherwise Hitcher! in the style of old black & white movies, right? they have one steamy kiss, then politely close the bedroom door, leaving the rest to your imagination!
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ha ha, Yes that is true, but you can still go all the way without being O.T.T and in need of a warning friend, and like i said; that's just me :) I still enjoyed every word and every seductive visual...
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you don't think it was too long? I was just thinking of getting my red pen out ...
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There is nothing wrong with the length friend, I'm one who loves lengthy poetry, it showcases the poets talents, of which you have many :)
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oh thank you - I tend to write "long" but am always afraid of being long winded!! :)
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When your write with a deft touch as you do friend there is no such thing as too long. I just posted a little... something that goes all the way, but it does not cross any lines friend, check it out... should it have a warning on it or not? i think not but i have placed one on anyway, love to hear what you think :)
Comment from Tina McKala
This was definitely a passionate write! :) I loved how you were repeating "i don`t know you", it provided the poem with some kind of a mystery and anticipation. Great job! Tina
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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This was definitely a passionate write! :) I loved how you were repeating "i don`t know you", it provided the poem with some kind of a mystery and anticipation. Great job! Tina
Comment Written 03-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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Thanks so much Tina - glad you enjoyed some purple passion - oops ! sorry! black & white! :)
Comment from Carrie Carson
Well done, made me wish for that chocolate to share, for sure. I like, too, that this meets the prompt and doesn't cross the line into vulgarity.
No spag, good form, though I'm not well versed in this style of poetry...pardon the pun.
Good luck in the contest...oh, to be in Paris...:) Carrie
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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Well done, made me wish for that chocolate to share, for sure. I like, too, that this meets the prompt and doesn't cross the line into vulgarity.
No spag, good form, though I'm not well versed in this style of poetry...pardon the pun.
Good luck in the contest...oh, to be in Paris...:) Carrie
Comment Written 03-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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Thx Carrie - this is free verse - though Paris isn't free of course ... but chocolate is always a good alternative! :)